Wooden Leg
what I remember38 total reviews
Comment from IndianaIrish
Your story as a curious four-year-old and the love between you and your grandfather is moving and written with just enough descriptions and imagery to want me to reach out and hold that little boy who lost his grandfather. I can visualize you standing where you shouldn't just to get a look at the leg on the wall, see you awakening from sleep with your jammies falling down your butt, your chewing your jammie's sleeve as the man you love is taken away in the night, and I can see your favorite baseball caps all lined up, and with these things you treasure so much is his leg right alongside them...where it belongs. Where it so belongs.
A perfect memory and perfect story for this contest. Without a doubt, if this story wins, places, or shows...it's a winner. I love this story so obviously written with love from your four-year-old heart.
Indy :>)
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2011
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Your story as a curious four-year-old and the love between you and your grandfather is moving and written with just enough descriptions and imagery to want me to reach out and hold that little boy who lost his grandfather. I can visualize you standing where you shouldn't just to get a look at the leg on the wall, see you awakening from sleep with your jammies falling down your butt, your chewing your jammie's sleeve as the man you love is taken away in the night, and I can see your favorite baseball caps all lined up, and with these things you treasure so much is his leg right alongside them...where it belongs. Where it so belongs.
A perfect memory and perfect story for this contest. Without a doubt, if this story wins, places, or shows...it's a winner. I love this story so obviously written with love from your four-year-old heart.
Indy :>)
Comment Written 07-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2011
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Thank you, Indy. Your review has touched me. X
Comment from Realist101
Oh, sad...and I'm out of sixes. I can just picture a little guy, only four, doing these things. My Grandfather died when I was five. He had wandered around to the neighbors hog barn, that's about all I remember. I do remember seeing my first horse tho ... Nice work Lee. It's neat that he said "good-bye" to you, and that you remember it too. Somewhere, we have a couple of handcarved walking sticks that grandpa made and used. I wonder where they are. If not for your story, I would have forgotten about those... "/ Suse (ps, see if you can get the word suspenders to go up next to frayed?) The editor has it sitting alone? Have a great week Lee.
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2011
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Oh, sad...and I'm out of sixes. I can just picture a little guy, only four, doing these things. My Grandfather died when I was five. He had wandered around to the neighbors hog barn, that's about all I remember. I do remember seeing my first horse tho ... Nice work Lee. It's neat that he said "good-bye" to you, and that you remember it too. Somewhere, we have a couple of handcarved walking sticks that grandpa made and used. I wonder where they are. If not for your story, I would have forgotten about those... "/ Suse (ps, see if you can get the word suspenders to go up next to frayed?) The editor has it sitting alone? Have a great week Lee.
Comment Written 07-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2011
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Thank you, Suse. Great review. Find those walking sticks. X
Comment from BethShelby
This is a poignant memory. I can imagine what in must have felt like for a four year. It is interesting that he kept a spare leg and even more interesting that you've kept it all these years. I like this story. I think it is very different from you usual writing. Good luck in the ocntest.
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2011
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This is a poignant memory. I can imagine what in must have felt like for a four year. It is interesting that he kept a spare leg and even more interesting that you've kept it all these years. I like this story. I think it is very different from you usual writing. Good luck in the ocntest.
Comment Written 06-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2011
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Ah, Beth you should know by now that I'm not as shallow and hedonistic as I pose. Thank you for following my meanderings.
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Comment from Distracted23
I found my grandmother's gallstones in a prescription bottle when I was a kid. Talk about gross.
Nice, well written piece. I'll read anything you write. :-)
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2011
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I found my grandmother's gallstones in a prescription bottle when I was a kid. Talk about gross.
Nice, well written piece. I'll read anything you write. :-)
Comment Written 06-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2011
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You are too sweet. I'm glad you liked this little remembrance.
I meant this for a writing prompt, but something weird happened.
Thank you, Jill. It has been fun bantering today. Peace, Lee
Comment from artisart4u
The recollection poem is nice.
It has a good sounding tone, that keep you interested until the end.
Young kids would like this also, it would be intriguing.
Keep on writing.
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2011
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The recollection poem is nice.
It has a good sounding tone, that keep you interested until the end.
Young kids would like this also, it would be intriguing.
Keep on writing.
Comment Written 06-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2011
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thank you, artisart4u. I appreciate your encouragement. Peace, Lee
Comment from Magics02
Oh this is a sad story and you told it with so much love for your grandfather. It was endearing for me to have read this tonight as I think of my grandfathers who are no longer here in realm but in my heart just like yours.
Great write and blessings to you
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2011
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Oh this is a sad story and you told it with so much love for your grandfather. It was endearing for me to have read this tonight as I think of my grandfathers who are no longer here in realm but in my heart just like yours.
Great write and blessings to you
Comment Written 06-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2011
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Thank you Magics02. I did not mean to make you sad. Peace, Lee
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YOu didnt honey it is just I am full of emotions at times and I think about my grandfather alot too. Great write
Comment from nancyjam
You have captured well the curiosity
of a little boy. Great descriptions here.
"dish-water grip on my grip" paints an entire
scene.
With few words you tell a lovely story of
a little boy and his love for his grandfather that
is still meaningful. Love the ending.
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2011
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You have captured well the curiosity
of a little boy. Great descriptions here.
"dish-water grip on my grip" paints an entire
scene.
With few words you tell a lovely story of
a little boy and his love for his grandfather that
is still meaningful. Love the ending.
Comment Written 06-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2011
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Thank you nancyjam. This is a story of love. Peace, Lee
Comment from Soledadpaz
"Allows didn't count"! Not with four-year-olds they don't.
"Shriek by"! You do have a way with words, Lee. I can see them doing that.
"dish-water grip" I can see that, too.
Oh, Lee, what a beautiful story of family and love. It may be only 327 words but they all spell love.
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reply by the author on 06-Feb-2011
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"Allows didn't count"! Not with four-year-olds they don't.
"Shriek by"! You do have a way with words, Lee. I can see them doing that.
"dish-water grip" I can see that, too.
Oh, Lee, what a beautiful story of family and love. It may be only 327 words but they all spell love.
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Comment Written 06-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2011
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Thank you Sole. I intended this to be for the "I remember" prompt, but something screwy happened. Anyway, I like the this little story. I know you know a little about dealing with willful young ones. Thank you, Sole. Those are 327 words from my heart.
Peace, Lee
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It was a soulful read, Lee.
Sole
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Soul for Sole
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That's how you pronounce my name,
Soul-lay, :)
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I'll make a note