Comment from Phyllis Stewart

Excellent

So it may be possible for Shana to choose Drew over her religion and tradition. She would have to love him more. If she didn't, he would not be happy with her anyway. I think Shana will come around.

 Comment Written 04-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 04-Feb-2018

I hope she does. Thank you for the kind review.

Comment from apky

Excellent

Your story continues to compel the reader to want more, the writing excellent. It looks like the romance sizzling between Shana and Anderson might soon be unfettered. I'm keeping my fingers crossed for them.

My suggestions are below, and well done.

"Thank you." Shane(Shana) stared at the floor

"Better not(add-,) I've already had five."

I spent most (of) the night with her

(I've haven't- this double negative needs fixing - one can't say "I have have not") seen the stubborn side of Shana.

 Comment Written 04-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 04-Feb-2018

I have made the corrections. Thank you for the catches.

Comment from Sugarray77

Excellent

A good commentary and dialogue between characters. This flows well and keeps a steady pace with your theme and character development. Very good! Regards.

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 Comment Written 04-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 04-Feb-2018

Thank you for the kind review.

Comment from BermyBye50

Excellent

Barbara,

An excellent chapter addition to your novel. Its curiously captivating and a enjoyable read. I admire you ability to weave so many characters in a thought provoking story..

All the best,

Eugene



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 Comment Written 04-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 04-Feb-2018

Thank you for the kind review.