Comment from Sugarray77

Excellent

Great poetry. You build up to your point and support it beautifully. I would mention that in the third paragraph it seems that the word Earth needs to have 'reflects' changed with an 's' added. Just sayin. Good job.

 Comment Written 07-Oct-2018

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reply by the author on 07-Oct-2018

You know, I have read that line over and over, trying to decide if it should be "reflect", or "reflects" (even before your suggestion). I'm still undecided. Since I'm thinking I might like to include this piece in a collection, it's important to me to get it right, so I thank you for bringing this forward. Would you be offended if I took a poll in the forum on this? I'd like to see what the consensus of opinion is.

Many thanks for the most kind comments :)

Craig

reply by Sugarray77 on 07-Oct-2018

Sure. Sounds like a great move on this question. Melissa

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A very well-written poem about the wonder of nature and how well it was plannned and executed that everything in nature happens at the right time day after day and year after year.

 Comment Written 07-Oct-2018

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reply by the author on 07-Oct-2018

Thanks very much, Sandra. I'm most grateful for your continued support. Craig

Comment from dragonpoet

Excellent

This free verse poem with internal and end repetition and end rhyme at the end of each stanza tells of the creation of earth and moon. It also tells how we are destroying the beauty of the light the the sun, moon and stars give us. It also tells of the importance to navigation of the heavenly bodies of light.

Keep writing

Joan

 Comment Written 07-Oct-2018

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reply by the author on 07-Oct-2018

Thanks very much, Joan. Most grateful for your comments, and continued support. Craig

reply by dragonpoet on 08-Oct-2018

You are so welcome, Craig.

Joan

Comment from Artasylum

Exceptional

Well done you... this is wonderful and reads smoothly. Presentation is good with the subject that is compelling... so I think someday has come and we are shining. thanks. diana

 Comment Written 07-Oct-2018

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reply by the author on 07-Oct-2018

Thank you, Diana, for the lovely compliments, and the beautiful shiny stars. I think we've got a long way to go :) Much appreciated, Craig

Comment from Cindy McIntyre

Excellent

What a wonderful poem. I love the deep meaning and the soul-searching feeling it evokes. The line, "primates hurling feces" was very powerful and thought-provoking. I enjoyed how you highlighted the word "we." A well-written and crafted poem.

 Comment Written 07-Oct-2018

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reply by the author on 07-Oct-2018

Thanks for the lovely comments, Cindy. They're much appreciated. Craig

Comment from Y. M. Roger

Excellent

Well, now there is a certainly deep and introspective and, dare I say, condemning write ... definitely one that should have the reader sitting up and taking note of themselves and, perhaps, past actions. :) Thanx for that wonderful 'wake up' call! :) Yvette :)

 Comment Written 07-Oct-2018

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reply by the author on 07-Oct-2018

Thanks, Yvette. I'll try to moderate the darker stuff with a few chuckles in between ;-) Most grateful, Craig

Comment from Pantygynt

Excellent

Unfortunately I am not well enough versed in Poe's work to know of which of his works this is a parody. But it certainly works remarkably well and revels in cross and internal rhyme forms with faultless rhythm. I read it aloud with gfreat delight. The breadth of your vocabulary is greatly to be admired.

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reply by the author on 07-Oct-2018

It's not a parody, but the form (meter and rhyme) is that used by Poe in The Raven (or at least, it's meant to be). Thanks for the most kind comments, PG. I truly appreciate them.

Comment from Mustang Patty

Excellent

Hi, Craig,

I love the starkness of the picture and the deep thoughts about 'what is out there?' It is always a treat to read your work, along with the others who can write about the world without a deity.

The unvarnished truth about our planet, and the universe is so unthinkable to some - and a struggle for those who believe in a different system,

~MP~

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reply by the author on 07-Oct-2018

Thanks for the most thoughtful, and kind, review Patty. Yes, I find it hard to comprehend how a lot of people resolve what their senses tell them with what they believe. Still, they probably find my viewpoint equally inscrutable lol

Most grateful, Craig

Comment from BeasPeas

Excellent

Hi Craig. The rhyming in your poem is outstanding with internal difficult rhyming and wonderful end rhyming as well. I like the concept of starshine/moonshine/earthshine. In stanza four your poem takes a different turn and focuses on human violence. Can we ever evolve into human beings giving full compassion or understanding? If we haven't done so up until now, I doubt we will. Marilyn

 Comment Written 07-Oct-2018

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reply by the author on 07-Oct-2018

I fear you're right, Marilyn. Many thanks once again, Craig

Comment from bichonfrisegirl

Excellent

Hi Craig,

It's hopeful to think that one day 'we' will shine, considering how politeness and kindness seems to have gone out of style. I truly believe that mankind is the most selfish and mean of all living species on Earth. Great concluding line, Craig, and I love how you highlighted 'we'.

Your poem gives your reader much to ponder. My favorite line is "Just more primates hurling feces, our behavior asinine?". Very well written and presented.

Cheers,
Connie

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reply by the author on 07-Oct-2018

Thanks for the lovely comments and thoughtful insights, Connie. I quite liked that line too, I think it puts us in our rightful place lol Most grateful, Craig