Unyielding Trial
on mental health41 total reviews
Comment from c_lucas
A fitting end to this well written poem. Some dreams have a bad habit of working their ways into your reality. Your colorful words brings your dreams to life.
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A fitting end to this well written poem. Some dreams have a bad habit of working their ways into your reality. Your colorful words brings your dreams to life.
Comment Written 19-Jun-2017
Comment from Pantygynt
This makes no claim to be anything but "freeform" so I will refrain from judging it as a haibun which I thought at first it was, but the "prose" part is probably too long for that title to be appropriate. The style too is more of a prose poem with a 5-7-5 stuck on the end.
Whatever its official classification may be, it is nevertheless a grephic description of something of which you admit to having had no first hand experience. As I am thankfully in the same boat as far as that is concerned I can only comment on the literary experience, which was excellent.
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This makes no claim to be anything but "freeform" so I will refrain from judging it as a haibun which I thought at first it was, but the "prose" part is probably too long for that title to be appropriate. The style too is more of a prose poem with a 5-7-5 stuck on the end.
Whatever its official classification may be, it is nevertheless a grephic description of something of which you admit to having had no first hand experience. As I am thankfully in the same boat as far as that is concerned I can only comment on the literary experience, which was excellent.
Comment Written 19-Jun-2017
Comment from mvbrooks
This story/poem is a very accurate depiction of the loneliness/separation people feel and phrases like "The monsters come. There is no closet to hide." are both poetic and realistic. The sadness of the line "where dreams once danced" is haunting.
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This story/poem is a very accurate depiction of the loneliness/separation people feel and phrases like "The monsters come. There is no closet to hide." are both poetic and realistic. The sadness of the line "where dreams once danced" is haunting.
Comment Written 19-Jun-2017
Comment from royowen
I know what it feels like, you want to die, and fear that you won't. I had an eighteen month period when when my first love rejected me, then my best friend committed suicide, in those days there was no one who'd listen, not even my mother. I lost weight, (I wasn't heavy anyway) I was near joining my friend in death. But somehow hope is never dead, and I guess it was that hope that defeated it in the end. It was probably situational, but I never want to go back, nor did I find out, I was eighteen. Beautifully written, vividly described, it's a marvellous definition and great presentation in articulate free verse, Jimi, well done, blessings, Roy
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I know what it feels like, you want to die, and fear that you won't. I had an eighteen month period when when my first love rejected me, then my best friend committed suicide, in those days there was no one who'd listen, not even my mother. I lost weight, (I wasn't heavy anyway) I was near joining my friend in death. But somehow hope is never dead, and I guess it was that hope that defeated it in the end. It was probably situational, but I never want to go back, nor did I find out, I was eighteen. Beautifully written, vividly described, it's a marvellous definition and great presentation in articulate free verse, Jimi, well done, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 19-Jun-2017
Comment from Anio
jlsavell I'm speechless ........ Are you an 'empath'? It must be so, or is it a Poet who sees inside others to this degree? It's so 'right on target, so correct' it's almost too hard to believe that you haven't had this experience yourself. I like the way you write your poems. I find this interesting and it is a style that resonates with me and the way I write in my journals.
The song at the end is what it feels like to come out of a bout of depression. The words, the music, the images unfolding as they do - just like it. Just like coming out of a nightmare.
Extraordinary capture of the state of depression and its ending. Anita
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jlsavell I'm speechless ........ Are you an 'empath'? It must be so, or is it a Poet who sees inside others to this degree? It's so 'right on target, so correct' it's almost too hard to believe that you haven't had this experience yourself. I like the way you write your poems. I find this interesting and it is a style that resonates with me and the way I write in my journals.
The song at the end is what it feels like to come out of a bout of depression. The words, the music, the images unfolding as they do - just like it. Just like coming out of a nightmare.
Extraordinary capture of the state of depression and its ending. Anita
Comment Written 19-Jun-2017
Comment from Dawn Munro
Jimi, I am bawling like a baby for the incredible understanding these masterful words convey of an affliction so terribly debilitating. This is magnificent writing - the best of the best, IMHO, and I wish I had the power to nominate for POM! (First and only time I've said that about any specific poem.)
