Writings From the Heart
Viewing comments for Chapter 36 "Heartaches & cowboys"A book of Poetry & Writing
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Comment from Oatmeal
I can relate to your poem very well. My first husband was a cowboy. Not an urban cowboy but a real one. He was a wonderful man. My biggest mistake was divorcing him.
The flow was smooth. Good atmosphere and thrilling emotions.
I only spotted one small error, nothing to get too upset about-
He tried to close that gap in life, both came from (deferent) worlds
**different
Everything else was clean. Comprehensible and very nicely written.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2010
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I can relate to your poem very well. My first husband was a cowboy. Not an urban cowboy but a real one. He was a wonderful man. My biggest mistake was divorcing him.
The flow was smooth. Good atmosphere and thrilling emotions.
I only spotted one small error, nothing to get too upset about-
He tried to close that gap in life, both came from (deferent) worlds
**different
Everything else was clean. Comprehensible and very nicely written.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
Comment Written 29-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2010
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thank you for reading
Comment from fairydancer
Very well written poem on the loss of a love because of lack of understanding and cooperation due to vast differences of opinion and lifestyle.
Your poem certainly invokes a lot of emotion and thought.
It has great flow and rhyming - Great! :)
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2010
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Very well written poem on the loss of a love because of lack of understanding and cooperation due to vast differences of opinion and lifestyle.
Your poem certainly invokes a lot of emotion and thought.
It has great flow and rhyming - Great! :)
Comment Written 29-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2010
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thank you
Comment from findingmyroom
I like this piece very much. It has an expansive feel to it, almost like what I imagine a ranch could feel like. With your refrains, I can also see it as a song.
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2010
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I like this piece very much. It has an expansive feel to it, almost like what I imagine a ranch could feel like. With your refrains, I can also see it as a song.
Comment Written 29-Apr-2010
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thank you for your comments
Comment from dportwood
I like the sad message of the cowboy's heartache. Too bad that years separate in terms of lifestyles and desires. I don't like that the rhyming pattern of the balance of the poem completely fails in the 3rd stanza.
Duane
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2010
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I like the sad message of the cowboy's heartache. Too bad that years separate in terms of lifestyles and desires. I don't like that the rhyming pattern of the balance of the poem completely fails in the 3rd stanza.
Duane
Comment Written 29-Apr-2010
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thank you
Comment from Perp Ihebom
This is a nice piece that showcases the sadness of this heart-broken cowboy. The word different was spelt wrongly. You started out with some rhymes but lost it along the way. The repetition of some lines worked well. well done
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2010
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This is a nice piece that showcases the sadness of this heart-broken cowboy. The word different was spelt wrongly. You started out with some rhymes but lost it along the way. The repetition of some lines worked well. well done
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thank you
Comment from Connie C
I really like this poem. My daughter was in love with a cowboy for three years and eventually decided to leave him. She is a city girl, and his dream has been to follow his father's footsteps and take over the cattle ranch. They could never agree on a compromise. This poem so reminds me of their situation. Very nice done; great rhyming throughout. Connie C
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2010
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I really like this poem. My daughter was in love with a cowboy for three years and eventually decided to leave him. She is a city girl, and his dream has been to follow his father's footsteps and take over the cattle ranch. They could never agree on a compromise. This poem so reminds me of their situation. Very nice done; great rhyming throughout. Connie C
Comment Written 29-Apr-2010
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Thanks Connie
Comment from jadapenn
You tell a sad tale of the cowboy who chose his ranchlife above the woman he loved. But life never promises to be easy. I enjoyed the poem and wish you well for the contest. luv jada
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reply by the author on 29-Apr-2010
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You tell a sad tale of the cowboy who chose his ranchlife above the woman he loved. But life never promises to be easy. I enjoyed the poem and wish you well for the contest. luv jada
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Comment Written 29-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2010
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Thank you Jad