Another Pretty Face
Viewing comments for Chapter 20 "Chapter 8; part two"Can love survive small town gossip?
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Comment from FredCollingwood
I find myself reading your posts with interest. If there are any spags, I didn't notice them so as far as I'm concerned, it's ready. Great hook at the end.
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2010
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I find myself reading your posts with interest. If there are any spags, I didn't notice them so as far as I'm concerned, it's ready. Great hook at the end.
Comment Written 18-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Nanette Mary
Hullo Barbara ...
I enjoyed reading this chapter of your book and had to smile at your vivid descriptions of Sara and her attempts to paint the wall, then her speculation about whether pale lavender or tan would be best for the living room.
There are just a few small changes to recommend ...
* You have - but I've had problems keeping my mind on task. I suggest - on the task.
* You have - If I would've followed my gut ... I think this would be better as - If I had followed my gut feeling ...
* You have - How much sleep have you had the past two nights? I suggest - during the past two nights?
Now, I look forward to the next chapter.
Love from ........ Nanette Mary.
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2010
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Hullo Barbara ...
I enjoyed reading this chapter of your book and had to smile at your vivid descriptions of Sara and her attempts to paint the wall, then her speculation about whether pale lavender or tan would be best for the living room.
There are just a few small changes to recommend ...
* You have - but I've had problems keeping my mind on task. I suggest - on the task.
* You have - If I would've followed my gut ... I think this would be better as - If I had followed my gut feeling ...
* You have - How much sleep have you had the past two nights? I suggest - during the past two nights?
Now, I look forward to the next chapter.
Love from ........ Nanette Mary.
Comment Written 18-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2010
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Thank you for your suggestions and the kind review.
Comment from Connie P
Hopefully this is a lead. I'm ready for her to be found, the whole thing makes me nervous, which means it written very effectively.
Great chapter!
Connie
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2010
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Hopefully this is a lead. I'm ready for her to be found, the whole thing makes me nervous, which means it written very effectively.
Great chapter!
Connie
Comment Written 18-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2010
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Thank you for your kind review and continued support.
Comment from Nanashirley
The suspense is getting to me I want to know more faster. That is the good thing about FS you have to leave a story until the next chapter The hook at the end is great.
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2010
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The suspense is getting to me I want to know more faster. That is the good thing about FS you have to leave a story until the next chapter The hook at the end is great.
Comment Written 18-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2010
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Thank you for your kind review. I know I hate having to wait, but my energy level is low and takes me forever to get the pumps to post.
Comment from anabelle
Welcome back to you and your computer. Good chapter. I really like the idea of painting to remove the stress. Great idea. I'll have to try that. :-0
Thanks for the good read.
Regards, anabelle
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2010
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Welcome back to you and your computer. Good chapter. I really like the idea of painting to remove the stress. Great idea. I'll have to try that. :-0
Thanks for the good read.
Regards, anabelle
Comment Written 18-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2010
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I have a friend that paints for stress. My computer is still at the computer doctor's office. It was supposed to be done yesertday or today and isn't. I am not happy. I am working on a mini laptop. I hate it, but still being in sunglasses, it's a mess. Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from dmjones
Hi Barbara, I think this post is ready. I loved the painting venture with Sara and George. It sounded very realistic and given the circumstances you can understand Sara's confusion about the color. Anyhow I didn't see any spag and really thought this chapter is one of the best so far.
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2010
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Hi Barbara, I think this post is ready. I loved the painting venture with Sara and George. It sounded very realistic and given the circumstances you can understand Sara's confusion about the color. Anyhow I didn't see any spag and really thought this chapter is one of the best so far.
Comment Written 18-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Siddhartha Jatana
Yes!
What a wonderful read...
Loved it...
Enjoyed the flow...
The background did help too...
Well done!
Keep it up!
Wish u the best...
God bless u!
Love and Regards,
Sid
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2010
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Yes!
What a wonderful read...
Loved it...
Enjoyed the flow...
The background did help too...
Well done!
Keep it up!
Wish u the best...
God bless u!
Love and Regards,
Sid
Comment Written 18-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
Poor Sara - every mother's
nightmare - hopefully, Cassie
is untouched and safe.
Have faith the lab will find evidence
Have faith. The lab
(")I'll paint, but I'm
(")Do you think
my mind on (the) task."
hand on it thinking about- might I suggest -
hand on it as he thought about
A most enjoyable read, Barbara.
Margaret.
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2010
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Poor Sara - every mother's
nightmare - hopefully, Cassie
is untouched and safe.
Have faith the lab will find evidence
Have faith. The lab
(")I'll paint, but I'm
(")Do you think
my mind on (the) task."
hand on it thinking about- might I suggest -
hand on it as he thought about
A most enjoyable read, Barbara.
Margaret.
Comment Written 18-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2010
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Thank you for your kind review and continued support.
Comment from Auroraboreal800
Dear Barbara:
This is an extremely well written chapter. The dialogue is excellent and your narrative as well. I feel sorry for Sara and Joe. We learn more about the persons who abducted Cassie. Joe keeps so sweet and nice. You are doing a wonderful job writing this book.
I hope things are getting much better.
Love and blessings for you. .
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2010
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Dear Barbara:
This is an extremely well written chapter. The dialogue is excellent and your narrative as well. I feel sorry for Sara and Joe. We learn more about the persons who abducted Cassie. Joe keeps so sweet and nice. You are doing a wonderful job writing this book.
I hope things are getting much better.
Love and blessings for you. .
Comment Written 18-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from bhogg
You're the master of pace. This was a very good post. The side story of the walls was priceless. Yes, a pretty good way to get your mind off the current. I actually chuckled, because my wife is always asking me what color I like the best ... as if it mattered. Regards, Bill
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2010
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You're the master of pace. This was a very good post. The side story of the walls was priceless. Yes, a pretty good way to get your mind off the current. I actually chuckled, because my wife is always asking me what color I like the best ... as if it mattered. Regards, Bill
Comment Written 18-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2010
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Thank you for your kind review. I do the same thing to my husband and he could care less. Thank you for your kind review.