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Jimi, I am bawling like a baby for the incredible understanding these masterful words convey of an affliction so terribly debilitating. This is magnificent writing - the best of the best, IMHO, and I wish I had the power to nominate for POM! (First and only time I've said that about any specific poem.)
Comment Written 19-Jun-2017
Comment from Caressa_08
Really and truly it would seem like black dogs that hang around....And, sometimes the so-called cure, is worse than their depression and there are also the horrid shock treatments that some were given as a mandatory escape of time to forget what they know by this barbaric remedy, to lose chunks of memory forever, and even the good things that went on in their life...tricking their brains to not regress or recall of how they ever got so depressed, and believe its so wrong to use this type of treatment especially on teens.. I think, too, it is still going on this day & age of trying to find quick fixes for about everything....and little studies done in to see how patients who were given this so called cure, if only they were given a more natural approach...possibly, how better an outcome could have resulted for so many.
Thanks for sharing an it was a worthwhile read for me...Caressa_08
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Really and truly it would seem like black dogs that hang around....And, sometimes the so-called cure, is worse than their depression and there are also the horrid shock treatments that some were given as a mandatory escape of time to forget what they know by this barbaric remedy, to lose chunks of memory forever, and even the good things that went on in their life...tricking their brains to not regress or recall of how they ever got so depressed, and believe its so wrong to use this type of treatment especially on teens.. I think, too, it is still going on this day & age of trying to find quick fixes for about everything....and little studies done in to see how patients who were given this so called cure, if only they were given a more natural approach...possibly, how better an outcome could have resulted for so many.
Thanks for sharing an it was a worthwhile read for me...Caressa_08
Comment Written 19-Jun-2017
Comment from Mustang Patty
thank you for sharing your glimpse into the heart of darkness where the black dog lives. I suffer from bipolar disorder and my depressive periods are very bleak. Thank goodness they have found a formula of medicines to work and I haven't suffered through the darkness for over six months.
~patty~
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thank you for sharing your glimpse into the heart of darkness where the black dog lives. I suffer from bipolar disorder and my depressive periods are very bleak. Thank goodness they have found a formula of medicines to work and I haven't suffered through the darkness for over six months.
~patty~
Comment Written 19-Jun-2017
Comment from FxstsLisa
I loved this freeform poem on mental health, nice work! You captured what its like to feel this way. I suffered from depression and still take medication but haven't been depressed for over a year. I think some people think its when you just have a bad day. I experienced where I felt like my legs had led in them and it was a chore just to walk. I also would just start crying for no reason. However, the price I paid for no depression is I now have anxiety. Counseling affected my memory, and I get anxious because I can't remember what were talking about and get more anxious. Its definitely a problem but the depression was worse. It doesn't affect my 'writing' though and for that I am grateful!
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I loved this freeform poem on mental health, nice work! You captured what its like to feel this way. I suffered from depression and still take medication but haven't been depressed for over a year. I think some people think its when you just have a bad day. I experienced where I felt like my legs had led in them and it was a chore just to walk. I also would just start crying for no reason. However, the price I paid for no depression is I now have anxiety. Counseling affected my memory, and I get anxious because I can't remember what were talking about and get more anxious. Its definitely a problem but the depression was worse. It doesn't affect my 'writing' though and for that I am grateful!
Comment Written 18-Jun-2017
Comment from Wabigoon
UJImi--
This is familiar, of course. Nice to see you though every time I do you look totally different. Ah, you know this story as well, I know this. And about half of it sounds like my last post about The Flood and...really. really! If you are going to describe this then you have to be daring enough to fight it. You have to aim your gun at these religious assholes who inflict this and really fight. All I see you doing is describing. Well, good for you! You do it well. You do it so it feels like hell, to quote somebody famous. Pick up a weapon and fight back!
Best
Wabigoon/Jeff
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UJImi--
This is familiar, of course. Nice to see you though every time I do you look totally different. Ah, you know this story as well, I know this. And about half of it sounds like my last post about The Flood and...really. really! If you are going to describe this then you have to be daring enough to fight it. You have to aim your gun at these religious assholes who inflict this and really fight. All I see you doing is describing. Well, good for you! You do it well. You do it so it feels like hell, to quote somebody famous. Pick up a weapon and fight back!
Best
Wabigoon/Jeff
Comment Written 18-Jun-2017