Am I A Criminal?
I tore the tag off my pillow32 total reviews
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
This is so amusing; I feel like you just dealt with the agents from Men in Black. You have such a good funny bone, who knew you could turn a tag on a pillow into humor. By the way, someone asked about removing the tag on tv and the answer was, the tag has to be on the pillow when it is sold, but you can cut it off after you get home. Sorry, no agents are gonna arrive at your door.
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reply by the author on 11-Feb-2024
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This is so amusing; I feel like you just dealt with the agents from Men in Black. You have such a good funny bone, who knew you could turn a tag on a pillow into humor. By the way, someone asked about removing the tag on tv and the answer was, the tag has to be on the pillow when it is sold, but you can cut it off after you get home. Sorry, no agents are gonna arrive at your door.
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Comment Written 11-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2024
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Hello Carol,
are you sure they won't show up? This government is so bloated that they have to have jobs to keep the masses employed. I'm so glad you enjoyed this post. Thanks for the informative review.
Have a blessed day gal.
Tom
Comment from Julie Helms
This is hysterical. Actually a few years ago it would've been hysterical. Now I wonder if it's prophetic. It's like you're trying to exaggerate to make a point about how intrusive our government is, except I think it may just be that intrusive! Very well done.
A couple items of note:
1. advertize (advertise...you do this again and I'll send the spelling police to your address) :-)
2. You switch back-and-forth between present and past tense through this. It would be better if you pick one or the other:
I noticed the tag (past)
As you stand, you check your fly (Present)
Agent Bildock reached into his front jacket pocket and produced a new government warning tag. (Past)
3. You change point of view halfway through, from second person to first person:
You open the door and two feds (2nd person)
I closed and locked the door (1st person)
I enjoyed reading this satirical piece. Thanks for sharing! Julie
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reply by the author on 11-Feb-2024
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This is hysterical. Actually a few years ago it would've been hysterical. Now I wonder if it's prophetic. It's like you're trying to exaggerate to make a point about how intrusive our government is, except I think it may just be that intrusive! Very well done.
A couple items of note:
1. advertize (advertise...you do this again and I'll send the spelling police to your address) :-)
2. You switch back-and-forth between present and past tense through this. It would be better if you pick one or the other:
I noticed the tag (past)
As you stand, you check your fly (Present)
Agent Bildock reached into his front jacket pocket and produced a new government warning tag. (Past)
3. You change point of view halfway through, from second person to first person:
You open the door and two feds (2nd person)
I closed and locked the door (1st person)
I enjoyed reading this satirical piece. Thanks for sharing! Julie
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Comment Written 11-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2024
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Hello Julie,
thanks for taking the time to point out the discrepancies. I didn't realize I was jumping back and forth. I'll keep it in mind, thank you.
Now I'm really worried. If the grammar cops show, I'm in big trouble. That was funny, but as you mentioned, one has to wonder how much the government is really involved in our lives, or want to be. Have a blessed day gal.
Tom