The French Letter
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Comment from Sankey
Glad to see the SIXES have returned. This was a very detailed deep involving chapter. Surprise, surprise and this time, not a spag top be found, anywhere! Keep up the good work.
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2019
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Glad to see the SIXES have returned. This was a very detailed deep involving chapter. Surprise, surprise and this time, not a spag top be found, anywhere! Keep up the good work.
Comment Written 07-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2019
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Thanks, Geoffrey. I'm honoured by the six and value your encouraging remarks. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Alex Rosel
I've read a few of the previous chapters of this. Generally, I like the pace of the prose you've adopted :)
Just a couple of points you might like to consider:
Loterie de Bébés -- I've never heard of this before. Thank you for introducing me to it :)
She sounds lovely. ...and is it true that you still do what you can to look after your sister? -- The punctuation here confused me. She sounds lovely is terminated with a full stop. Yet the and is it true which follows doesn't start with a capital. I realise the ellipsis indicates an omission of speech or train of thought, but the and is still the first word of a new sentence. If the ellipsis here indicates an omission within a continuing sentence, and hence the lowercase and, then the full stop after lovely should surely not be included?
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reply by the author on 07-Jul-2019
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I've read a few of the previous chapters of this. Generally, I like the pace of the prose you've adopted :)
Just a couple of points you might like to consider:
Loterie de Bébés -- I've never heard of this before. Thank you for introducing me to it :)
She sounds lovely. ...and is it true that you still do what you can to look after your sister? -- The punctuation here confused me. She sounds lovely is terminated with a full stop. Yet the and is it true which follows doesn't start with a capital. I realise the ellipsis indicates an omission of speech or train of thought, but the and is still the first word of a new sentence. If the ellipsis here indicates an omission within a continuing sentence, and hence the lowercase and, then the full stop after lovely should surely not be included?
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Comment Written 07-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2019
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Thanks, Alex. I?ve made a bit of a mess of that bit. Will go back and have another look. I appreciate your comments. Best wishes, Tony.