Heart Cafted Poems - 2020
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Comment from dragonpoet
This poem shows the circle of life. I like the metaphor of growing to reach the sky for getting taller. This shows that life has its ups and downs but we get through it and in the end are grateful for it.
I thing joyously is a better word the rejoicefully, which I don't think is a proper word.
Good luck and keep writing
dragonpoet
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2020
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This poem shows the circle of life. I like the metaphor of growing to reach the sky for getting taller. This shows that life has its ups and downs but we get through it and in the end are grateful for it.
I thing joyously is a better word the rejoicefully, which I don't think is a proper word.
Good luck and keep writing
dragonpoet
Comment Written 21-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2020
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My good wise and thoughtful friend, you are of course spot on! Thank you!
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No problem.
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Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is a good entry for the "This is my Life" contest.
This well written verse takes the reader through the poet's life very nicely.
Well done and I wish you luck with the contest.
Sharon
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2020
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I think this is a good entry for the "This is my Life" contest.
This well written verse takes the reader through the poet's life very nicely.
Well done and I wish you luck with the contest.
Sharon
Comment Written 21-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2020
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Sharon, I do value your kind comments.
Comment from Gail Denham
Well done - a life well lived with no regrets. Sounds as if you raised your children to be trustworthy-upstanding - work hard - good parents. This I guess is our goal too - we determined early in our marriage that we would be there for our grandkids. Both the parents of my husband and myself worked till late in their lives - so our kids didnt' ahve g.parents around.
Good job.
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2020
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Well done - a life well lived with no regrets. Sounds as if you raised your children to be trustworthy-upstanding - work hard - good parents. This I guess is our goal too - we determined early in our marriage that we would be there for our grandkids. Both the parents of my husband and myself worked till late in their lives - so our kids didnt' ahve g.parents around.
Good job.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2020
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Gail, thank you. We are richly rewarded, and our give back is also to our eight grandchildren, where they see there "papa" play on the ground with them...something I regret there moms and dads did not have the pleasure to see.
Comment from kleck140
Wow! Your writing details a story of my life as well as many others.
Your words are also guidance to many
who still face the future or caring and sharing with family
and friends. Loved it.
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2020
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Wow! Your writing details a story of my life as well as many others.
Your words are also guidance to many
who still face the future or caring and sharing with family
and friends. Loved it.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2020
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Thank you so very much for the validation.
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You are most welcome!
Comment from RShipp
I liked the way each of your stanzas described an new chapter of life. I could easily relate!
Your picture was a great choice for the 'primordial cosmos' part of your poem!
Best of luck in the This Is My Life! writing prompt entry
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2020
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I liked the way each of your stanzas described an new chapter of life. I could easily relate!
Your picture was a great choice for the 'primordial cosmos' part of your poem!
Best of luck in the This Is My Life! writing prompt entry
Comment Written 21-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2020
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Thank you!
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
You did indeed take us through the steps of life and how they are handled or looked at. Very different rhyme and flow to this piece using varied rhyming skills. Nicely done
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2020
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You did indeed take us through the steps of life and how they are handled or looked at. Very different rhyme and flow to this piece using varied rhyming skills. Nicely done
Comment Written 21-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2020
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Barb, thank you!
Comment from Dawn Munro
Well, life surely is a complicated thing, but there is much to celebrate too, and your poem seems to do just that, to me anyway. I enjoyed it very much. Best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2020
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Well, life surely is a complicated thing, but there is much to celebrate too, and your poem seems to do just that, to me anyway. I enjoyed it very much. Best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2020
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Dawn, thank you!
Comment from Badger_29
outstanding work. A nice transition smooth yet turbulent at the same time well described. I like the spaces between and The irregular and slant rhyming made this appealing in a very oddball way. I would have given this 6.
Blessings,
Brother Badger Cull
Darren
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2020
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outstanding work. A nice transition smooth yet turbulent at the same time well described. I like the spaces between and The irregular and slant rhyming made this appealing in a very oddball way. I would have given this 6.
Blessings,
Brother Badger Cull
Darren
Comment Written 21-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2020
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Darren, thank you for the validation.
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You have blue removing a deep tapestry with these threads that you used
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Sorry for the Google typos I meant to say you are weaving a great tapestry using words as threads
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Sorry for the Google typos I meant to say you are weaving a great tapestry using words as threads
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Sorry for the Google typos I meant to say you are weaving a great tapestry using words as threads
Comment from Susan Larson
This is a nicely written poem which depicts a very blessed life. I especially like your authors note about "all of its stages never rehearsed just lived." So it is for all of us. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2020
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This is a nicely written poem which depicts a very blessed life. I especially like your authors note about "all of its stages never rehearsed just lived." So it is for all of us. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 20-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2020
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Susan, thank you so much!
Comment from Drew Delaney
The different stages of life actually go by quite fast and then there we are, with time to think and digest the entire scenario of what just took place. You have summed it all up quite well. Best wishes in the contest.
Drew
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2020
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The different stages of life actually go by quite fast and then there we are, with time to think and digest the entire scenario of what just took place. You have summed it all up quite well. Best wishes in the contest.
Drew
Comment Written 20-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2020
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Drew, thanks!