The French Letter
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Comment from sunnilicious
That was a very forward woman and so playful with the gelato. Enjoyable to read, but I was scared for you. Dramatic scene change from 54 to 55. Good unfolding of events. Well thought out and clearly written. Nice installment. Keep up the great work :)
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2019
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That was a very forward woman and so playful with the gelato. Enjoyable to read, but I was scared for you. Dramatic scene change from 54 to 55. Good unfolding of events. Well thought out and clearly written. Nice installment. Keep up the great work :)
Comment Written 26-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2019
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Thanks for the review. She's always been a bit of a tease - and Charles falls for it every time!
Comment from Ulla
Hi Tony, as you know, I love this story and all it's convoluted ins and outs. So now Charles is making conversation with his 'shadow'. What on earth next is going to happen? All the best. Ulla:))
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2019
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Hi Tony, as you know, I love this story and all it's convoluted ins and outs. So now Charles is making conversation with his 'shadow'. What on earth next is going to happen? All the best. Ulla:))
Comment Written 26-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2019
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Thanks, Ulla. I'm not sure what Charles is getting himself into here, but He may have to be quick-witted to survive.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
You always deserve a six, but by Wednesday I'm always out. So, virtual six I'm afraid. First off, I laughed my socks off at the limp shirt hung out to dry, and you, too! LOL. This is getting more and more interesting, where has Helen dashed off too, and who was Kayla having such an intense conversation with? I can't wait to find out all the answers. Well done again, Tony, this is a brilliant book. :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2019
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You always deserve a six, but by Wednesday I'm always out. So, virtual six I'm afraid. First off, I laughed my socks off at the limp shirt hung out to dry, and you, too! LOL. This is getting more and more interesting, where has Helen dashed off too, and who was Kayla having such an intense conversation with? I can't wait to find out all the answers. Well done again, Tony, this is a brilliant book. :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 26-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2019
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Many thanks for your review, Sandra. It seems that Kayla was deep in conversation with one of the two goons that spent so much time following Charles and Helen. An unhealthy connection. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Sally Law
$133.81 smackers for a shirt to jog in--is highway robbery! I am told Europeans dress better than Americans and I see why. We know that Helen is being surveilled by the man reading La Monde. I wasn't sure who he was. Still, a fine chapter with continued feelings brewing within Charles towards Helen.
All my best,
Sal :+)
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2019
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$133.81 smackers for a shirt to jog in--is highway robbery! I am told Europeans dress better than Americans and I see why. We know that Helen is being surveilled by the man reading La Monde. I wasn't sure who he was. Still, a fine chapter with continued feelings brewing within Charles towards Helen.
All my best,
Sal :+)
Comment Written 26-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2019
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Many thanks for your review, Sally. Yes, it does seem a bit expensive, especially considering that it was half-price. The sort of shop I'd tend to avoid! The shop does actually exist, and that was one of the items in their sale catalogue. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from giraffmang
Hi Tony,
Another engrossing read.
A glossary for those in the New World? I like that too. I once did a glossary of Northern Irish terms for those folk and they got lost very early on. lol
Well, the plot thickens and it'll be interesting to see what becomes from this meeting with Kayla.
Love this work
G
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2019
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Hi Tony,
Another engrossing read.
A glossary for those in the New World? I like that too. I once did a glossary of Northern Irish terms for those folk and they got lost very early on. lol
Well, the plot thickens and it'll be interesting to see what becomes from this meeting with Kayla.
Love this work
G
Comment Written 26-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2019
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Many thanks for your review, G., and for the sixth star. Always appreciated. I've gone through and tightened a few sentences this morning. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from C. Gale Burnett
Tony, this is, by-far, worth more than six stars, and I don't even have six stars :(
I am enjoying the build-up of suspense. I really do enjoy the story being told in first person, expressing all the narrator's thoughts and feeling. As always, your expressive words make each chapter come alive ... setting, characters, thoughts, feelings.
Truly EXCEPTIONAL.
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2019
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Tony, this is, by-far, worth more than six stars, and I don't even have six stars :(
I am enjoying the build-up of suspense. I really do enjoy the story being told in first person, expressing all the narrator's thoughts and feeling. As always, your expressive words make each chapter come alive ... setting, characters, thoughts, feelings.
Truly EXCEPTIONAL.
Comment Written 26-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2019
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Many thanks for your review, Gale. You are always so encouraging. It does a power of good on the days when I wonder why I'm persisting with this! Much appreciated. Best wishes, Tony
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Tony, your writing is 'always' exceptional; don't you ever stop :) Sincerely, Gale
Comment from Pearl Edwards
Clever writing in the opening paragraphs, with both Charles and his shirt being limp and dejected. It's getting complicated for Charles, playing both sisters. Much intrigue, wondering where this will take him next.
cheers,
valda
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2019
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Clever writing in the opening paragraphs, with both Charles and his shirt being limp and dejected. It's getting complicated for Charles, playing both sisters. Much intrigue, wondering where this will take him next.
cheers,
valda
Comment Written 26-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2019
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Thanks very much for the sixth star, Valda. Much appreciated. Charles is walking a tightrope at the moment. Not sure which way he will fall. I don't think he has a safety net at this stage.
Comment from Alex Rosel
Having read the previous chapter, I was looking forward to reading this. Thank you for posting it. :)
If this was my draft, I'd look to rework it in places to give a little more pace to the narrative. For example:
"...there was a scribbled note on the kitchen table saying she had slipped out for a while but would be back soon."
Perhaps something like this might have more impact:
"there was a scribbled note on the kitchen table. It said,Gone out. Be back soon. H. xxx"
In itself, this is only a minor change, but if you include a number of pace enhancing revisions I think your narrative will flow better.
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reply by the author on 26-Apr-2019
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Having read the previous chapter, I was looking forward to reading this. Thank you for posting it. :)
If this was my draft, I'd look to rework it in places to give a little more pace to the narrative. For example:
"...there was a scribbled note on the kitchen table saying she had slipped out for a while but would be back soon."
Perhaps something like this might have more impact:
"there was a scribbled note on the kitchen table. It said,
In itself, this is only a minor change, but if you include a number of pace enhancing revisions I think your narrative will flow better.
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 26-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2019
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Thanks, Alex. That's a good change. I'll look through the chapter again and see if I can find other ways of tightening it. All the best, Tony
Comment from Tootsie55
This was another interesting chapter. Here are some suggestions for changes and a couple of spags. Repetitious No? my pace soon subsided to a more gentlemanly pace(walk? or step? stroll even?).she thought t[o](he) slogan was.
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reply by the author on 26-Apr-2019
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This was another interesting chapter. Here are some suggestions for changes and a couple of spags. Repetitious No? my pace soon subsided to a more gentlemanly pace(walk? or step? stroll even?).she thought t[o](he) slogan was.
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Comment Written 26-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2019
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Thanks very much for casting an eye over this. Unbelievable how these crass errors slip through, even after proof-reading several times. Just goes to show how valuable it is to have a fresh pair of eyes to help. All the best, Tony