Heart Cafted Poems - 2020
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Comment from Boogienights
This is quite lovely. My family and I are about to do a last hurrah of summer and go to our favorite lake tomorrow. I hope to find some serenity in the waters of lake nebagamon. I enjoyed your well written verse.
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2020
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This is quite lovely. My family and I are about to do a last hurrah of summer and go to our favorite lake tomorrow. I hope to find some serenity in the waters of lake nebagamon. I enjoyed your well written verse.
Comment Written 26-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2020
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Enjoy the escape!
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You did a good job with your challenge poem for the club. I enjoyed reading it. Your words are well-chosen and aptly describe one who is deep in thought of what has happened and what is in store for the next day. I like how you used 'ebb and flow.' I like your use of rhyme. I believe i would write sunsets (sun sets) in 1st verse and summers (summer's day in 2nd).
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2020
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You did a good job with your challenge poem for the club. I enjoyed reading it. Your words are well-chosen and aptly describe one who is deep in thought of what has happened and what is in store for the next day. I like how you used 'ebb and flow.' I like your use of rhyme. I believe i would write sunsets (sun sets) in 1st verse and summers (summer's day in 2nd).
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 26-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2020
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Jan, always my sincere thank you.
Comment from Suzanna Ray
Dear JLR, these potlatch clubs are great, are they not.
Particularly when they prompt us to write poetry. ( like the one you have just posted. )
Excellent work and a great contribution to your Club's growing library
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2020
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Dear JLR, these potlatch clubs are great, are they not.
Particularly when they prompt us to write poetry. ( like the one you have just posted. )
Excellent work and a great contribution to your Club's growing library
Comment Written 26-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2020
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Suzanna, yes I do enjoy them as I find that in every challenge, club members pull little gems out every week, which makes the readings very enjoyable.
Comment from Bill Schott
This free verse, Near Summer's End, finds the lone soul wandering about the dregs of what summer has left and looks with wonder out to the coming season. What else can come this way?
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2020
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This free verse, Near Summer's End, finds the lone soul wandering about the dregs of what summer has left and looks with wonder out to the coming season. What else can come this way?
Comment Written 26-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2020
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Thanks for reading and commenting on my poem, have a great day.
Comment from equestrik
This poem is sweet, soft and slow like summer. I like the feel of it as well as the flow. The picture goes very well with the poem and adds to the feel of the slower pace of Summer and the water lapping at thighs.
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2020
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This poem is sweet, soft and slow like summer. I like the feel of it as well as the flow. The picture goes very well with the poem and adds to the feel of the slower pace of Summer and the water lapping at thighs.
Comment Written 26-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2020
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Thank you!
Comment from RShipp
'as the waves slowly slink away
I saunter with the
warm water licking my thighs'
These words create such a great picture.
PictureThuss Club challenge (You might want to check this?)
Enjoyed!
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2020
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'as the waves slowly slink away
I saunter with the
warm water licking my thighs'
These words create such a great picture.
PictureThuss Club challenge (You might want to check this?)
Enjoyed!
Comment Written 26-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2020
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Thanks!
Comment from Cindy Decker
JLR, you've written an excellent poem; it made me yearn for spring again, and to skip late autumn and winter. Winter always means darkness and cold. I love as your narrator walks on the shore, musing about her future and what it will bring.
Excellent poem.
Best wishes,
Cindy
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2020
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JLR, you've written an excellent poem; it made me yearn for spring again, and to skip late autumn and winter. Winter always means darkness and cold. I love as your narrator walks on the shore, musing about her future and what it will bring.
Excellent poem.
Best wishes,
Cindy
Comment Written 26-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2020
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Cindy, thank you for the time to read and comment on my poem.
Comment from Debra White
Hello JLR :)
I enjoyed your interpretation of the artwork.
The imagery is beautiful and you have used effective touches of alliteration throughout. I particularly like 'slowly slink' and 'deeper depths.'
I like the feeling of movement that runs through your poem, the waves, the sauntering through the ocean and also her thoughts...what does the future hold as we mo e into the next season?
Very nicely done.
Best wishes, Debra :)
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2020
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Hello JLR :)
I enjoyed your interpretation of the artwork.
The imagery is beautiful and you have used effective touches of alliteration throughout. I particularly like 'slowly slink' and 'deeper depths.'
I like the feeling of movement that runs through your poem, the waves, the sauntering through the ocean and also her thoughts...what does the future hold as we mo e into the next season?
Very nicely done.
Best wishes, Debra :)
Comment Written 26-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2020
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Debra, thank you for taking the time to read and comment on my poem.
Comment from Sally Law
Good question to ponder as summer ends. Fall is favorite time of year. We have long, intensely hot summers here in the tropics. I'm really ready for peace on the streets, to shop unmasked, and some relief from the heat. Sending you my best today as always,
Sally xo
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2020
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Good question to ponder as summer ends. Fall is favorite time of year. We have long, intensely hot summers here in the tropics. I'm really ready for peace on the streets, to shop unmasked, and some relief from the heat. Sending you my best today as always,
Sally xo
Comment Written 26-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2020
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Sally, you covered about all the things, I feel we are yearning for.
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I thought so....
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
The end of summer can make one melancholy if they begin to think of winter and being housebound without looking forward to the beautiful fall which comes next.
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reply by the author on 26-Aug-2020
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The end of summer can make one melancholy if they begin to think of winter and being housebound without looking forward to the beautiful fall which comes next.
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Comment Written 26-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2020
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Rebecca, so tue I struggle with the summer ending and fall rsusing in and OMG, not footbsll...what am I to do??