Comment from Liberty Justice

Excellent

SO beautifully woven, my dear poetry friend. You told a story poem in your verses, and perhaps, you alluded to yourself. Seems you might have broken the hold someone has on you. Read my writings also. liberty justice WELL DONE.

 Comment Written 23-Jan-2019

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reply by the author on 23-Jan-2019

Thanks for the very kind words. It's more a general commentary on the things we encounter as we go through life, than specifically about one particular person or event, although it's presented that way. Cheers, Craig

Comment from Louise Michelle

Excellent

I have to commend you on the originality of this poem, comparing insects following their instincts to humans trapped in relationships.

I guess some people are drawn to each other even if they may be bad for each other. At least we humans can reason our way out. Good writing! Lou

 Comment Written 23-Jan-2019

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reply by the author on 23-Jan-2019

Thanks very much for the kind words, Lou. On a cosmic scale, I guess humans are insects :) Most grateful, Craig

Comment from Abby Wilson-hand

Excellent

nice write my friend
spiders scare my husband and
I giggle at him

 Comment Written 23-Jan-2019

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reply by the author on 23-Jan-2019

They don't particularly scare me, although I have a healthy respect, as I'm highly allergic to all venom, in so far as I know; and many of our species are highly toxic. But we regularly have spiders as houseguests for weeks at a time. Many thanks, Craig

Comment from Pearl Edwards

Excellent

Great comparisons in this the moth to the flame, trapped in the spider's web and trapped in a love affair that he finally escapes.
Great closing couplet Craig and a great read,
cheers,
valda

 Comment Written 23-Jan-2019

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reply by the author on 23-Jan-2019

Thanks very much for the lovely comments, Valda. Most appreciated. Cheers, Craig

Comment from zanya

Exceptional

What an interesting reflection here within the lines of the classic Sonnet format -who knows why we are like the moth in its 'headlong rush ' ...'to candle's flame'- a beautifully sculpted piece of art leaving the reader with much to ponder

 Comment Written 23-Jan-2019

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reply by the author on 23-Jan-2019

Thanks so much for the super comments and the delightful rating. I'm most grateful for both -- Craig

Comment from tfawcus

Exceptional

A very fine sonnet. How easy it is to become entrapped, and how hard to free ourselves again. A sharp turning point in the third verse is the making of this, and you have a most satisfying closing couplet. A strong submission for the contest.

 Comment Written 22-Jan-2019

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reply by the author on 23-Jan-2019

Thank you so much for the delightful rating and the generous comments, Tony. Both mean a lot. Cheers, Craig

Comment from Tootie

Excellent

This is really good. Well written and great presentation. Made me think and I like that. Like the title too. Wishing you the best in the contest. Blessings, Cathy

 Comment Written 22-Jan-2019

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reply by the author on 23-Jan-2019

Thanks for the lovely comments and the good wishes, Cathy. I appreciate both. Cheers, Craig

Comment from diamondbogle

Excellent

I loved this. Excellent work here. I think everything flows nicely, it works well. I think we all want to fade away sometimes especially from the things that we feel control us. At least I know I do sometimes.

 Comment Written 22-Jan-2019

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reply by the author on 23-Jan-2019

I think you're right. Many thanks for the very kind and supportive comments. Craig

Comment from kahpot

Excellent

What a wonderful Sonnet, I am going to keep this one as I am trying to write one, I should say improve or get the damn thing right! I read the story in these words with excellent rhyme and flow, very well written for such a hard poem to create, best wishes for your contest****kahpot

 Comment Written 22-Jan-2019

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reply by the author on 23-Jan-2019

Thanks so much, Kahpot, for the kind words and good wishes. Good to hear from you, and best of luck with your own sonnet :) Cheers, Craig

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

Great job with the sonnet, Craig. I like the metaphor of the dangerous light that attracts the moth to its capture for the unhappy love relationship. Wish you well in the contest!

 Comment Written 22-Jan-2019

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reply by the author on 23-Jan-2019

Thanks for the good wishes and kind words, Helen. Much appreciated, Craig