Heart Cafted Poems - 2020
Viewing comments for Chapter 5 "Winnowing Winter Winds"Musings of an old man -2020
31 total reviews
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Hello JLR, and fine poem with good use of alliteration with the letter W. Very descriptive with a very unusual, rather difficult rhyme scheme, but a lovely read. Thank you for posting. Good Luck in the contest. Warm regards Dorothy x
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2020
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Hello JLR, and fine poem with good use of alliteration with the letter W. Very descriptive with a very unusual, rather difficult rhyme scheme, but a lovely read. Thank you for posting. Good Luck in the contest. Warm regards Dorothy x
Comment Written 09-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2020
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Dorothy, thank you for the warm wishes.
Comment from Diana L Crawford
Beautifully written! Thank you for introducing a new word to me. I've never heard the term "winnowing"! Love it! Your poem creatively describes the word in detail!
Thanks for sharing! xoxo
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Beautifully written! Thank you for introducing a new word to me. I've never heard the term "winnowing"! Love it! Your poem creatively describes the word in detail!
Thanks for sharing! xoxo
Comment Written 09-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2020
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Diana, Dorothy, thank you for the kind comments.
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Very welcome! My pleasure to enjoy!
Comment from Therese Caron
Beautiful poem about winter, which I love, although I find myself in the minority! It is 2 degrees here with 2 feet of snow. Really too cold to be outside, but so cozy inside looking out. I love the third stanza. This poem is so descriptive with such beautiful imagery. The image you have chosen is so beautiful. Best of luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2020
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Beautiful poem about winter, which I love, although I find myself in the minority! It is 2 degrees here with 2 feet of snow. Really too cold to be outside, but so cozy inside looking out. I love the third stanza. This poem is so descriptive with such beautiful imagery. The image you have chosen is so beautiful. Best of luck in the contest!
Comment Written 09-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2020
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Therese, UGH! I feel your pain. I hope you find abundant sun rays in the forecast.
Comment from Aaqib Naeem
Wow!! It is such a beautiful piece of poetry and so enriched with beautiful imagery. You've wonderful writing skills and I hope you'll be able to go far with such an amazing talent. Wishing you luck!
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Wow!! It is such a beautiful piece of poetry and so enriched with beautiful imagery. You've wonderful writing skills and I hope you'll be able to go far with such an amazing talent. Wishing you luck!
Comment Written 09-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2020
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Aaqib, I delight in your satisfaction with my poem, the validation is very motivation, I thank you!
p.s. I thoroughly enjoyed your poem "A Beautiful Mess" you write with an authentic voice.
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Well thank you! You are too kind! I am glad you liked my poem as well! Cheers :-)
Comment from Sally Law
A lovely observation of the winds of Winter and their ability to strip to the bare bones. A good storm will just about shake everything loose. Sending you my best today as always and best wishes for the contest,
Sally :)
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A lovely observation of the winds of Winter and their ability to strip to the bare bones. A good storm will just about shake everything loose. Sending you my best today as always and best wishes for the contest,
Sally :)
Comment Written 09-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2020
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Sally, I hope that you weekend transitions to a new week of great discoveries!
Comment from Susan Larson
What wonderfully written words with such well wrought rhythm and rhyme. I love how you worked in such delightful lilts of alliteration. Deftly with a dare, decayed leaves demoting, winter season waxes. Lovely lift to read on this windy winter morning.
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2020
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What wonderfully written words with such well wrought rhythm and rhyme. I love how you worked in such delightful lilts of alliteration. Deftly with a dare, decayed leaves demoting, winter season waxes. Lovely lift to read on this windy winter morning.
Comment Written 09-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2020
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Thank you very much!
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
We are dealing with dreadful gales at the moment, I wish we had those lovely gentle breezes. :)) You've written a delightful, highly visual poem, with your very descriptive words, JLR. The sights accompanied by the gentle sounds, are a feast to enjoy. Each couplet has something different to offer, and I enjoyed it very much. Well done! :)) Sandra xx
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We are dealing with dreadful gales at the moment, I wish we had those lovely gentle breezes. :)) You've written a delightful, highly visual poem, with your very descriptive words, JLR. The sights accompanied by the gentle sounds, are a feast to enjoy. Each couplet has something different to offer, and I enjoyed it very much. Well done! :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 09-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2020
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I hope you are tied down and stay safe.
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We are, but the winds are causing havoc everywhere. :(
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Very nice image, JLR.
-Very good imagery and rhyme.
-You paint a vivid word
picture of the winter winds.
-I like the opening with "whoosh"
and the personification of the trees.
-I also like how you continue
that idea toward the end with
"winter seizes hold of time."
-Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2020
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-Very nice image, JLR.
-Very good imagery and rhyme.
-You paint a vivid word
picture of the winter winds.
-I like the opening with "whoosh"
and the personification of the trees.
-I also like how you continue
that idea toward the end with
"winter seizes hold of time."
-Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 09-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2020
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Thanks much, Pam!
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You are very welcome.
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
I don't remember the form where you can 'hear' the words and the senses are totally involved but this one is done perfectly with all the different descriptive words Nicely done
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I don't remember the form where you can 'hear' the words and the senses are totally involved but this one is done perfectly with all the different descriptive words Nicely done
Comment Written 09-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2020
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Hi Barb I believe the word is onomatopoeia a word that actually looks like the sound it makes,
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
As we battle with wind of over 70 miles per hour today, it is pleasant to read of less extreme conditions. I like the whole of this poem very much, but if I had to choose one line it would be the last one "Willowing breeze, winter season waxes." I find this very powerful, and it is nice to leave on such a highnote.
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reply by the author on 09-Feb-2020
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As we battle with wind of over 70 miles per hour today, it is pleasant to read of less extreme conditions. I like the whole of this poem very much, but if I had to choose one line it would be the last one "Willowing breeze, winter season waxes." I find this very powerful, and it is nice to leave on such a highnote.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 09-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2020
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Katherine thank you for the validation.