Poor Joe
An Onegin Stanza for Potlatch Poetry23 total reviews
Comment from Gypsymooncat
Poor guy. That would be so hard to deal with: to be convicted of something you didn't do and end up in jail for years. Itd be enough to drive anyone to suicide. I enjoyed the poem for structure and flow, and also like the presentation; it's grey and grim, just like that poor man was! Thanks for sharing xoxoxoxo
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reply by the author on 05-Oct-2019
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Poor guy. That would be so hard to deal with: to be convicted of something you didn't do and end up in jail for years. Itd be enough to drive anyone to suicide. I enjoyed the poem for structure and flow, and also like the presentation; it's grey and grim, just like that poor man was! Thanks for sharing xoxoxoxo
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 05-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2019
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Thank you for a great review!
Comment from Richard Van Kirk
"Poor Joe," was well written with a rhythm that captured my attention and held me until the end. I especially liked: "... life had passed him,
the years of solitude survived." That is a lot like the lives of most people I know. The days drag on and the years fly by. All one has left is the solitude. A thoughtful piece. Thank you
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2019
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"Poor Joe," was well written with a rhythm that captured my attention and held me until the end. I especially liked: "... life had passed him,
the years of solitude survived." That is a lot like the lives of most people I know. The days drag on and the years fly by. All one has left is the solitude. A thoughtful piece. Thank you
Comment Written 05-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2019
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Thank you for this wonderful review. I so glad you liked it.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You did a great job with a complex style, Yvonne. I enjoyed reading your poem. The words flow smoothly with great imagery to make readers feel the desperation of Joe's plight. Your topic is so current--like this was taken off the evening news. Your rhymes are unusual, such as remanded/demanded. They work well. Those words, and others, speak of legal terms. The picture choice is bleak and adds a sense of loneliness and despair to your onegin. Thanks for sharing. Respectfully with Love, Jan
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2019
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You did a great job with a complex style, Yvonne. I enjoyed reading your poem. The words flow smoothly with great imagery to make readers feel the desperation of Joe's plight. Your topic is so current--like this was taken off the evening news. Your rhymes are unusual, such as remanded/demanded. They work well. Those words, and others, speak of legal terms. The picture choice is bleak and adds a sense of loneliness and despair to your onegin. Thanks for sharing. Respectfully with Love, Jan
Comment Written 05-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2019
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Thank you for taking so much time to read and review it. I'm so happy you like it, and, of course, I love the stars. lol