Once upon the heart..
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Comment from sue133
Your poem is beautiful. It has everything a perfect poem should have; personification, alliteration, colourful images, smooth lilting lines and great rhyming. It is so lovely. The art work is perfect for what you have written. Susan
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2017
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Your poem is beautiful. It has everything a perfect poem should have; personification, alliteration, colourful images, smooth lilting lines and great rhyming. It is so lovely. The art work is perfect for what you have written. Susan
Comment Written 13-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2017
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Hi Sue!!! Thank you for reading and for the awesome review!!! I do appreciate it! :-)
Comment from WalkerMan
Such soulful words of longing by a faithful lover for her partner's return from business travels (or even military deployment) both tug at the heart and raise internal temperature. If people in relationships could keep communicating that way to each other as the years go by, families would be a lot stronger, for the benefit of all involved, including the children. Yet, the reality is that many -- possibly most -- of us experience such a time at some point in our lives. If we know it is temporary, it is more bearable, but never easy; and, for those who can see no hope of an end to it anytime soon, it can be devastating. You capture it all here, both with words well written and with words unsaid but implied. Superb, and beautifully illustrated in perfect representation of the theme.
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Such soulful words of longing by a faithful lover for her partner's return from business travels (or even military deployment) both tug at the heart and raise internal temperature. If people in relationships could keep communicating that way to each other as the years go by, families would be a lot stronger, for the benefit of all involved, including the children. Yet, the reality is that many -- possibly most -- of us experience such a time at some point in our lives. If we know it is temporary, it is more bearable, but never easy; and, for those who can see no hope of an end to it anytime soon, it can be devastating. You capture it all here, both with words well written and with words unsaid but implied. Superb, and beautifully illustrated in perfect representation of the theme.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2017
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oh Mike!...you have such a way with words! Thank you for taking the time to read and review this poem. I just love how you always dive right into my poetry!...you so got it!!!... thanks again!! hugs
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You are most welcome, Susan. You always go straight to the core of the matter in your poems, expressing the key elements in heartfelt manner with beautifully chosen and well combined words. That is why you get so many Sixes from me, and this one merited another. Hugs back....
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Lovely flowing metre and sentiments in your warm and ambient poem, well written, uplifting and a joy to read, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2017
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Lovely flowing metre and sentiments in your warm and ambient poem, well written, uplifting and a joy to read, love Dolly x
Comment Written 13-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2017
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Well thank you very much sweet Dolly! I appreciate you reading and the review!!! :-)
Comment from tfawcus
Love the rhythm of this piece, which is so much in tune with the content. I was also delighted to see Buckminster Fuller's proposed alternative word for sunset in your poem. Sunclipse is so much more descriptive of the event! The repetition of the first two lines in the last verse gives a nice sense of closure as well as intensifying the feeling of regret. A powerful and beautifully expressed poem.
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Love the rhythm of this piece, which is so much in tune with the content. I was also delighted to see Buckminster Fuller's proposed alternative word for sunset in your poem. Sunclipse is so much more descriptive of the event! The repetition of the first two lines in the last verse gives a nice sense of closure as well as intensifying the feeling of regret. A powerful and beautifully expressed poem.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2017
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You got that Tony!!!! I've been wanting to use that word!!...Thank you friend for this awesome review and 6 stars?? Tony! Thank you so much! I'm smiling!!
Comment from Poetic Friend
This is beautifully written. The loneliness and the longing exude from your poem.
I love your enriched word choice, personification, imagery and metaphors, especially in the second stanza.
Great job! Have a wonderful week. :)
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2017
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This is beautifully written. The loneliness and the longing exude from your poem.
I love your enriched word choice, personification, imagery and metaphors, especially in the second stanza.
Great job! Have a wonderful week. :)
Comment Written 13-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2017
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You are sweet!!! Thanks for reading and for the review!! I do appreciate it!!
Comment from chcbeck
This is a beautifully written and presented poem. The text and picture compliment your words perfectly.The flow and rhyme work perfectly.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2017
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This is a beautifully written and presented poem. The text and picture compliment your words perfectly.The flow and rhyme work perfectly.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2017
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Thank you so very much!!! I appreciate you taking the time to read and review!!! :-))))
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
Yes this is very well written a sad but romantic love poem it goes very well with the chosen picture I enjoyed well done regards Jill
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2017
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Yes this is very well written a sad but romantic love poem it goes very well with the chosen picture I enjoyed well done regards Jill
Comment Written 13-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2017
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Hi Jill! thank you for the wonderful review! I truly appreciate you taking the time to read and review!! :-))
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
An absolutely wonderful love poem of missing the one true love. The piece is excellent and flows very well. Again the double internal rhyme is very well done
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reply by the author on 14-Mar-2017
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An absolutely wonderful love poem of missing the one true love. The piece is excellent and flows very well. Again the double internal rhyme is very well done
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Comment Written 13-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2017
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Hi Barb, thank you for the review!! i so appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work!!! hugs dear!
Comment from DR DIP
Fiery blue eyes,
sets fire my thighs ...
smoldering trick's a treat. love this lol
Your poetry is beautiful Susan and that rhyme scheme is perfect. As I havesaid before to you You have a wonderful way with words Susan especially romantically a faultless write
xxdip
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Fiery blue eyes,
sets fire my thighs ...
smoldering trick's a treat. love this lol
Your poetry is beautiful Susan and that rhyme scheme is perfect. As I havesaid before to you You have a wonderful way with words Susan especially romantically a faultless write
xxdip
Comment Written 13-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2017
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I swear, a little birdie told me...Dip would like those words!! thanks for the review!! The very generous 6 stars and all the continued encouragement!!
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that little birdie knows all ! Always listen to the little birdie. lol
xxdip
Comment from patcelaw
Susan, this is beautifully worded and presented in a lovely manner. I enjoyed reading your poem, as your font is large enough for my eyes to read. Patricia
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reply by the author on 13-Mar-2017
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Susan, this is beautifully worded and presented in a lovely manner. I enjoyed reading your poem, as your font is large enough for my eyes to read. Patricia
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Comment Written 13-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2017
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Hi Pat, what's going on with your eyes???
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I have macular degeneration ans am slowly losing my sight.
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Oh pat! i am so very sorry!!! Prayers to you...hopefully doctors can slow the process. hugs