The French Letter
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Comment from royowen
So more unravelling is going on, with Kayla sharing not only the fact that Andre had been carted off by some mysterious secret police, or whatever, but connections within connections, Alain Gaudin for one, well done, blessings, Roy
Typo : I know a man (these) who will look after you. There?
reply by the author on 08-May-2019
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So more unravelling is going on, with Kayla sharing not only the fact that Andre had been carted off by some mysterious secret police, or whatever, but connections within connections, Alain Gaudin for one, well done, blessings, Roy
Typo : I know a man (these) who will look after you. There?
Comment Written 01-May-2019
reply by the author on 08-May-2019
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Many thanks for your supportive comments, Roy, and for the spag pick up. All the best, Tony.
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Pleasure Tony
Comment from Tootsie55
"Absinthe makes the heart grow fonder." Almost an Aussie saying I reckon, hehe I have my own version from whence the above was coined..."Absence makes the heart go wander!" Another good chapter. Still got us interested to know more. Now some spags.
know a man the[s](r)e who will look after you.
"He['s] rents an attic room
reply by the author on 08-May-2019
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"Absinthe makes the heart grow fonder." Almost an Aussie saying I reckon, hehe I have my own version from whence the above was coined..."Absence makes the heart go wander!" Another good chapter. Still got us interested to know more. Now some spags.
know a man the[s](r)e who will look after you.
"He['s] rents an attic room
Comment Written 01-May-2019
reply by the author on 08-May-2019
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Thanks very much for your review and for the spag pick ups. I like your alternative absinthe saying. Very appropriate! All the best, Tony.
Comment from Mastery
Super installment, Tony. I enjoyed it from beginning to end. I do think the matter of the cocaine was taken a bit more lightly by her than would have been realistic, but it iss your story, not mine.
She was busted and it didn't even seem to phase her that much that Charles now knows about her "habit".
Other than that, this chapter was very engrossing. LOL I still cannot help wondering, as a fellow writer, what or when the end game is in this story of over 55 chapters and still going. Just being nosey, I guess. Bless you, my friend. Bob
reply by the author on 08-May-2019
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Super installment, Tony. I enjoyed it from beginning to end. I do think the matter of the cocaine was taken a bit more lightly by her than would have been realistic, but it iss your story, not mine.
She was busted and it didn't even seem to phase her that much that Charles now knows about her "habit".
Other than that, this chapter was very engrossing. LOL I still cannot help wondering, as a fellow writer, what or when the end game is in this story of over 55 chapters and still going. Just being nosey, I guess. Bless you, my friend. Bob
Comment Written 01-May-2019
reply by the author on 08-May-2019
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Thanks, Bob, for your support and for the six stars. I may have to revise both Kayla? and Charles?s reactions here to make the emotional content more realistic.
I?m getting fairly close to the end now. The number of chapters is a slightly false indicator. That relates to the number of posts. Several ?chapters? logically belong together in longer units. Currently, I?m on about 65000 words.
Comment from lyenochka
Is it safe to do cocaine then follow up with absinthe? Sounds scary to me! Another good episode and I'm wondering if the easy connection with Alain should be suspect.
"I know a man these who will look after you. " (there?)
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Is it safe to do cocaine then follow up with absinthe? Sounds scary to me! Another good episode and I'm wondering if the easy connection with Alain should be suspect.
"I know a man these who will look after you. " (there?)
Comment Written 01-May-2019
reply by the author on 08-May-2019
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Thanks for this review and for your comments, Helen. Drugs and alcohol are a bad combination. This may be reflected in a subsequent chapter when we catch up with Kayla again.
Thanks for catching the spags. Best wishes, Tony.
Comment from Ulla
Hi Tony, the plot thickens. As you know I'm fascinated with this story. So what's next? Kayla is up and down as a yo-yo. Very volatile. Or is she?
I found a couple of things:
I know a man these who will look after you. = shouldn't it be: 'I know a man who will look after you.'?
"He's rents an attic room on the outskirts amd commutes to Giverny = '"He's renting' or 'He rents' on the outskirts and .....
