Comment from Kathy Franklin

Excellent

Daring! Do you cower at lightning now? All kidding aside, your poem adds excitement to an ancient story. Plus, you made me look up a word: singultus. I've added it to my list of favorite words, right before susurrus. The rhymes are enjoyable and the cadence is good.

 Comment Written 13-Jun-2018

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reply by the author on 13-Jun-2018

Thanks very much, Kathy. Cower from lightning? As far as I know, I haven't ticked Zeus off lately ;-) Most grateful, Craig

Comment from damommy

Excellent

Quite a good poem describing the Creation. Good rhyme and meter. I saw a bit of mixed meter thrown in which added interest to the beat. I've never seen the Creation told in such a short, clear way, but you did it very well. Excellent photo chosen.

I think God has had 'do overs' occasionally, such as the Great Flood and other times. We just never seem to get the message. 8-)

I'm sorry. I forgot to mention that I have never heard the work 'singultus' before. Interesting. Now I can make my hiccups seem classy by saying I'm 'singultusing.' lol

 Comment Written 13-Jun-2018

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reply by the author on 13-Jun-2018

Next time I see you singultusing, I'll supply you with a nice glass of dioxide of hydrogen -- that will fix it :) Many thanks for the lovely review, Craig

reply by damommy on 13-Jun-2018

LOL. Thanks.

reply by the author on 13-Jun-2018

Oops, my high school chemistry teacher would expel me. Water is dihydrogen oxide, not hydrogen dioxide :)

Comment from Julie Goodswen

Excellent

I enjoyed the poem but was confused at the end by the names used, which obviously mean more to the author than to me but I still gave it five stars as I enjoyed reading it.

 Comment Written 13-Jun-2018

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reply by the author on 13-Jun-2018

Glad you enjoyed, Julie. Thanks for reviewing - Craig

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

A fabulous write, fantastic flow and rhymes and a sheer joy to read. A magical mystery write with well chosen words and I thoroughly enjoyed it, out of sixes, sorry, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 13-Jun-2018

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reply by the author on 13-Jun-2018

Thanks for the lovely review, Dolly. Most grateful - Craig

Comment from kiwijenny

Excellent

Ha ha what you do with words is fascinating....maybe that's why golf was invented.....mulligan do over ...I can see GOD Elohim getting teed off with man a lot
I love learning new words singultus....mine come in series never single
Ha
God bless

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 Comment Written 13-Jun-2018

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reply by the author on 13-Jun-2018

Thanks so much for the fun review. I can't remember the last time I had an attack of the hiccups. Cheers, Craig

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A very well-written poem about the creation of heaven and earth and all on it by the great creator God whose intentions to make man was pure and right, the only mistake God made was to give man a free will.

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 Comment Written 13-Jun-2018

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reply by the author on 13-Jun-2018

Thanks, Sandra. Your continued support in reviewing is very much appreciated - Craig