Guided by Faith
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Comment from judiverse
Congratulations! You're off to a good start with this. I think faith-based romance is an appropriate category, and I'm sure that will appeal to many readers. I like the concept of the bakery and bookstore combination. Great setting. Adding dogs always generates interest, too. It should be interesting to see how Ace performs during the novel. I didn't see much description of Seth. Maybe add a little bit about his age and appearance. He sizes up Emma. Maybe she can size him up when they meet. Please don't make Emma a clinging vine type. Right off, she cuts her foot on a piece of glass. More of the "lean on me" idea. Seth and Seth can have their differences, but I'd prefer she wasn't prone to being in need of rescuing frequently. Just my observation. judi
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2023
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Congratulations! You're off to a good start with this. I think faith-based romance is an appropriate category, and I'm sure that will appeal to many readers. I like the concept of the bakery and bookstore combination. Great setting. Adding dogs always generates interest, too. It should be interesting to see how Ace performs during the novel. I didn't see much description of Seth. Maybe add a little bit about his age and appearance. He sizes up Emma. Maybe she can size him up when they meet. Please don't make Emma a clinging vine type. Right off, she cuts her foot on a piece of glass. More of the "lean on me" idea. Seth and Seth can have their differences, but I'd prefer she wasn't prone to being in need of rescuing frequently. Just my observation. judi
Comment Written 26-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2023
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I can promise Seth will be described next week. Emma is rather comical. We'll see how it play out. Emma does put him in his place down the way.
Comment from Shirley McLain
You get a six for the chapter and for the video. It makes me want to learn line dancing. I'll let you know how it goes next week. I like the story. It is interesting so far, and the fact that the sheriff doesn't know what to think adds interest. Great job!!! Shirley
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2023
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You get a six for the chapter and for the video. It makes me want to learn line dancing. I'll let you know how it goes next week. I like the story. It is interesting so far, and the fact that the sheriff doesn't know what to think adds interest. Great job!!! Shirley
Comment Written 26-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2023
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Emma will keep Seth guessing. LOL I have another video for next week, but it's not a line dance. LOL Thank you for the support.
Comment from Ric Myworld
Good way to get us started off on your new book, but this chapter isn't 16,000 words long. LOL. But I knew what you meant. The picture of your new protagonist makes even an old man step up and pay attention. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2023
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Good way to get us started off on your new book, but this chapter isn't 16,000 words long. LOL. But I knew what you meant. The picture of your new protagonist makes even an old man step up and pay attention. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2023
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DUH!!! I have dark brown hair, well graying now, but I'm pretty sure I have blonde roots. LOL Thank you for the kind review. I'll fix that.
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LOL. There's not any blonde in you. :-)
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My husband often just says, "You're a trip."
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LOL. Now that's probably true, or he wouldn't say it.
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Could be slightly
Comment from royowen
Yes, I'm glad I read your notes, he's coming across as overly cautious, but within that is the endearing quality of being protective of damsels, but your damsels are usually strong spirited and independent, and a little head strong, nicely started. Well done, blessings Roy
Typo : (With) a wide stance...
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2023
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Yes, I'm glad I read your notes, he's coming across as overly cautious, but within that is the endearing quality of being protective of damsels, but your damsels are usually strong spirited and independent, and a little head strong, nicely started. Well done, blessings Roy
Typo : (With) a wide stance...
Comment Written 26-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2023
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I have added that word, 'with'. Thank you for the catch. Yes, Emma is pretty high strung. I was afraid, I was going to get some backlash on Seth. I can promise he's really a sweetheart.
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Of course, I have confidence in you.
Comment from damommy
I'm going to enjoy this, I know. I like spunky Emma. It will be interesting to watch these characters develop, and I suspect Seth and Emma will see a lot of each other.
-Wide eyed[,] she stared at the large German shepherd.
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2023
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I'm going to enjoy this, I know. I like spunky Emma. It will be interesting to watch these characters develop, and I suspect Seth and Emma will see a lot of each other.
-Wide eyed[,] she stared at the large German shepherd.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2023
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Thank you for the catch. I will make that correction.
Comment from lancellot
Emma is new in town, or has come back to a small town and is new the the helpful, kind, single Chief who has a dog. He was there to give a mini-rescue and aid. Good way to introduce the main characters and good descriptions of their personalities and goodness.
Honest question: Will this follow the usual formula?
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2023
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Emma is new in town, or has come back to a small town and is new the the helpful, kind, single Chief who has a dog. He was there to give a mini-rescue and aid. Good way to introduce the main characters and good descriptions of their personalities and goodness.