All best. Ulla:))
reply by the author on 08-May-2019
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Hi Tony, the plot thickens. As you know I'm fascinated with this story. So what's next? Kayla is up and down as a yo-yo. Very volatile. Or is she?
I found a couple of things:
I know a man these who will look after you. = shouldn't it be: 'I know a man who will look after you.'?
"He's rents an attic room on the outskirts amd commutes to Giverny = '"He's renting' or 'He rents' on the outskirts and .....
All best. Ulla:))
Comment Written 01-May-2019
reply by the author on 08-May-2019
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Thanks for catching those spags, Ulla. Appreciated. Glad you are still enjoying this lengthy story. Best wishes, Tony.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written chapter and more revelations about the secrets no one likes to talk about but one or other time it has the habit to reveal itself in mysterious ways.
reply by the author on 08-May-2019
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A very well-written chapter and more revelations about the secrets no one likes to talk about but one or other time it has the habit to reveal itself in mysterious ways.
Comment Written 01-May-2019
reply by the author on 08-May-2019
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Many thanks for your review, Sandra, and for your encouragement. Best wishes, Tony.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
How lovely to get another chapter this quickly. I'm not sure about Alain, he hasn't been exactley friendly so far, so perhaps he is after something Kayla doesn't know about. hmm, this is complicated. You were right about the letter dwindling into insignificance, but who really knows. It started all this, perhaps it will finish it too? We shall see. Well done, Tony, another brilliant chapter. :) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 09-May-2019
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How lovely to get another chapter this quickly. I'm not sure about Alain, he hasn't been exactley friendly so far, so perhaps he is after something Kayla doesn't know about. hmm, this is complicated. You were right about the letter dwindling into insignificance, but who really knows. It started all this, perhaps it will finish it too? We shall see. Well done, Tony, another brilliant chapter. :) Sandra xx
Comment Written 01-May-2019
reply by the author on 09-May-2019
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Thanks for your review of Stumblebum, Sandra. You may be right about Alain. He's a bit of an unknown force at the moment. His first appearance on the scene certainly didn't bode well for the future. All the best, Tony
Comment from Sandra Montanino
Wow. I was surprised she was with her sister's boyfriend/husband/significant other. I liked the term bed-sit. Clever. The story has lots of intrigues and hints at something far darker on the brink. Good job.
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Wow. I was surprised she was with her sister's boyfriend/husband/significant other. I liked the term bed-sit. Clever. The story has lots of intrigues and hints at something far darker on the brink. Good job.
Comment Written 01-May-2019
reply by the author on 09-May-2019
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Thanks, Sandra, for your review of Stumblebum. Much appreciated. Kayla is a complex character whose actions may do much to determine the plot direction. All the best, Tony
Comment from Gail Denham
Well done - I like the back and forth dialog - easy to follow. You sound quite acquainted with Paris. The story sounds plausible. I have not read any other chapters but it feels as if this fits in well.
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reply by the author on 09-May-2019
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Well done - I like the back and forth dialog - easy to follow. You sound quite acquainted with Paris. The story sounds plausible. I have not read any other chapters but it feels as if this fits in well.
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Comment Written 01-May-2019
reply by the author on 09-May-2019
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Many thanks for dropping in to review Stumblebum, Gail. I appreciate your positive comments about the dialogue. I spent a few days in Paris last summer - enough to give me a bit of a handle on the place. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Bill Pinder
This chapter was a very interesting read with a good flow of action and interesting characters. I have never heard the word, stumblebum. Is that Australian?
I like that phrase that his overactive imagination was lurking in the shadows.
Good job of leaving the reader wanting to know about the real reason for Andre's arrest.
Bill
reply by the author on 09-May-2019
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This chapter was a very interesting read with a good flow of action and interesting characters. I have never heard the word, stumblebum. Is that Australian?
I like that phrase that his overactive imagination was lurking in the shadows.
Good job of leaving the reader wanting to know about the real reason for Andre's arrest.
Bill
Comment Written 01-May-2019
reply by the author on 09-May-2019
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Very many thanks for your review of Stumblebum, Bill, and for your six star award. I appreciate your positive comments. I understand that 'stumblebum' was coined by Ernest Hemingway, and first used in his novel 'Death in the Afternoon' in 1932
Best wishes, Tony