Sandpaper Canyons
a Nonet35 total reviews
Comment from Sally Law
Beautiful nonet you have here, dear Melissa. I especially like line two: sandpaper canyons coming to. So lovely in centered form. Sending you my best today as always and my very best for the upcoming contest.
Sal XOs
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2023
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Beautiful nonet you have here, dear Melissa. I especially like line two: sandpaper canyons coming to. So lovely in centered form. Sending you my best today as always and my very best for the upcoming contest.
Sal XOs
Comment Written 20-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2023
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Thanks so much sweet Sal!!
Melissa
Comment from JSD
Excellent. Not just for the way you have packed so much into this little money box but also for the tight and impressive vocabulary and phrasing you have employed here. Love 'Sporadic raindrops bullet the dust'. Superb.
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2023
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Excellent. Not just for the way you have packed so much into this little money box but also for the tight and impressive vocabulary and phrasing you have employed here. Love 'Sporadic raindrops bullet the dust'. Superb.
Comment Written 20-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2023
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Thank you very much for your lovely review and comments!!
Melissa
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Sorry, for 'money' read nonet! Autocorrect!
Comment from Paul Manton
Sugarray, I'm so sorry that I ran out of 6 stars already. This is a wonderful nonet - maybe the best I've reviewed - incorporating a gentle onomatopoeia in the very first line! (perhaps an allusion to thunder?) and then all the senses are evoked to immerse us in this wonderful experience. 'Sandpaper canyons' is, of course, a brilliant idea and title - I would have given six stars for that alone. Looking at your perfect ending and the control of the image from the first to the last word, I have changed my opinion: it IS the best nonet I have reviewed. No doubt.
Paul
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2023
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Sugarray, I'm so sorry that I ran out of 6 stars already. This is a wonderful nonet - maybe the best I've reviewed - incorporating a gentle onomatopoeia in the very first line! (perhaps an allusion to thunder?) and then all the senses are evoked to immerse us in this wonderful experience. 'Sandpaper canyons' is, of course, a brilliant idea and title - I would have given six stars for that alone. Looking at your perfect ending and the control of the image from the first to the last word, I have changed my opinion: it IS the best nonet I have reviewed. No doubt.
Paul
Comment Written 20-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2023
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Oh, you've made my day! Thank you for your wonderful comments on this Nonet, Paul!! I so appreciate your thoughts!!
Melissa
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You're welcome
Paul
Comment from Lisasview
First read of your and I just love it.............
Love this form...haven't tried it yet..........
Adore the line bullets of dust...............
Lisasview, new to the site
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reply by the author on 20-Jun-2023
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First read of your and I just love it.............
Love this form...haven't tried it yet..........
Adore the line bullets of dust...............
Lisasview, new to the site
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Comment Written 20-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2023
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Thank you Lisa. I so appreciate your comments on this verse. Nonets are fun, but challenging. I hope you give it a try. Welcome to FanStory!!
Melissa
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You are so welcome
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A great description of this scene and I enjoyed your well thought out and well designed nonet for the contest and wish you luck with it, it looks like the moon? Is it Lubbock, Texas? I'm told it looks like the moon there. Love Dolly x
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reply by the author on 20-Jun-2023
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A great description of this scene and I enjoyed your well thought out and well designed nonet for the contest and wish you luck with it, it looks like the moon? Is it Lubbock, Texas? I'm told it looks like the moon there. Love Dolly x
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Comment Written 20-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2023
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Thank you. I think it is in Arizona, but perhaps in New Mexico. I have only been through that part of the country once, but it is sooo different and unique. I hope to go again someday. :)
Melissa