Heart Cafted Poems - 2020
Viewing comments for Chapter 37 "Eye for an Eye"Musings of an old man -2020
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Comment from royowen
This is an excellent entry in this poetry contest Jim. The artwork is outstanding and fits the narrative very well indeed, you've written the perfect poem for the short form, well done, good luck, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2020
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This is an excellent entry in this poetry contest Jim. The artwork is outstanding and fits the narrative very well indeed, you've written the perfect poem for the short form, well done, good luck, blessings Roy
Comment Written 13-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2020
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Thank you Roy.
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Welcome
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
The trouble with an eye for an eye, when does the revenge end, as you say the river of tears flows endlessly with some forgiveness for the heartbreak, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2020
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The trouble with an eye for an eye, when does the revenge end, as you say the river of tears flows endlessly with some forgiveness for the heartbreak, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 13-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2020
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Dolly, the big question mark....why does mankind fail often just to turn the other cheek and move on?
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Often we want someone to pay for a wrong doing, this is why they used to have mob hangings and witches were burned at the stake x x x
Comment from Mastery
Excellent poetry, my friend. You capture a very sad moment in the human experience.. I was particularly moved by these lines:
"On a river of wounds tears
flow on endlessly...."
Yess, the pain of loss indeed can go on forever.
Good job, my friend. :) Bob
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2020
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Excellent poetry, my friend. You capture a very sad moment in the human experience.. I was particularly moved by these lines:
"On a river of wounds tears
flow on endlessly...."
Yess, the pain of loss indeed can go on forever.
Good job, my friend. :) Bob
Comment Written 13-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2020
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My good friend, thank you for taking the time to read and comment on my work.
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Always, Jim.
Comment from Elaine Chiodi
Congratulations on taking a well-known and commonly used phrase and breathing new life into it. My only comment is that a comma between 'wounds' and 'tears' may clarify the meaning without interrupting the flow... ...ec
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Congratulations on taking a well-known and commonly used phrase and breathing new life into it. My only comment is that a comma between 'wounds' and 'tears' may clarify the meaning without interrupting the flow... ...ec
Comment Written 13-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2020
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Elaine, thanks for the insight I will give it relook.
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You're welcome... ...ec
Comment from ESOSTINE
Lovely poem that touches on one of the most important aspect of life, love and forgiveness. Revenge is a truly a cycle of misery that benefits no one but increases wounds that are bound to heal. Thanks for your inspiration.
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2020
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Lovely poem that touches on one of the most important aspect of life, love and forgiveness. Revenge is a truly a cycle of misery that benefits no one but increases wounds that are bound to heal. Thanks for your inspiration.
Comment Written 13-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2020
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ESOSTINE thank you, may your days be filled with sunshine!
Comment from harmony13
The author's words are interesting, clear and creative. The reader
pondered on the words of this poem. I especially liked the 3rd
line with the question "why"! The poem flows and connects well.
The artwork compliments this poem well.
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2020
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The author's words are interesting, clear and creative. The reader
pondered on the words of this poem. I especially liked the 3rd
line with the question "why"! The poem flows and connects well.
The artwork compliments this poem well.
Comment Written 13-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2020
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harmony, thank you for your time reviewing my work!
Comment from RShipp
"...tears flow on endlessly" Well said.
I believe you have met the requirements of this contest: Write a five-lined poem. It has the following syllable count: 2-2-5-7-5. So the first line has two syllables, second line has two, third has five, fourth has 7, fifth line has 5 syllables.
Best of luck in the 5 Line Poem contest.
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2020
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"...tears flow on endlessly" Well said.
I believe you have met the requirements of this contest: Write a five-lined poem. It has the following syllable count: 2-2-5-7-5. So the first line has two syllables, second line has two, third has five, fourth has 7, fifth line has 5 syllables.
Best of luck in the 5 Line Poem contest.
Comment Written 13-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2020
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Smiling back, thank you for your time reviewing my work!
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
There is no need or reason to think of an eye for an eye when one's heart is broken. It does no one any good to go for revenge. 'Tis very true that "on the river of wounds tears flow on endlessly." Well thought out!
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2020
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There is no need or reason to think of an eye for an eye when one's heart is broken. It does no one any good to go for revenge. 'Tis very true that "on the river of wounds tears flow on endlessly." Well thought out!
Comment Written 13-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2020
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Rebecca, thank you, we have all had our broken relationships that seemingly wrench our insides.
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I know. Me too.
Comment from Janice Canerdy
You have made excellent use of the syllables allowed by this prompt
to convey a powerful, moving message about the oceans of tears cried by heartbroken people.
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2020
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You have made excellent use of the syllables allowed by this prompt
to convey a powerful, moving message about the oceans of tears cried by heartbroken people.
Comment Written 13-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2020
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Janice, I am very appreciative of your time taken to review and comment on my work.
Comment from Jasmine Girl
This poem is exceptionally good. The huge eye with tears dripping, the river of tears, and the endless flow, expressed a profound sadness that really moved me.
Well done.
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This poem is exceptionally good. The huge eye with tears dripping, the river of tears, and the endless flow, expressed a profound sadness that really moved me.
Well done.
Comment Written 13-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2020
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Lisa, First thank you for this wonderful six-star validation and second thank you fore the time your have taken to review and comment on my work.