Guided by Faith
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Comment from lancellot
This is another well-crafted chapter, and it moves accordingly, with the tone of the novel and how the characters are created to be. The primary concern is still focused on the protagonist by everyone. That is evident from the beginning, as before a single 'good morning' the focus is on Emma. I don't know how sleeping with a grown woman could hurt her, but oh well. I know that's how your male protagonist usually see things.
Good work.
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2024
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This is another well-crafted chapter, and it moves accordingly, with the tone of the novel and how the characters are created to be. The primary concern is still focused on the protagonist by everyone. That is evident from the beginning, as before a single 'good morning' the focus is on Emma. I don't know how sleeping with a grown woman could hurt her, but oh well. I know that's how your male protagonist usually see things.
Good work.
Comment Written 25-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2024
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Sankey
This was another great chapter. I think Ronnie Calhoun is the gold digger. He has breached the client's confidence. They should charge him with something. His employer should sack him! Just a couple of spags or "look at's"
Seth reached over [a] for Emma's paddle.
Not sure about the comma in following...knew about it except[,] your dad and me.
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2024
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This was another great chapter. I think Ronnie Calhoun is the gold digger. He has breached the client's confidence. They should charge him with something. His employer should sack him! Just a couple of spags or "look at's"
Seth reached over [a] for Emma's paddle.
Not sure about the comma in following...knew about it except[,] your dad and me.
Comment Written 25-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2024
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I made changes to the paddle sentence just before you read, and I still didn't get it right. LOL Thank you for the catches and kind review.
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
This has action and dialogue in equal measure and moved along with great pace and interest. Emma is still deep in grief but, at the same time, concerned that she is acting like a child and everyone else is coping better. I enjoyed the fishing interlude and the humour about feeding the fish. Also the contrasting drama as Ronnie arrives to wreck all the good that Seth had been achieving. No wonder Emma feels that she's constantly behind the curve. There's so much to take in for her, plus recover from all her unhappy experiences.Small edits: I think being outside would be (a) good change; Pumpkin how (d')you feel today; I'm not used (to) that. It's confusing me. It's a relief that Seth has now disclosed details about Emma's father's wishes in regard to their relationship. I wondered why Seth jumped in about the waitress he was in love with when he was supposed to be explaining his lack of knowledge about the inheritance? But this is an excellent chapter with plenty of meat on the bone, clarification and momentum. An enjoyable read, Barbara. Thanks Debbie
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2024
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This has action and dialogue in equal measure and moved along with great pace and interest. Emma is still deep in grief but, at the same time, concerned that she is acting like a child and everyone else is coping better. I enjoyed the fishing interlude and the humour about feeding the fish. Also the contrasting drama as Ronnie arrives to wreck all the good that Seth had been achieving. No wonder Emma feels that she's constantly behind the curve. There's so much to take in for her, plus recover from all her unhappy experiences.Small edits: I think being outside would be (a) good change; Pumpkin how (d')you feel today; I'm not used (to) that. It's confusing me. It's a relief that Seth has now disclosed details about Emma's father's wishes in regard to their relationship. I wondered why Seth jumped in about the waitress he was in love with when he was supposed to be explaining his lack of knowledge about the inheritance? But this is an excellent chapter with plenty of meat on the bone, clarification and momentum. An enjoyable read, Barbara. Thanks Debbie
Comment Written 25-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2024
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Those little words will be the death of me. Thank you for the encouragement.
Comment from estory
The real meat and potatoes of this chapter was when you finally got into how people deal with death and this conversation between Seth and Emma about Seth's drinking when his grandparents died and how Emma is keeping so many feelings bottled up. Then we have this heiress news dropped on us by Ronnie, who seems to be making one more desperate attempt at sabotaging the budding romance between Seth and Emma. But he beats a hasty retreat and there is no real explosion. I think there is too much small talk about omelettes and mashed potatoes, in the beginning of this chapter. We don't care what they had for breakfast. It has nothing to do with the real theme of the story. I would tighten this up with a good edit throughout and focus tightly on the theme. Otherwise large parts of this novel are kind of boring. If you really want to take it to the next level I would focus the dialogue more. You write great natural sounding dialogue, but it works best when there is tension and something really happening between the characters that is related to the theme of the novel. estory
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2024
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The real meat and potatoes of this chapter was when you finally got into how people deal with death and this conversation between Seth and Emma about Seth's drinking when his grandparents died and how Emma is keeping so many feelings bottled up. Then we have this heiress news dropped on us by Ronnie, who seems to be making one more desperate attempt at sabotaging the budding romance between Seth and Emma. But he beats a hasty retreat and there is no real explosion. I think there is too much small talk about omelettes and mashed potatoes, in the beginning of this chapter. We don't care what they had for breakfast. It has nothing to do with the real theme of the story. I would tighten this up with a good edit throughout and focus tightly on the theme. Otherwise large parts of this novel are kind of boring. If you really want to take it to the next level I would focus the dialogue more. You write great natural sounding dialogue, but it works best when there is tension and something really happening between the characters that is related to the theme of the novel. estory
Comment Written 25-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2024
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I put the omelet in to make it feel homier. I will rethink that. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from eliz100
This is another excellent chapter. They kissed. If this were a Hallmark movie, you would be very close to the end.LOL as you are very close to the end.I do not see any room, for improvement. Have a blessed day.
