Heart Cafted Poems - 2020
Viewing comments for Chapter 19 "Daughter's Prayers"Musings of an old man -2020
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Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You did a good job, Mystery Author, describing this situation from the POV of a child. Your attention to detail fleshes out the sad story. But it isn't without hope. I like the positive note, filled with love, that your story ends on. Thanks for sharing and best wishes. Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2020
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You did a good job, Mystery Author, describing this situation from the POV of a child. Your attention to detail fleshes out the sad story. But it isn't without hope. I like the positive note, filled with love, that your story ends on. Thanks for sharing and best wishes. Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 05-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2020
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Jan, thank you for your review and relfection.
Comment from Natalie Goodwin
This is a beautiful story that captures the love between a father and daughter. It's a sad tale, but you described well the love and understanding that brings families together after the death of a loved one. Best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2020
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This is a beautiful story that captures the love between a father and daughter. It's a sad tale, but you described well the love and understanding that brings families together after the death of a loved one. Best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 05-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2020
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Natalie, thank you for your review and good wishes.
Comment from BethShelby
This is a beautiful story. It is hard to deal with loss and even harder to explain it to a young child. This sounds like a ture story. I hope it isn't but the explanation of why Mother is no longer around is a great one. I know a lot of family have to deal with kind of loss.
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2020
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This is a beautiful story. It is hard to deal with loss and even harder to explain it to a young child. This sounds like a ture story. I hope it isn't but the explanation of why Mother is no longer around is a great one. I know a lot of family have to deal with kind of loss.
Comment Written 05-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2020
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Beth, thank you for your review and reflection. It is so true the depth of loss comes to the innocent.
Comment from Iza Deleanu
beautiful and very moving story, and the kids are always putting things into a greater light - "Daddy, I'm glad that mommy is no longer sick, and I will tell God tonight, "thank you" and ask him to make my daddy no longer sad."
Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2020
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beautiful and very moving story, and the kids are always putting things into a greater light - "Daddy, I'm glad that mommy is no longer sick, and I will tell God tonight, "thank you" and ask him to make my daddy no longer sad."
Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 05-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2020
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Iza, thank you! Children do seem so much more resilient than we give them credit for.
Comment from the13thpoet
Hello fellow writer. Thank you for sharing your story, I think you executed well within the rules of the writing prompt. That was a beautiful and touching story. Good job and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2020
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Hello fellow writer. Thank you for sharing your story, I think you executed well within the rules of the writing prompt. That was a beautiful and touching story. Good job and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 05-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2020
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My good friend, I do appreciate the validation!
Comment from royowen
As a father of children, and now through them, grandchildren, I know how to relate to this in a way that one can who has loved, and the lovely tha dear wife had left part of herself behind. Beautifully written my friend, a deeply touching written declaration of faith. Well done, good luck, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2020
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As a father of children, and now through them, grandchildren, I know how to relate to this in a way that one can who has loved, and the lovely tha dear wife had left part of herself behind. Beautifully written my friend, a deeply touching written declaration of faith. Well done, good luck, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 05-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2020
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Roy, thank you for your comments and reflection! J
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Well done
Comment from RShipp
What a heart-wrenching story... But the way you explained things to the child ... both acknowledging the sadness and explaining a resolution to her anger ... wonderful!
Best of luck with the "Through the eyes of a child" writing prompt contest.
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reply by the author on 05-Mar-2020
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What a heart-wrenching story... But the way you explained things to the child ... both acknowledging the sadness and explaining a resolution to her anger ... wonderful!
Best of luck with the "Through the eyes of a child" writing prompt contest.
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Comment Written 05-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2020
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Thank you for your validation.
Comment from Susan Larson
No child should have to go through this, but many do and it is of course sad and hard to handle. I think this conversation comes across as realistic and as a very tender caring way to handle such a situation.
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reply by the author on 05-Mar-2020
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No child should have to go through this, but many do and it is of course sad and hard to handle. I think this conversation comes across as realistic and as a very tender caring way to handle such a situation.
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Comment Written 05-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2020
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Susan, thank you for your reflection!