Railroad
poem/song lyrics99 total reviews
Comment from l.raven
Loved this poem.Has agreat flow to it.And a good rhythm and rhyme.And the picture is perfect.My husband worked on the railroad 36 years before he passed.He was 54 when he died.He would have had 42 years on the railroad if he had lived.He loved his job.He told me stories of walking the tracks.very good job
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2011
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Loved this poem.Has agreat flow to it.And a good rhythm and rhyme.And the picture is perfect.My husband worked on the railroad 36 years before he passed.He was 54 when he died.He would have had 42 years on the railroad if he had lived.He loved his job.He told me stories of walking the tracks.very good job
Comment Written 03-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2011
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Well now that's a sincere compliment since it comes from knowledge and experience. Thank you.
Comment from Littlebook
Yeah, I liked it. A good poem. An interesting and unusual topic. Good rhyming scheme, and a good flow.
Liked the language, clear, simple and direct, communicates well.
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2011
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Yeah, I liked it. A good poem. An interesting and unusual topic. Good rhyming scheme, and a good flow.
Liked the language, clear, simple and direct, communicates well.
Comment Written 03-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2011
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Thank you.
Comment from patmedium
Read the poem, felt like I was lying on my back in the middle of one of our fields back on the farm when I was a child. Looking up at a vast sky, listening to the wind.
THEN I read your notes! LOL.
You transmitted more than you realised between the lines, friend, because I was moved back in time in my memory to slightly similar conditions. Pat. xxx
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2011
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Read the poem, felt like I was lying on my back in the middle of one of our fields back on the farm when I was a child. Looking up at a vast sky, listening to the wind.
THEN I read your notes! LOL.
You transmitted more than you realised between the lines, friend, because I was moved back in time in my memory to slightly similar conditions. Pat. xxx
Comment Written 03-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2011
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Hi Pat! So nice to hear from you again. Hope all is well.
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It's so nice to be properly back, dear, among old friends and new. No more shillyshallying around away from fanstoryland. xxx
Comment from teacherdub
The rhythm of the poem mimics the sound of the train on the tracks! Well spun snapshot of a solitary life. The hobo, the wanderer, the runaway child...all would fit this fine piece. The rhythm is constant,the irregular rhyme patterns add control to the pace. Good job. td
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2011
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The rhythm of the poem mimics the sound of the train on the tracks! Well spun snapshot of a solitary life. The hobo, the wanderer, the runaway child...all would fit this fine piece. The rhythm is constant,the irregular rhyme patterns add control to the pace. Good job. td
Comment Written 03-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2011
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Thank you Ms. Teacher Dub.
Comment from Mr. Dan
Very good stuff! the language flowed...I too walked along some train tracks in my day...it does take me back.
The rhythm of the poem works too...almost hear the train on the tracks
great job there
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2011
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Very good stuff! the language flowed...I too walked along some train tracks in my day...it does take me back.
The rhythm of the poem works too...almost hear the train on the tracks
great job there
Comment Written 03-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2011
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Thank you Dan.
Comment from Peter@Poole
Actually, the rhythm sounded to me like the motion of a train, so I thought it was rather well done. I know you're paying people to say that but I really mean it this time. Peter
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2011
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Actually, the rhythm sounded to me like the motion of a train, so I thought it was rather well done. I know you're paying people to say that but I really mean it this time. Peter
Comment Written 03-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2011
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Ha! Honesty, I've always liked it.
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Victor,
The picture you chose would make on dizzy if they look at it too long! I grew up in a small railroad town and the sounds of the wheels on the track lulled me to sleep every night. When I move away I had trouble sleeping and it wasn't until I realized I no longer heard the trains. There is a good cadence to this poem/song. It should be set to music. Excellent! chey
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2011
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Hi Victor,
The picture you chose would make on dizzy if they look at it too long! I grew up in a small railroad town and the sounds of the wheels on the track lulled me to sleep every night. When I move away I had trouble sleeping and it wasn't until I realized I no longer heard the trains. There is a good cadence to this poem/song. It should be set to music. Excellent! chey
Comment Written 03-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2011
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Thank you Chey. And, hey, thanks for continuing to read me.
Comment from despiser
Victor
How about walking the tracks in the mountains of northern BC to a ghost town in the middle of the night on LSD? Lol. Yep, if only those rails could talk. Good write capturing both the mundane and adventure of days gone by, comes through cleanly. Nothing seems to compare to north American railway for mystique.
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2011
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Victor
How about walking the tracks in the mountains of northern BC to a ghost town in the middle of the night on LSD? Lol. Yep, if only those rails could talk. Good write capturing both the mundane and adventure of days gone by, comes through cleanly. Nothing seems to compare to north American railway for mystique.
Comment Written 03-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2011
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I'd have loved to have been with ya, but perhaps not on the LSD. Thanks.
Comment from animatqua
This is Johnny Cash, Carl Sandburg, and Muddy Waters all wrapped up into one. The lore of the railroad and the lore of the cowboy are both a slice of Americana--one you brought out with all of the lonesome wail a train horn can sound. Beautiful!
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2011
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This is Johnny Cash, Carl Sandburg, and Muddy Waters all wrapped up into one. The lore of the railroad and the lore of the cowboy are both a slice of Americana--one you brought out with all of the lonesome wail a train horn can sound. Beautiful!
Comment Written 03-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2011
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Now that was a very nice compliment. And that trio covers a LOT of ground.
Comment from lola29
It's amazing how the revolution that sparked the railroads is now silent, and we can travel from country to country via e-mail.
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2011
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It's amazing how the revolution that sparked the railroads is now silent, and we can travel from country to country via e-mail.
Comment Written 03-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2011
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That is a very interesting observation. And thanks for reading.