Writings From the Heart
Viewing comments for Chapter 23 " Special forces soldier"A book of Poetry & Writing
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Comment from Jim Lorson Sr
deepwater, I have always felt in the equality for women in life. I question our government in putting women in harms way in such the senario you've very passionately written about. There are those women that are mentally diverse to be able to withstand the situation in which you have so explicitly written about.
Great piece of writing..............jim
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2010
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deepwater, I have always felt in the equality for women in life. I question our government in putting women in harms way in such the senario you've very passionately written about. There are those women that are mentally diverse to be able to withstand the situation in which you have so explicitly written about.
Great piece of writing..............jim
Comment Written 13-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2010
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Jim,always equality for women in life.so thank you for your review and comments Gary
Comment from JeffreyStone
Pretty brutal details of what members of the Special Forces are trained to endure. In my opinion, women should not be part of this force except in non-combat support positions. For reasons I fail to grasp, the politicians (and even some of our senior officers) are failing us by ignoring years, if not centuries, of historical experience. Your "essay" is gripping, but lacks organization. I like your conclusion. Perhaps an introductory paragraph stating your argument would help. Best Regards, JeffreyStone
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2010
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Pretty brutal details of what members of the Special Forces are trained to endure. In my opinion, women should not be part of this force except in non-combat support positions. For reasons I fail to grasp, the politicians (and even some of our senior officers) are failing us by ignoring years, if not centuries, of historical experience. Your "essay" is gripping, but lacks organization. I like your conclusion. Perhaps an introductory paragraph stating your argument would help. Best Regards, JeffreyStone
Comment Written 13-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2010
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thanks Jeff
Comment from Helen Tan
The descriptions here are real and make those of us who will never see war at such a close range really feel the horrors. As to women being combat soldiers, I think some countries may already have them. The horrors remain, whether the soldiers are males or females.
Name rank and number is given freely with guns pointing at your head
Name rank and number is given freely with guns pointing at your head
I think this repetition of "Name rank and number" is highly effective to indicate how each soldier becomes almost faceless - a name, a number among millions. The enemy does not see the person per say.
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2010
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The descriptions here are real and make those of us who will never see war at such a close range really feel the horrors. As to women being combat soldiers, I think some countries may already have them. The horrors remain, whether the soldiers are males or females.
Name rank and number is given freely with guns pointing at your head
Name rank and number is given freely with guns pointing at your head
I think this repetition of "Name rank and number" is highly effective to indicate how each soldier becomes almost faceless - a name, a number among millions. The enemy does not see the person per say.
Comment Written 13-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2010
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thank you for your review Helen and the comments
Comment from Border Reiver
This is extremely difficult to read. There are no periods whatsoever and most lines begin with a capital letter. That's fine for some types of poetry, but not prose.
In the first line: Sierra soldiers Carry equipment [carry shouldn't have a capital letter].
kill the average man its a minimum [its should be it's- because it's short for it is].
Most learn to sleep on the walk or for 5 of the 10 minutes each 2 hour stop 50 to 100 miles per 24 hours may be required to reach the designated target
[this doesn't make sense, mainly because there is no punctuation].
The food you eat was made sometime in the last war[,] if you're lucky[.]
so you observe the situation 12, 24, 36, hours pass under cover [remove the comma after 36].
Name[,] rank and number [are] given freely
I've read your profile and can assure you that your spelling is fine. It's mainly your punctuation that needs work, and I hope I don't sound patronising when I say, perhaps your computer skills? It looks to me like once you've got to the end of each line you've hit the enter button. That would explain why each line starts with a capital letter. Just carry on typing, if there is no space for a word, it will automatically go on to the next line.
From what you've mentioned in your profile, I'm assuming you have firsthand experience of this. That's wonderful (although tough), I'm sure you have so many experiences to share with us all and I look forward to seeing your writing develop.
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reply by the author on 13-Jun-2010
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This is extremely difficult to read. There are no periods whatsoever and most lines begin with a capital letter. That's fine for some types of poetry, but not prose.
In the first line: Sierra soldiers Carry equipment [carry shouldn't have a capital letter].
kill the average man its a minimum [its should be it's- because it's short for it is].
Most learn to sleep on the walk or for 5 of the 10 minutes each 2 hour stop 50 to 100 miles per 24 hours may be required to reach the designated target
[this doesn't make sense, mainly because there is no punctuation].
The food you eat was made sometime in the last war[,] if you're lucky[.]
so you observe the situation 12, 24, 36, hours pass under cover [remove the comma after 36].
