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Comment from Shirley McLain
Wonderful chapter and so interesting to read. You did a great job with all the action and the dialogue. I didn't see any mistakes to tell you about. Have a great day. Shirley
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Wonderful chapter and so interesting to read. You did a great job with all the action and the dialogue. I didn't see any mistakes to tell you about. Have a great day. Shirley
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Thanks, Shirley. Appreciated. Best wishes, Tony.
Comment from Alex Rosel
This provides a smooth, easy-flowing read. Personally, however, I think you're top-heavy on pronouns. I realize this is a first-person narrative, so you're going to have a fair share of I, my, and me.
With a first-person narrative, the narrator inhabits the fictive world. The reader knows that everything that is seen, heard, tasted, felt, smelled, and thought is a reflection of the narrator's experience. So, the author doesn't, and shouldn't without good reason, emphasize this fact. I think you've missed the opportunity to nix some. And to my mind, nixing some would improve the narrative.
Apart from that, this is neat writing.
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This provides a smooth, easy-flowing read. Personally, however, I think you're top-heavy on pronouns. I realize this is a first-person narrative, so you're going to have a fair share of I, my, and me.
With a first-person narrative, the narrator inhabits the fictive world. The reader knows that everything that is seen, heard, tasted, felt, smelled, and thought is a reflection of the narrator's experience. So, the author doesn't, and shouldn't without good reason, emphasize this fact. I think you've missed the opportunity to nix some. And to my mind, nixing some would improve the narrative.
Apart from that, this is neat writing.
Comment Written 09-May-2019
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Thanks very much, Alex. I?ll take another look at that. It?s a good point. Best wishes, Tony.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written chapter and a great time with Helen and more revelations get out, apart from the intimate secrets that we do not share with anyone else but ourselves.
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A very well-written chapter and a great time with Helen and more revelations get out, apart from the intimate secrets that we do not share with anyone else but ourselves.
Comment Written 09-May-2019
reply by the author on 09-May-2019
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Thank you for your review of A Night to Remember, Sandra. I appreciate it. All the best, Tony
Comment from WryWriter
Oh, dear Charles. Will he regret telling Helen about MI6? A very tastefully done close encounter between the two. Will loose lips now sink ships? The reader will have to wait and see.
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Oh, dear Charles. Will he regret telling Helen about MI6? A very tastefully done close encounter between the two. Will loose lips now sink ships? The reader will have to wait and see.
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Thank you for your review of A Night to Remember, WryWriter. Glad the 'close encounter' was OK - not a form of writing that I'm especially familiar with! All the best, Tony
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Wow, that was a brilliant, Tony, a large virtual six!! I'm glad that Charles has told Helen everything, now they can enjoy the feeling of honesty and trust between them ... and a lot more!!! lol. Helen really hit the nail on the head when she said he was getting the hang of the James Bond persona! lol. Well done, I can't wait to read more. :) Sandra xxx
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Wow, that was a brilliant, Tony, a large virtual six!! I'm glad that Charles has told Helen everything, now they can enjoy the feeling of honesty and trust between them ... and a lot more!!! lol. Helen really hit the nail on the head when she said he was getting the hang of the James Bond persona! lol. Well done, I can't wait to read more. :) Sandra xxx
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reply by the author on 09-May-2019
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Thanks, Sandra. Glad you enjoyed this one. Poor old Charles really does need someone that he can trust. I have my fingers crossed for him! All the best, Tony
Comment from Sankey
This was a nice chummy yummy piece of reading. Well done Tony as usual. Keep up the good work can't wait to see where all this is going. Definitely the makings of a Mini-series or something.
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This was a nice chummy yummy piece of reading. Well done Tony as usual. Keep up the good work can't wait to see where all this is going. Definitely the makings of a Mini-series or something.
Comment Written 09-May-2019
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Thanks, Geoffrey. I appreciate your supportive comments. All the best, Tony
Comment from Tootsie55
Wow! A bit of a turn in another direction this time. Enjoyed the debauchery as well. No spags this time around. Keep up the good work. No sixes till Sunday I don't think.
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Wow! A bit of a turn in another direction this time. Enjoyed the debauchery as well. No spags this time around. Keep up the good work. No sixes till Sunday I don't think.
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Comment Written 09-May-2019
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Thanks, Louse. Nothing like a bit of debauchery to liven things up! All the best, Tony
Comment from lyenochka
Well, that was a steamy chapter. But I'm worried for Charles. Is Helen that trustworthy? She's being watched. Was it the right thing to do - to tell her everything? I guess we'll find out. I'm sure it would have been hard for Charles to resist!
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Well, that was a steamy chapter. But I'm worried for Charles. Is Helen that trustworthy? She's being watched. Was it the right thing to do - to tell her everything? I guess we'll find out. I'm sure it would have been hard for Charles to resist!
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Comment Written 09-May-2019
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Many thanks, Helen. I hope Charles's trust is not misplaced. If it is, he's in real trouble. All the best, Tony