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2024
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This is another excellent chapter. They kissed. If this were a Hallmark movie, you would be very close to the end.LOL as you are very close to the end.I do not see any room, for improvement. Have a blessed day.
Comment Written 25-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2024
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Thank you for the encouragement.
Comment from nomi338
I love the new direction. In my opinion, nothing is taking place too soon. Not all relationships take years to develop, when you know, you know and it should not takes years of being in close proximity with each other for two people to know. I love that Emma is an heiress and I hate the Ronnie Calhoun let the act out of the bag the way he did. In my opinion he should lose his job for his uncalled for actions.
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2024
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I love the new direction. In my opinion, nothing is taking place too soon. Not all relationships take years to develop, when you know, you know and it should not takes years of being in close proximity with each other for two people to know. I love that Emma is an heiress and I hate the Ronnie Calhoun let the act out of the bag the way he did. In my opinion he should lose his job for his uncalled for actions.
Comment Written 25-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2024
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We'll find out about what happens to Ronnie next week. Thank you for the kind review.
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Patiently waiting.
Comment from BethShelby
I really enjoyed this chapter. You are showing how much Emma loved her dad and is having trouble handling his death. It is apparent that Seth loves her but he was quick to get upset when Ronnie told her that her father had make Selh promice to marry her. I wonder how long Ronnie has known she is an heiress.
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2024
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I really enjoyed this chapter. You are showing how much Emma loved her dad and is having trouble handling his death. It is apparent that Seth loves her but he was quick to get upset when Ronnie told her that her father had make Selh promice to marry her. I wonder how long Ronnie has known she is an heiress.
Comment Written 25-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2024
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We'll find out about what happens to Ronnie next week. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Jim Wile
I liked this chapter a lot, Barbara. Lots of honest emotions here on both Emma's and Seth's parts. I love the way Seth finally confessed his love to her and hearing Emma ask him to repeat what he was saying. Very sweet.
I would like to have seen her display a little more trust in Seth than to seriously consider what Ronnie had revealed to her, but Seth soon set that to right, and she didn't think the worst for long.
Jake has given Seth some good advice, and I think he will take it soon.
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As they climbed inside the canoe, Emma took an oar. -- I think this one and all other references to "oar" should be changed to "paddle," because oars are use exclusively for rowing and touch the boat via oar locks. Canoes use paddles.
I'm not used that. -- Should be "to that."
I've noticed other people are handling better. -- Should be "handling it better."
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2024
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I liked this chapter a lot, Barbara. Lots of honest emotions here on both Emma's and Seth's parts. I love the way Seth finally confessed his love to her and hearing Emma ask him to repeat what he was saying. Very sweet.
I would like to have seen her display a little more trust in Seth than to seriously consider what Ronnie had revealed to her, but Seth soon set that to right, and she didn't think the worst for long.
Jake has given Seth some good advice, and I think he will take it soon.
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As they climbed inside the canoe, Emma took an oar. -- I think this one and all other references to "oar" should be changed to "paddle," because oars are use exclusively for rowing and touch the boat via oar locks. Canoes use paddles.
I'm not used that. -- Should be "to that."
I've noticed other people are handling better. -- Should be "handling it better."
Comment Written 25-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2024
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I have made the correction. My husband canoes and kayaks. I have always called them oars. He's never corrected me. Maybe he just gave up. I'm not an outdoorsy type. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Begin Again
Well done, Barbara. I love the blending throughout of grief, struggle and love. It's hard to face all three at the same time but you've delivered it with ease and reality. I loved the chapter.
Smiles, Carol
just a slip of the fingers....
are handling better." (it)
I'm not used that. (to)
outside would-be good change (a)
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2024
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Well done, Barbara. I love the blending throughout of grief, struggle and love. It's hard to face all three at the same time but you've delivered it with ease and reality. I loved the chapter.
Smiles, Carol
just a slip of the fingers....
are handling better." (it)
I'm not used that. (to)
outside would-be good change (a)
Comment Written 25-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2024
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Thank you for the kind review and the catches. I have made the corrections.
Comment from Ulla
Hi Barbara, this was an excellent chapter and, as usual so very written. Yes, I think it's about time that Seth propose to Emma. They are just so good together. The dialogue is perfect. Ulla xcx
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2024
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Hi Barbara, this was an excellent chapter and, as usual so very written. Yes, I think it's about time that Seth propose to Emma. They are just so good together. The dialogue is perfect. Ulla xcx
Comment Written 25-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2024
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Thank you for the kind review and the catches. I have made the corrections.
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I'm not sure what you mean. I gave you a six star review, but I didn't see anything wrong with it. Ulla xcx
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Sorry. I lost my first responses, and I got messed up as I hurried to respond again. It's my mess up. You're great.