Heart Cafted Poems - 2020
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Comment from evesayshi
In my opinion, a stunning presentation, in verse, without any doubt, image AND layout. I view this masterful write in the 'light' in which it was surely intended, a beautiful and extraordinary poem, in tribute to the wonder of stars, flaming and departed...
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2019
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In my opinion, a stunning presentation, in verse, without any doubt, image AND layout. I view this masterful write in the 'light' in which it was surely intended, a beautiful and extraordinary poem, in tribute to the wonder of stars, flaming and departed...
Comment Written 21-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2019
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Eve, I am most grateful for your kind review comments and six-star validation.
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You are very welcome indeed, definitely my pleasure...Eve
Comment from CrystieCookie999
Neat little metaphor throughout here, calling the stars jewels or beads, when they fall. Gorgeous photo as well. Having said that, I would remove some of the last punctuation altogether:
shine's
glow's
gleam's
flare's
But, the stars that fall go dark!
I would take out ALL of the apostrophes above.
And I would remove the comma after 'But' to finish off. Nice share.
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2019
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Neat little metaphor throughout here, calling the stars jewels or beads, when they fall. Gorgeous photo as well. Having said that, I would remove some of the last punctuation altogether:
shine's
glow's
gleam's
flare's
But, the stars that fall go dark!
I would take out ALL of the apostrophes above.
And I would remove the comma after 'But' to finish off. Nice share.
Comment Written 21-Dec-2019
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Thank you.
Comment from damommy
Good one! There's still something very exciting about a shooting star.
I found this harder to write than a longer form. You chose the perfect picture to accompany your poem.
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2019
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Good one! There's still something very exciting about a shooting star.
I found this harder to write than a longer form. You chose the perfect picture to accompany your poem.
Comment Written 21-Dec-2019
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Smiling back, I thank you!
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
I enjoyed your challenge poem, JLR. You did a great job with the style of candlelight. Your words flow smoothly and create great imagery. I could envision myself watching falling stars. Your image is beautiful and a great pairing with your well-chosen words.
I would add 's' to these words as the word each is singular. I know that is your choice, though.
shine, glow, gleam, flare
Thanks for sharing. Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2019
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I enjoyed your challenge poem, JLR. You did a great job with the style of candlelight. Your words flow smoothly and create great imagery. I could envision myself watching falling stars. Your image is beautiful and a great pairing with your well-chosen words.
I would add 's' to these words as the word each is singular. I know that is your choice, though.
shine, glow, gleam, flare
Thanks for sharing. Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 21-Dec-2019
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Jan, ye sI see that makes it much more relevant, thank you as always, Jim
Comment from Gail Denham
Interesting form - you did this well. I like the use of jewels to contrast with the stars. But yet? Do we know the stars go dark - perhaps they light somewhere in the mountains and glow awhile. And all the deer and squirrels gather round and roast marshmallows? Just a thought.
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Interesting form - you did this well. I like the use of jewels to contrast with the stars. But yet? Do we know the stars go dark - perhaps they light somewhere in the mountains and glow awhile. And all the deer and squirrels gather round and roast marshmallows? Just a thought.
Comment Written 21-Dec-2019
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Gail, that thought would make for a very engaging children's poem
Comment from rjuselius
this definitely does justice to this poetry format dear jlr! the imagery is exquisite and the content is well thought out. bravo my friend! unfortunately no sixes left..
thank you for sharing!
blessings and a Christmas cheer hug!
rebekka xxx
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2019
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this definitely does justice to this poetry format dear jlr! the imagery is exquisite and the content is well thought out. bravo my friend! unfortunately no sixes left..
thank you for sharing!
blessings and a Christmas cheer hug!
rebekka xxx
Comment Written 21-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2019
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Rebekka, thank you! hugs and cheers back at you!
Comment from Sandra Ludwick
Thank you for sharing your thoughts through your poem. And, kudos for using this style of poetry. Your selection is not an easy one. I enjoyed the reading and the picture selection.
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Thank you for sharing your thoughts through your poem. And, kudos for using this style of poetry. Your selection is not an easy one. I enjoyed the reading and the picture selection.
Comment Written 21-Dec-2019
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Sandra, thank you!
Comment from Sally Law
A lovely form poem and presentation. I enjoyed the light theme and thought it was beffiting to the poem.
Sending you my best today as always, and best wishes for the challenge,
Sally :)
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A lovely form poem and presentation. I enjoyed the light theme and thought it was beffiting to the poem.
Sending you my best today as always, and best wishes for the challenge,
Sally :)
Comment Written 21-Dec-2019
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Thanks Sal!
Comment from Bobby Jo
This is a good one for candlelight. I live in the country and I can see the stars so beautifully sometimes, there have been nights where my husband and I go out and just watch. Thanks
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This is a good one for candlelight. I live in the country and I can see the stars so beautifully sometimes, there have been nights where my husband and I go out and just watch. Thanks
Comment Written 21-Dec-2019
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Bobby Jo, thank you!
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
I saw the challenge but this is the first I have seen and yes it does indeed fulfill the form challenge. Very nicely done and rules followed, you also kept the words flowing.
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I saw the challenge but this is the first I have seen and yes it does indeed fulfill the form challenge. Very nicely done and rules followed, you also kept the words flowing.
Comment Written 21-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2019
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Barb, thanks! I actually enjoyed developing this using this poetic style.