Comment from miajaffri

Exceptional

Thank you for writing this Christmas story for children. I am sure they
will love it. Children love having animals as characters in books and
they also love rhymes. As a kindergarten teacher, I would read a story
and stop for them to fill in the rhyming word. It helped them learn
rhymes.
I like the line, the donkey arrived....he carried a lady who needed a bed.
Here in California, we live in a canyon where wild donkeys live. They
have been coming into our neighborhood and walking down the road
looking for something green to eat. I watch them walk so slowly and
wonder how long and hard that ride on the donkey must have been for
Mary.

 Comment Written 14-Nov-2021

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reply by the author on 15-Nov-2021

Thank you so much for this lovely review of my children's Christmas poem, I'm delighted you enjoyed it! And a hugs thank you for the golden star!
That is something I've never thought of before. Donkeys are expected to do so much, and yet they don't get appreciated as much as they should do. Perhaps it's time for me to write one about this special Christmas animal. Thanks again, my friend. Warm hugs, :)) Sandra xxx

Comment from JudyE

Excellent

What a great Christmas poem and a lovely way to tell the Christmas story. And nice that the mice had a positive part to play for a change. That doesn't happen too often. lol

 Comment Written 14-Nov-2021

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reply by the author on 15-Nov-2021

Thank you so much for this lovely review, Judy. I'm delighted you enjoyed it! Warm hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx

Comment from Paul McFarland

Excellent

This is a good one, Sandra, just right for little children. This is just the right length for a bedtime story. It has good rhyme and meter, which is important for youngsters.

 Comment Written 14-Nov-2021

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reply by the author on 15-Nov-2021

Thank you so much for this lovely review, Paul. I'm delighted you enjoyed it! Warm hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx

Comment from Iza Deleanu

Exceptional

What a cute poem about Christ birth, I enjoyed every line, it made this day so special and such a joy for all alike. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest, in my humbel opinion you have a winner.

 Comment Written 14-Nov-2021

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reply by the author on 15-Nov-2021

Thank you so much for this lovely review, Iza, and for the sixth star award, that was so nice of you. I'm delighted you enjoyed it! Warm hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

What a delightful story in a poem, Sandra. I loved reading it. The pictures are precious. Your lines flow smoothly and create great imagery. I could see all of the animals working together to make their barn home ready for Jesus. I like how each of them did a special job, but in the end it showed teamwork. Your rhymes work well, there's good flow, and the imagery is awesome. This would make a great children's book. Best wishes in the contest.
Respectfully, Jan

 Comment Written 14-Nov-2021

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reply by the author on 15-Nov-2021

Thank you so much for this lovely review, Jan. I'm delighted you enjoyed it! Warm hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx

Comment from judiverse

Exceptional

Such lovely artwork. I love it. What a nice Daddy Mouse to tell his boys the story of Christmas. It's a wonderful story with the cow, the sheep and the nice all helping out to make a cozy place for the Baby Jesus. The cow, the sheep, and the mice all pitched in, with the cow cleaning the stable, the sheep providing wool, and the nice helping with the hay. They were all so proud to be helping. Excellent rhyme. judi

 Comment Written 14-Nov-2021

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reply by the author on 15-Nov-2021

Sorry I'm so late replying, Judi, it's been a hectic few days. I'm really pleased you liked my children's Christmas story, it's a bit different. Thank you so much for the golden star, and the fabulous review. I really appreciated it. Sending a big hug, my friend. :)) Sandra xx

reply by judiverse on 15-Nov-2021

You're welcome. I know how it goes. I am always behind in getting to reviews. judi

Comment from Mary Shifman

Excellent

I really like this cute Christmas story. I'm sure children will love to hear it read to them, too. I'll have to see if I can find the others and read then too. Well done. Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 14-Nov-2021

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reply by the author on 15-Nov-2021

Thank you so much for this lovely review, Mary. I'm delighted you enjoyed it! Warm hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx

Comment from blondie560

Exceptional

Such a cute adorable poem about the animals in the manger and their part in Jesus' birth. How cute for the brothers that a mouse like them saves the day. I enjoyed it very much. I'm sure you will do great in the contest. Hope everything is going well for you. Have a lovely week. Hugs:) Sally

 Comment Written 14-Nov-2021

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reply by the author on 15-Nov-2021

Hi Sally, thank you so much for this fabulous review and for that gold sixth star! You're wonderful!! I'm really pleased you enjoyed the story in this poem, my friend. Sending you a Christmas early hug. :)) Sandra xxx

Comment from 1Dreamer

Excellent

Loved this sweet tale and Timmy and Tommy. Love that the little creatures God created are all taking part for the birth of Jesus. Look forward to reading more of your tales.

 Comment Written 14-Nov-2021

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reply by the author on 15-Nov-2021

Thank you so much for this lovely review, I'm delighted you enjoyed it! Warm hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx

Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)

Excellent

I enjoyed this poem. We were bemoaning the fact today that the very young are not having their memories and understanding correctly developed. This hits two nails on the head: the reasoning behind Christmas and the mechanics of writing poems. A fine piece of work.

 Comment Written 14-Nov-2021

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reply by the author on 15-Nov-2021

Thank you so much for this lovely review, Katherine. I'm delighted you enjoyed it! Warm hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx