Crumbling Foundations
5/7/5 Site Contest56 total reviews
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Hello Diane, now this is what I call a very clever 5/7/5 poem. This is form is not easy - you make it appear so. The last line is very good. The pivotal word is 'unhinged' - clever. Good luck in the contest. Warm regards Dorothy xx
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2020
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Hello Diane, now this is what I call a very clever 5/7/5 poem. This is form is not easy - you make it appear so. The last line is very good. The pivotal word is 'unhinged' - clever. Good luck in the contest. Warm regards Dorothy xx
Comment Written 06-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2020
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Good Morning, Dorothy!
So pleased you enjoyed!
Thank you!
diane
Comment from write hand blue
A lovely old antique door ripped from its frame shown in a derelict setting illustrates the poems meaning. Old houses have history, if walls could speak. Good luck in the contest. ~Mel~
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2020
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A lovely old antique door ripped from its frame shown in a derelict setting illustrates the poems meaning. Old houses have history, if walls could speak. Good luck in the contest. ~Mel~
Comment Written 06-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2020
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Hello Mel!
Thank you!
diane
Comment from Susan Morritt
This is a wonderful, concise piece of work. I read it through several times, and especially admired the final line, "Unhinged dreams lurk near." Powerful imagery. Well done.
Susan
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2020
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This is a wonderful, concise piece of work. I read it through several times, and especially admired the final line, "Unhinged dreams lurk near." Powerful imagery. Well done.
Susan
Comment Written 06-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2020
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Hello Susan!
I am honored by your exceptional rating and complimentary review!
Thank you!
diane
Comment from Manh C Dang
What a beautiful 5-7-5 poem that also rhymes! The use of simile is very clever and it definitely evokes a vivid image with a powerful message. Well done and good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2020
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What a beautiful 5-7-5 poem that also rhymes! The use of simile is very clever and it definitely evokes a vivid image with a powerful message. Well done and good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 05-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2020
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Hello Manh!
So pleased you enjoyed!
Thank you!
diane
Comment from ameen786
Unhinged dreams-unique and original; despite its brevity you composed a thought provoking poem and even beautifully rhymed; good luck!
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2020
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Unhinged dreams-unique and original; despite its brevity you composed a thought provoking poem and even beautifully rhymed; good luck!
Comment Written 05-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2020
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Hello ameen!
Thank you!
diane
Comment from January L'Angelle
I like how this 5/7/5 poem all links together. Not only did you rhyme the poem, you used like-minded words to connect the lines. "doors-unhinged" "old-time" "dreams-fears" and "to-near" there are others if you look closely. This was a really well thought out poem. I enjoyed it very much. -January L.
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2020
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I like how this 5/7/5 poem all links together. Not only did you rhyme the poem, you used like-minded words to connect the lines. "doors-unhinged" "old-time" "dreams-fears" and "to-near" there are others if you look closely. This was a really well thought out poem. I enjoyed it very much. -January L.
Comment Written 05-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2020
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Hello January!
Thank you!
diane
Comment from Jeffrey Ford
I think that you wrote an amazing poem. I can relate to this because old doors to me are like memories and fears that are hard to get rid of. They do take time to leave.
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2020
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I think that you wrote an amazing poem. I can relate to this because old doors to me are like memories and fears that are hard to get rid of. They do take time to leave.
Comment Written 05-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2020
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Hello Jeffrey!
Glad you enjoyed!
Thank you!
diane
Comment from amada
Your wrote a great metaphor, dear poet, and the image of the unhinged door is dramatic as well. You paint a desolate picture in the reader's mind, just like those old memories.
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2020
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Your wrote a great metaphor, dear poet, and the image of the unhinged door is dramatic as well. You paint a desolate picture in the reader's mind, just like those old memories.
Comment Written 05-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2020
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Hello amada!
Thank you!
diane
Comment from nomi338
Old doors, like some memories are best left unopened. Opening some doors, like revisiting some old memories can be disastrous. The old saying "let sleeping dogs lie." is some very good advise. One should just walk away and let the past stay in the past.
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2020
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Old doors, like some memories are best left unopened. Opening some doors, like revisiting some old memories can be disastrous. The old saying "let sleeping dogs lie." is some very good advise. One should just walk away and let the past stay in the past.
Comment Written 05-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2020
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Hello nomi!
Thank you!
diane
Comment from royowen
This is an incredibly wise post Diane, old propensities are hard to be rid of, any observer of self would note, I've always been, self critical, not in a critical, destructive way, but for humility's sake. (Not that I'm naturally humble) my stuff must be uninteresting to you my friend, well done, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2020
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This is an incredibly wise post Diane, old propensities are hard to be rid of, any observer of self would note, I've always been, self critical, not in a critical, destructive way, but for humility's sake. (Not that I'm naturally humble) my stuff must be uninteresting to you my friend, well done, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 05-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2020
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Oh, Roy,
I haven't been very good at reviewing or replying at all as of late; mesmerized my all of the chaos in the U.S. and my state. I've had to step away and garden just to regain some clarity. I "pop in" once in awhile, read just about everything, and then go out and pla in the dirt. My apologies. I'll be better. I promise...
Hoping you are well!
diane
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I?m not bothered Diane, but I do wonder if I?m inadequate or not, so thanks for the reply,