Writings From the Heart
Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "storm warning"A book of Poetry & Writing
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Comment from judester
Great poem and a unique style. I have been in one of these storms ( north east winds hitting the gulf stream makes for very confused sea) The guests were praying in a circle below deck and the Captain and I were riding it like a bronco. I enjoyed reading...safe on land, cheers judester
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Great poem and a unique style. I have been in one of these storms ( north east winds hitting the gulf stream makes for very confused sea) The guests were praying in a circle below deck and the Captain and I were riding it like a bronco. I enjoyed reading...safe on land, cheers judester
Comment Written 15-Jun-2014
Comment from DanielEkine
A perfect use of being. Since been and being can be very disturbing at times. An excellent writing style. A great use of SPAG command.
"radios stop working, time being denied, water is freezing as I push outside"
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A perfect use of being. Since been and being can be very disturbing at times. An excellent writing style. A great use of SPAG command.
"radios stop working, time being denied, water is freezing as I push outside"
Comment Written 15-Jun-2014
Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
This is an expert poem of sailing in an angry sea and losing the battle. Very comfortable lines of rhyme which I enjoyed reading. It is a little sad really, but full of adventurous emotion, Giddy
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This is an expert poem of sailing in an angry sea and losing the battle. Very comfortable lines of rhyme which I enjoyed reading. It is a little sad really, but full of adventurous emotion, Giddy
Comment Written 15-Jun-2014
Comment from juliaSjames
The internal rhyme creates a hypnotic effect in this story/metaphor of the stormy sea.
The final phrase sums up your message
"the Sea, and its Sailors, we sail in God's grace."
Good meter keeps the verse flowing smoothly.
Fine work.
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The internal rhyme creates a hypnotic effect in this story/metaphor of the stormy sea.
The final phrase sums up your message
"the Sea, and its Sailors, we sail in God's grace."
Good meter keeps the verse flowing smoothly.
Fine work.
Comment Written 15-Jun-2014
Comment from Juliette Chamberlain
I love the story that the poem tells and the poignancy of the word chosen - they put me right in the middle of the situation.
The frequent internal rhyme is effective added to tremendous use of metaphor too numerous to mention.
A truly enjoyable read.
Warmly,
Juliette
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I love the story that the poem tells and the poignancy of the word chosen - they put me right in the middle of the situation.
The frequent internal rhyme is effective added to tremendous use of metaphor too numerous to mention.
A truly enjoyable read.
Warmly,
Juliette
Comment Written 15-Jun-2014
Comment from sibhus
Wow, what wonderful writing, this is like an entire adventure novel in a well-written poem. Assume details that really give the impression of being there fighting through this killer storm. Great poem.
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Wow, what wonderful writing, this is like an entire adventure novel in a well-written poem. Assume details that really give the impression of being there fighting through this killer storm. Great poem.
Comment Written 15-Jun-2014
Comment from reconciled
I served in the Navy...was out sea...some. I am reminded of every ...almost...or thought to be drowning of my own...it is a frightful fight for life. Excellent write. love michael
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I served in the Navy...was out sea...some. I am reminded of every ...almost...or thought to be drowning of my own...it is a frightful fight for life. Excellent write. love michael
Comment Written 15-Jun-2014
Comment from Shirley B
Dear deepwater, You have used excellent imagery in this poem. Your rhyming lines are filled with great words that paint vivid images of the sea. I, like you, think we all sail in God's grace. Shirley PS I read in your notes about the old
cowboys and the oil industry and knew you lived in my part of the woods. I live in Oklahoma. Have a great day, Shirley
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Dear deepwater, You have used excellent imagery in this poem. Your rhyming lines are filled with great words that paint vivid images of the sea. I, like you, think we all sail in God's grace. Shirley PS I read in your notes about the old
cowboys and the oil industry and knew you lived in my part of the woods. I live in Oklahoma. Have a great day, Shirley
Comment Written 15-Jun-2014
Comment from rjuselius
this has breath-taking imagery! letting go of your love, your soulmate is like ripping your heart out. but yes indeed heaven awaits:)
thank you for sharing!
rebekka x
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this has breath-taking imagery! letting go of your love, your soulmate is like ripping your heart out. but yes indeed heaven awaits:)
thank you for sharing!
rebekka x
Comment Written 15-Jun-2014
Comment from harmony13
Excellent Poem! The author's words are strong, thought provoking and creative. The poem flows and connects well.
The artwork is perfect and compliments the poem well.
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Excellent Poem! The author's words are strong, thought provoking and creative. The poem flows and connects well.
The artwork is perfect and compliments the poem well.
Comment Written 15-Jun-2014