Turf Snake
A darker side of a light-hearted joke among football players26 total reviews
Comment from lyenochka
Oh my - you can be a horror writer if you want to! I kept thinking, that this had the feel of horror from the very beginning. Yep, I beg a lot of those popular football players used their prowess that way. I liked how you increased his "sss" speech as he revealed himself to be the snake he was.
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2019
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Oh my - you can be a horror writer if you want to! I kept thinking, that this had the feel of horror from the very beginning. Yep, I beg a lot of those popular football players used their prowess that way. I liked how you increased his "sss" speech as he revealed himself to be the snake he was.
Comment Written 30-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2019
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Naaaahhh -- not for me, Helen -- I have WAAAY too vivid of an imagination for it....it'll take me days to get this out of my head (and that is really not a joke!). I write these Horror Contests because there's no entry fee and It's a good challenge to see if I can do it once in a while, but I COULD NOT do it on a regular basis! ;) ;) Thanx for the review! ;) ;) Yvette :)
Comment from royowen
What an interesting seduction this was Yvette, very, very original, with all the subtlety of a slithering snake,seductively sensuous slickingly slender slurping and slipping on the slippery surface. Well done, I knew you wouldn't allow just an ordinary seduction scene happen, very imaginitively presented my friend, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2019
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What an interesting seduction this was Yvette, very, very original, with all the subtlety of a slithering snake,seductively sensuous slickingly slender slurping and slipping on the slippery surface. Well done, I knew you wouldn't allow just an ordinary seduction scene happen, very imaginitively presented my friend, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 30-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2019
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LOL! :) ;) You are a funny man, Sir Roy! :) I'm glad you found this one entertaining as 'Horror' is not my thing, but with no contest entry fee, how can you resist?!! :) ;) Thank you for dropping by and enjoy the coming week sir! ;) ;) Yvette
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Great job Yvette,
Comment from Cindy Warren
I knew there was a reason I didn't date football players in high school! They might turn into horny turf snakes and eat me alive! This is creepy enough to win this contest. Good luck.
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2019
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I knew there was a reason I didn't date football players in high school! They might turn into horny turf snakes and eat me alive! This is creepy enough to win this contest. Good luck.
Comment Written 30-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2019
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Thank you for your entertaining review, Cindy -- so good to hear from you on this one! ;) Yeah, 'Horror' is not my thing, but with no contest entry fee, how can you resist?!! ;) ;) Glad you enjoyed, ma'am -- Take care! ;) Yvette
Comment from robyn corum
Yvette,
I don't often read stuff with that sex flag, but I'm starting to kinda trust you so I thought I would give it a go and see how far I got. This was fine. I'm not even sure it really needs it, but best to be on the safe side. I get it.
Cool story. I was not expecting poor, cool Johnny to turn into a snake - though I suppose all high school boys have that tendency, don't they? *smile* It's not suuucch a stretch. ha
Some notes:
1.) "Wow. It looks so different without all the bright lights(," s)he said as
2.) She let out a one of her signature squeaks
--> delete 'a'
3.) He watched her chest rise and fall as she slowly turned in place to take it all (in).
Thanks and good luck!
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reply by the author on 30-Jun-2019
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Yvette,
I don't often read stuff with that sex flag, but I'm starting to kinda trust you so I thought I would give it a go and see how far I got. This was fine. I'm not even sure it really needs it, but best to be on the safe side. I get it.
Cool story. I was not expecting poor, cool Johnny to turn into a snake - though I suppose all high school boys have that tendency, don't they? *smile* It's not suuucch a stretch. ha
Some notes:
1.) "Wow. It looks so different without all the bright lights(," s)he said as
2.) She let out a one of her signature squeaks
--> delete 'a'
3.) He watched her chest rise and fall as she slowly turned in place to take it all (in).
Thanks and good luck!
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Comment Written 30-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2019
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Thank you, thank you, Lady Robyn!! :) Seems that no matter how many times you read through your own stories, your brain sees what it wants rather than what's actually there!! ;) ;) Have a great week ahead! ;) ;) Yvette
Comment from poetwatch
Well, Johnny scored a bite with his smelly snakes on the 50 yard line. Yvette, you are a crazy blonde. :) Got me all aroused and then scared the crap out of me. :) Not bad woman. This is a good entry for the Horror Writing Contessst. :)
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Well, Johnny scored a bite with his smelly snakes on the 50 yard line. Yvette, you are a crazy blonde. :) Got me all aroused and then scared the crap out of me. :) Not bad woman. This is a good entry for the Horror Writing Contessst. :)
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Comment Written 30-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2019
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Hey, hey!! That's me - the crazy blonde over here in Alabama!! ;) ;) Well, you know horror is not my thing....I can't even 'make it through' many entries out there now, but I try each time this crazy 'Horror Writing Contest' rolls around just to challenge myself! ;) ;) Thanx for the thumbs up over there, Jose -- take care! ;) Yvette
Comment from Karen Luciana
Hello Y.M. Roger,
You did a great job of writing a suspenseful and creepy horror story! The horror genre is one at which I am not very good. You appear to have quite the talent for it. I did not know about the term, "Turf Snakes," and it is such a fitting title to use. Keep up your work. Thank you for a fun read!
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2019
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Hello Y.M. Roger,
You did a great job of writing a suspenseful and creepy horror story! The horror genre is one at which I am not very good. You appear to have quite the talent for it. I did not know about the term, "Turf Snakes," and it is such a fitting title to use. Keep up your work. Thank you for a fun read!
Comment Written 30-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2019
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Oh, Karen!! Thank you so very much for your awesome review and for these lovely stars!! I'll be smiling for most the week, ma'am!! :) :) And here's sending you a smile right back along the way -- you take care and have a wonderful week!! ;) ;) Yvette