Of Memory's Touch and Forget-Me-Nots
A Contest Entry written in the form of a Sestina35 total reviews
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written sestina and an excellent love poem of a true love that stood the time to the end in sickness and health. The one remembers well while the other one has forget the times in fields with forget-me-nots.
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2018
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A very well-written sestina and an excellent love poem of a true love that stood the time to the end in sickness and health. The one remembers well while the other one has forget the times in fields with forget-me-nots.
Comment Written 24-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2018
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Hello Sandra,
So pleased you enjoyed my sestina.
Thank you for your excellent rating and thoughtful review...
Comment from Swampfox1
I love the storyline, if you will, of how you wrote of the woman's memory. Someone goes through something similar almost every day in this world because of someone losing their memory. great poem. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2018
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I love the storyline, if you will, of how you wrote of the woman's memory. Someone goes through something similar almost every day in this world because of someone losing their memory. great poem. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 24-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2018
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Hello Swampfox1,
So pleased you enjoyed my sestina.
Thank you for your excellent rating and thoughtful review...
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you're welcome
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Hi - This is very long and I enjoyed every bit of it. A very moving, well written account of someone with Alzheimer's. The protagonist tells the story with much feeling. I loved the ending - for a fleeting moment the memory returns and the woman mutters 'I will' - is she accepting the marriage proposal made so long ago?. We are not told but the way the words evolve in this poem, I'm pretty sure she is. A good story of a love that has withstood the test of time and trial. Very well done - good luck in the contest. Warm regards Dorothy
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2018
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Hi - This is very long and I enjoyed every bit of it. A very moving, well written account of someone with Alzheimer's. The protagonist tells the story with much feeling. I loved the ending - for a fleeting moment the memory returns and the woman mutters 'I will' - is she accepting the marriage proposal made so long ago?. We are not told but the way the words evolve in this poem, I'm pretty sure she is. A good story of a love that has withstood the test of time and trial. Very well done - good luck in the contest. Warm regards Dorothy
Comment Written 24-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2018
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Hello Dorothy,
So honored by your exceptional rating and thoughtful review.
Yes, in a fleeting moment, she remembers his face, the forget-me-nots, and his proposal...
Sestinas are long; of that I am certain. But I love the challenge of penning them and the stories they have the ability to weave...
Comment from His Grayness
First, i wish to thank this author for such a lovely example of this 'to me" very uncommon, unknown, style of poetry, so very nicely delivered! I enjoyed it very much and of course, I cannot offer any suggestions to improve it in any way. HIS GRAYNESS; Vance
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2018
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First, i wish to thank this author for such a lovely example of this 'to me" very uncommon, unknown, style of poetry, so very nicely delivered! I enjoyed it very much and of course, I cannot offer any suggestions to improve it in any way. HIS GRAYNESS; Vance
Comment Written 24-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2018
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Hello Vance,
My pleasure!
Sestinas are rather tricky and challenging to pen, but can be rewarding!
Thank you for your excellent rating and complimentary review!
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You are totally welcome! My thanks! Vance
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Much appreciated! keep them coming! Vance
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Thank you, for the delight! Vance
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The thanks all belong to you! Vance
Comment from Artasylum
What an amazingly behemoth undertaking. What a beautifully penned piece you have here. Forget-me-nots, perfect. looking forward to reading more of your words. yours, diana
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2018
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What an amazingly behemoth undertaking. What a beautifully penned piece you have here. Forget-me-nots, perfect. looking forward to reading more of your words. yours, diana
Comment Written 24-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2018
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Hello Diana,
Once the words are selected and the writer has a semblance of story, a sestina can come together rather easily... or not! :)
Thank you for your excellent rating and complimentary review.
Comment from MelB
I wish I had six stars to give this beautiful and well written Sestina poem. It is true to form and a sentimental love poem. So difficult when loved ones lose their memory.
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2018
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I wish I had six stars to give this beautiful and well written Sestina poem. It is true to form and a sentimental love poem. So difficult when loved ones lose their memory.
Comment Written 24-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2018
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Hello MelB,
What a kind and thoughtful review.
Thank you for your excellent rating and for appreciating my offering!
Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
Sestina-wow, I had never heard of this type of poetry. It is very posaic but does not suffer for that. It is quite brilliant though as I said more to me like prose than a poem. Thankyou for educating me with this new form and fabulous writing kindest regards Meia xx
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2018
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Sestina-wow, I had never heard of this type of poetry. It is very posaic but does not suffer for that. It is quite brilliant though as I said more to me like prose than a poem. Thankyou for educating me with this new form and fabulous writing kindest regards Meia xx
Comment Written 24-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2018
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Hello Meia,
There is a prose-like quality to sestinas as they tell a story with six chosen words repeated throughout the offering. One of these days, I am going to attempt one that comes out short and sweet!
Thank you for your excellent rating and review.
Comment from Boogienights
This us a wonderful love story, both sweet and sad at the same time. It reminds me of 'The Notebook' one of my favorite movies.It's very touching and I feel it will do well in the contest .
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2018
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This us a wonderful love story, both sweet and sad at the same time. It reminds me of 'The Notebook' one of my favorite movies.It's very touching and I feel it will do well in the contest .
Comment Written 24-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2018
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Hello Friend,
Some of the images I drew upon for this piece are from my parents' lives/marriage... I selfishly hope that when it is my time to go, my death is quick...
Thank you for your excellent rating and review!
Comment from BermyBye50
Wow! You've met the challenge of this contest write and them some. I beautifully written poem allowing the reader to join you as you walk down memory lane of the love that has lasted a lifetime.
All the best in the contest. This might just be the winner.
Eugene
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2018
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Wow! You've met the challenge of this contest write and them some. I beautifully written poem allowing the reader to join you as you walk down memory lane of the love that has lasted a lifetime.
All the best in the contest. This might just be the winner.
Eugene
Comment Written 23-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2018
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Hello Eugene!
I am honored by your exceptional rating and complimentary review.
So very appreciated!
Comment from karenina
Before I review, please do me the honor of reading my one and only sestina called "For One As Beautiful As You"....written in 2010 I think mut in my portfolio....
It was not a contest bt it was a labor of love and I'd love the opinion of one who has in my opinion mastered the form as evidenced above.
I am smitten with this poem. My dear Memere' dies of Alzheimer's at 98...I was a nurse for thirty years specializing in dementia and Alzheimer's care...
There is a poignant melancholy bt ultimately victorious tone to your poem that
personifies what I have witnessed (not often enough) between two who shared a very different life and one, but one, who recalls it in full...
Nancy Reagan calls Alzheimer's "The Long Goodbye" and it is....
To write a love poem, not use the obvious cliche words and CHOOSE the Sestina as your form...and then (oh beauitful writer of dreams and heaven) to make that love poem abouta couple dealing with Alzheimer's (for both are afflicted though one is diagnosed)---
This is special. This is very very special.
Karenina
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2018
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Before I review, please do me the honor of reading my one and only sestina called "For One As Beautiful As You"....written in 2010 I think mut in my portfolio....
It was not a contest bt it was a labor of love and I'd love the opinion of one who has in my opinion mastered the form as evidenced above.
I am smitten with this poem. My dear Memere' dies of Alzheimer's at 98...I was a nurse for thirty years specializing in dementia and Alzheimer's care...
There is a poignant melancholy bt ultimately victorious tone to your poem that
personifies what I have witnessed (not often enough) between two who shared a very different life and one, but one, who recalls it in full...
Nancy Reagan calls Alzheimer's "The Long Goodbye" and it is....
To write a love poem, not use the obvious cliche words and CHOOSE the Sestina as your form...and then (oh beauitful writer of dreams and heaven) to make that love poem abouta couple dealing with Alzheimer's (for both are afflicted though one is diagnosed)---
This is special. This is very very special.
Karenina
Comment Written 23-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2018
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Hello Karenina!
I so appreciated your sestina. Perfect in every way, and the lines are far shorter than mine = congratulations! My goal is to write one that is so heavy with words!
Thank you for your excellent rating and thoughtful review!
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How kind of you to read YHIS for me...it is a rigorous form which success depends largely on the original choice of words to be repeated! Yours was great!
Karenina