Honest question: Will this follow the usual formula?
Comment Written 26-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2023
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I will answer your question this way: Consistent formula This is the trademark of all successful authors and Danielle Steel is no exception. She is a romance novel author and her work involves rich families, blackmail and suicide and the other dark elements. She found that this is the formula she is comfortable penning and continued with it. Romance writing does tend to follow a certain formula. It's expected if you want to get published.
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Understood. I wish you good fortune with the new book.
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Thank you. It is a little different in that there are no rich people. Emma actually will save Seth life. But it's basically boy meets girl and they struggle forming a relationship, but eventually will overcome the roadblocks that stop it. Will you be along for the ride? I do hope so, but understand if you don't.
Comment from susand3022
Hi Barbara,
I've caught you at the beginning of a new book I'm happy to say! Hooray!!!
I like it. I don't think a character can 'shake their head too much' or 'be too bossy' if that's the way the character is, that's the way they are. After all, people are who they are, and they do what they do. If someone does something that you consider 'too much' does it mean you can stop them from doing it? Not likely! Have you ever tried to get someone to stop saying the word 'like' when they're used to using it every third word? It will drive you nuts listening to it, "but it's like, just like, who they are." (Shaking my head!) Hahaha!
My favorites are the ones I left at home when I moved... "Trow me down the stais my choos!"
I always wanted to reply, "I'll throw you down the stairs alright, and it will be my choice just so I don't have to listen to you anymore!"
My point being people are who they are. Don't let people tell you that your character is too this, or too that, or does something too much. You're making them who they are, not who somebody thinks they should be. It's what makes your writing yours, which is why we read it in the first place. :)
Here's to the Prologue!
(loved the line dance)
Susan :)
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2023
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Hi Barbara,
I've caught you at the beginning of a new book I'm happy to say! Hooray!!!
I like it. I don't think a character can 'shake their head too much' or 'be too bossy' if that's the way the character is, that's the way they are. After all, people are who they are, and they do what they do. If someone does something that you consider 'too much' does it mean you can stop them from doing it? Not likely! Have you ever tried to get someone to stop saying the word 'like' when they're used to using it every third word? It will drive you nuts listening to it, "but it's like, just like, who they are." (Shaking my head!) Hahaha!
My favorites are the ones I left at home when I moved... "Trow me down the stais my choos!"
I always wanted to reply, "I'll throw you down the stairs alright, and it will be my choice just so I don't have to listen to you anymore!"
My point being people are who they are. Don't let people tell you that your character is too this, or too that, or does something too much. You're making them who they are, not who somebody thinks they should be. It's what makes your writing yours, which is why we read it in the first place. :)
Here's to the Prologue!
(loved the line dance)
Susan :)
Comment Written 26-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2023
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Thank you for sharing that. I put it in my author's notes because I know I'm going to be told it's repetitive. I bet I still do.
Comment from Ulla
Right, so we are all settled in for a new ride. I'm keen to see where you're taking this, Barbara. So far it looks promising, but I'm holding back until I know more. All best, Ulla xxx
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2023
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Right, so we are all settled in for a new ride. I'm keen to see where you're taking this, Barbara. So far it looks promising, but I'm holding back until I know more. All best, Ulla xxx
Comment Written 26-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2023
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Thank you for the kind review. I can promise action.
Comment from nomi338
I am all buckled in and ready for what I am convinced will be an enjoyable ride. As for your critics, I suppose they are necessary, but of little real use. Your vision is your vision, it belongs to you and no one else. Readers are free to read or go someplace else. They are not allowed to change your vision to fit their particular narrative. You are free to do you. I love your stories and wish you the very best going forward.
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2023
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I am all buckled in and ready for what I am convinced will be an enjoyable ride. As for your critics, I suppose they are necessary, but of little real use. Your vision is your vision, it belongs to you and no one else. Readers are free to read or go someplace else. They are not allowed to change your vision to fit their particular narrative. You are free to do you. I love your stories and wish you the very best going forward.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2023
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Thank you for the encouragement.
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Of course.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
This is a great start to your new novel, Barbara, and I've already married off Seth and Emma! Lol. This certainly different for you, it will be interesting to see where you go. I'm glad you have your dogs with you again. Well done, my friend. :) Sandra xx
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reply by the author on 26-Feb-2023
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This is a great start to your new novel, Barbara, and I've already married off Seth and Emma! Lol. This certainly different for you, it will be interesting to see where you go. I'm glad you have your dogs with you again. Well done, my friend. :) Sandra xx
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Comment Written 26-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2023
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I will always have dogs. LOL Thank you for the encouragement.