Name[,] rank and number [are] given freely
I've read your profile and can assure you that your spelling is fine. It's mainly your punctuation that needs work, and I hope I don't sound patronising when I say, perhaps your computer skills? It looks to me like once you've got to the end of each line you've hit the enter button. That would explain why each line starts with a capital letter. Just carry on typing, if there is no space for a word, it will automatically go on to the next line.
From what you've mentioned in your profile, I'm assuming you have firsthand experience of this. That's wonderful (although tough), I'm sure you have so many experiences to share with us all and I look forward to seeing your writing develop.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 13-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2010
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thanks
Comment from Ponder
Hi Deepwater,
This is a stark and disturbing description of a 'special' soldier. The descriptions are excellent and chilling. As to whether women should do this job? I think the question is, should anyone?
Jules
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2010
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Hi Deepwater,
This is a stark and disturbing description of a 'special' soldier. The descriptions are excellent and chilling. As to whether women should do this job? I think the question is, should anyone?
Jules
Comment Written 13-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2010
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i Know and thank you for the review Jules
Comment from menachem
Slightly confusing, but fairly compelling. I don't think it really should be described as fiction, but more as commentary.
As for what would happen to them: Wouldn't they be aware of the stakes beforehand, just like the men? I'm not saying they should do it, but shouldn't everybody be allowed to choose HOW they wish to live? Isn't that only fair?
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2010
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Slightly confusing, but fairly compelling. I don't think it really should be described as fiction, but more as commentary.
As for what would happen to them: Wouldn't they be aware of the stakes beforehand, just like the men? I'm not saying they should do it, but shouldn't everybody be allowed to choose HOW they wish to live? Isn't that only fair?
Comment Written 13-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2010
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thanks for your comments menachem
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Sure.
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thank you again for the review
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Sure? What happened?
Comment from Tellis
It's a tough thing to happen to anyone. It takes a tough perason to hold out in this situation and you can only know how you'll do when you are in it. I enjoyed reading this excellent story.
Tellis
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2010
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It's a tough thing to happen to anyone. It takes a tough perason to hold out in this situation and you can only know how you'll do when you are in it. I enjoyed reading this excellent story.
Tellis
Comment Written 13-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2010
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thank you Tellis for the review and your comment GW
Comment from bob cullen
Very powerful writing that provokes both thought and gratitude. You think of the courage and you thank them for their dedication and preparedness to give their lives.
With writing such as this, I don't see errors I only see the truth contained. One imagines a piece like this could only come from personal experience. I salute you.
A note on your author's notes. I see your point as being one of survival and secondarily as being from a caring male who doesn't want to see a woman violated. I would think a woman's liberationist would suggest this is yet another example of sexism where the male is stating he is superior to the female. I am with you deepwater.
A really fabulous write. And as a would be writer of books of intrigue, I will certainly use this piece of writing as a reference tool.
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2010
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Very powerful writing that provokes both thought and gratitude. You think of the courage and you thank them for their dedication and preparedness to give their lives.
With writing such as this, I don't see errors I only see the truth contained. One imagines a piece like this could only come from personal experience. I salute you.
A note on your author's notes. I see your point as being one of survival and secondarily as being from a caring male who doesn't want to see a woman violated. I would think a woman's liberationist would suggest this is yet another example of sexism where the male is stating he is superior to the female. I am with you deepwater.
A really fabulous write. And as a would be writer of books of intrigue, I will certainly use this piece of writing as a reference tool.
Comment Written 12-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2010
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thank you bob for your welcome comments and review Gary
Comment from JMonroe
Very well written. :) It was kind of emotional for me to read, because I was in the military for four years, and then I worked at Camp Lejeune after that with the marines.
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2010
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Very well written. :) It was kind of emotional for me to read, because I was in the military for four years, and then I worked at Camp Lejeune after that with the marines.
Comment Written 12-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2010
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thank you JM and welcome home myfriend
Comment from minopavlic
Very informative as to the drill in preparing for survival under the worst of conditions. Within the harsh realities of war, there are many atrocities which to most are incomprehensible, to win in such a combat: one has to become as brutal as the enemy.
no_obstacle
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2010
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Very informative as to the drill in preparing for survival under the worst of conditions. Within the harsh realities of war, there are many atrocities which to most are incomprehensible, to win in such a combat: one has to become as brutal as the enemy.
no_obstacle
Comment Written 12-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2010
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thanks for your review and comments no_obstacle