Lonely Hearts Meet
Viewing comments for Chapter 8 "Part two chapter three"Anna and her son escape from a man-made Hell.
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Comment from Espresso momma
This was filled with great imagination. I enjoyed following each line with some degree of suspense. Now to wonder what will happen to the pair, will they go one with success? Time will tell. Thanks.
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2011
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This was filled with great imagination. I enjoyed following each line with some degree of suspense. Now to wonder what will happen to the pair, will they go one with success? Time will tell. Thanks.
Comment Written 26-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from gramalot8
Enjoying the helpfulness of Troy. My daughter was mentally abused by past husband, but now has a savior in her life in new husband. Thank goodness there are still some good men out there. Keep writing this story.
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2011
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Enjoying the helpfulness of Troy. My daughter was mentally abused by past husband, but now has a savior in her life in new husband. Thank goodness there are still some good men out there. Keep writing this story.
Comment Written 26-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from MissMerri
It is obvious you write with care and feeling. There were no corrections needed anywhere that I could see, and the story is clearly and compassionately told with believable dialogue and sympathetic characters. You build up the suspense concerning the relationship developing beteeen Troy and Anna and make the reader root for some gentleness and love to come into her life and Michael's. It is a most enjoyable, though painful, story and I look forward to the next chapter.
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2011
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It is obvious you write with care and feeling. There were no corrections needed anywhere that I could see, and the story is clearly and compassionately told with believable dialogue and sympathetic characters. You build up the suspense concerning the relationship developing beteeen Troy and Anna and make the reader root for some gentleness and love to come into her life and Michael's. It is a most enjoyable, though painful, story and I look forward to the next chapter.
Comment Written 26-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2011
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Thank you for your kind review and insight.
Comment from Connie P
Anna sees no way out of her situation, even though she realizes she and her baby are in danger. She feels hopeless and vulnerable. I hope she'll take Troy's advice and hid from Bobby until something is worked out.
Waiting for more!
Connie
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2011
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Anna sees no way out of her situation, even though she realizes she and her baby are in danger. She feels hopeless and vulnerable. I hope she'll take Troy's advice and hid from Bobby until something is worked out.
Waiting for more!
Connie
Comment Written 25-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from K.P.
You have a compelling story going here.
But I thinku have to be very careful that you don't let it become a cliche. There are lots of stories that begin with the abuse of an "underdog." Where you take this wil be the reason cor its success or lack therof.
L'm going to try to find your postings before this one so I can see character development and if there are any significant plot happenings.
K.P.
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2011
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You have a compelling story going here.
But I thinku have to be very careful that you don't let it become a cliche. There are lots of stories that begin with the abuse of an "underdog." Where you take this wil be the reason cor its success or lack therof.
L'm going to try to find your postings before this one so I can see character development and if there are any significant plot happenings.
K.P.
Comment Written 25-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2011
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Thank you for your kind review. I will remember your caution.
Comment from driven
Not bad...good continuation of the story; nice o see the progression...I would like to see chapters that have a little more meat though. Good dialogue and a nice touching moment with the baby. That worked well.
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2011
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Not bad...good continuation of the story; nice o see the progression...I would like to see chapters that have a little more meat though. Good dialogue and a nice touching moment with the baby. That worked well.
Comment Written 25-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2011
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Each of my posts are only segments of chapters. The entire chapter does have a lot of meat to it. Thank you for your kind review.
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You are very welcome for my generous and kind words. Thank you for reading my review.
Comment from sunnilicious
The story is coming along quite well. I enjoyed this chaper even if it lacks romantic steam. And I picture such a pretty baby. He's so calm and loving even with the ear infection. I'm convinced his previous crying outburst was environment.
Anna and Troy... I can't wait fer them to get busy. Psycho-romance gone wild. Call in Jerry Springer!
Nice storyline. Excellent dialogue. Good work.
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2011
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The story is coming along quite well. I enjoyed this chaper even if it lacks romantic steam. And I picture such a pretty baby. He's so calm and loving even with the ear infection. I'm convinced his previous crying outburst was environment.
Anna and Troy... I can't wait fer them to get busy. Psycho-romance gone wild. Call in Jerry Springer!
Nice storyline. Excellent dialogue. Good work.
Comment Written 25-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2011
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I can promise romance but we have to get Anna healthy enough emotionally and physically for that to happen. Thank you for your kind review.
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There's a Lifetime Movie, "To Have And Hold." It's online too. Anyways the husband is with a hussy. That's how I picture Anna. A real tough cookie. Because any normal woman would of bit Bobby's D--k taken the baby and run out the door. I can see Troy being manipulated by Anna. Fer sure. Just some friendly input. :)
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Anna isn't a hussy. Many women in this situation are there because of low self-esteem and fear. Anna is one of those women. During this novel, if I do it correctly, Anna will grow. Troy isn't being manipulated. I can promise that.
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You're a nice person, Barbara. But keeping a deranged character sells. At least make her addicted to something... cigarettes, alcohol or a sex perversion. There I go with more input. Take what you may. :)
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I have numerous fans that like this story because it's factual and they enjoy the fact that I am not making her deranged and have been sensitive to abused women. Especially my fans that have been abused or who's daughter, or friend has been abused. One of my fans lost a friend to an abuser.
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I didn't know it was factual. Thought it was romantic fiction. I should read everything around the page. Then, it's a completely sad story. You write well. I enjoy your work. Good night!
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It is romantic fiction but based on a few ladies true stories to combine into one.
Comment from WilliamDeen
A very enjoyable read and well written. This Troy, his family and their dealings seems a little intriguing. Look forward to the next addition.
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2011
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A very enjoyable read and well written. This Troy, his family and their dealings seems a little intriguing. Look forward to the next addition.
Comment Written 25-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Adam C. Glasier
I think you wrote this fairly well, but not enough happens to keep me interested very long, just a few sentimental moments with Michael and the emphasis that Anna can't afford a lawyer. Might just not be my kind of read. Good job anyways.
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reply by the author on 25-Apr-2011
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I think you wrote this fairly well, but not enough happens to keep me interested very long, just a few sentimental moments with Michael and the emphasis that Anna can't afford a lawyer. Might just not be my kind of read. Good job anyways.
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Comment Written 25-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2011
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I see you are not into romance. That's fine. This is a segment of a much longer chapter. It is hard to come in once a novel has started and try to figure out what's going on. Thank you for your review.
Comment from Auroraboreal800
Hi Barbara!
This is another wonderful chapter. Very well written, very realistic situation. I thank you for your story and I hope the ending is a good one. I hope you too had a wonderful Easter.
Regards, :)
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2011
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Hi Barbara!
This is another wonderful chapter. Very well written, very realistic situation. I thank you for your story and I hope the ending is a good one. I hope you too had a wonderful Easter.
Regards, :)
Comment Written 25-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.