My Magical Goth Fairy
A magical encounter with my future Queen35 total reviews
Comment from darkgreennights
I am going to have to kill you now. Sorry nothing personal, but first you promise graphic, then I read and you lead me to the edge and...and leave me there! Argh! Eeek!
Kathleen
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2009
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I am going to have to kill you now. Sorry nothing personal, but first you promise graphic, then I read and you lead me to the edge and...and leave me there! Argh! Eeek!
Kathleen
Comment Written 22-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2009
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LOL, sorry< i changed it at the last minute. Just let your mind wander. Now, Lets see, a magical goth princess, naked, curves galore, the knight nursing on her breasts. Next thing you know, they are engaged in carnal bliss.
I could go on. - Thesis
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and you should have dammit lol
Comment from DAPologe
I thought that was definitely a unique idea, and what you've written, I think, is written very well. I would actually like to have read more about this. I don't mean I want any graphic description or anything, but this feels like the climactic event to a longer story that has been left out. It would bee cool to make this a longer story in which the reader can sort of get to know the narrator a bit more and, that way, feel an emotional stake in his possible death and eventual rescue.
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2009
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I thought that was definitely a unique idea, and what you've written, I think, is written very well. I would actually like to have read more about this. I don't mean I want any graphic description or anything, but this feels like the climactic event to a longer story that has been left out. It would bee cool to make this a longer story in which the reader can sort of get to know the narrator a bit more and, that way, feel an emotional stake in his possible death and eventual rescue.
Comment Written 22-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2009
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Alas, that would be ideal. The truth of the matter is that it would degrade from the passion of the story. I don't want a graphic X rated event. After all Templar Knights were devout Christians. At that time it meant much more than today. What I've written is scandelous enough for the times. - Thesis
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Oh no! I said I don't mean a more detailed sexual encounter, I mean more description of the narrator's history, and the battle and his possible failure. I mean I think it would be cool if the story were longer, not the sex!
Comment from apelle
I am not sure why this is in the adult section, I did not find anything offensive or vulgar !
It takes talent to write sexual material and maintain your dignity as a writer and you mastered that, of course as expected :)
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2009
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I am not sure why this is in the adult section, I did not find anything offensive or vulgar !
It takes talent to write sexual material and maintain your dignity as a writer and you mastered that, of course as expected :)
Comment Written 22-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2009
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Thank you apelle. Last time I entered a contest, I was told that it needed a mature rating, so once bitten, twice shy. Thanks for your excellent review. I'm glad you enjoyec the story. - Thesis
Comment from Fishy
Fun and imaginative. It flowed well, and I had no trouble visualizing the humorous drama unfolding before me.
Your mature audience warning had me expecting mediocre writing at best. I was pleasantly surprised.
Marlin McK
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2009
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Fun and imaginative. It flowed well, and I had no trouble visualizing the humorous drama unfolding before me.
Your mature audience warning had me expecting mediocre writing at best. I was pleasantly surprised.
Marlin McK
Comment Written 22-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2009
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Thank you Marlin. I'm glad you enjoyed my story. I'm glad you were suprised. - Thesis
Comment from bjt6
Very interesting piece that you've written. You're right, it's not that graphic. Good entry for the contest. This certainly fits the category. I like the battle descriptions at the beginning, and how it switches tones and becomes much gentler and seductive half-way through. Great job!
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reply by the author on 22-Jul-2009
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Very interesting piece that you've written. You're right, it's not that graphic. Good entry for the contest. This certainly fits the category. I like the battle descriptions at the beginning, and how it switches tones and becomes much gentler and seductive half-way through. Great job!
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Comment Written 22-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2009
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Thank you bjt6. I'm happy that you enjoyed the story. - Thesis