Lonely Hearts Meet
Viewing comments for Chapter 17 "Part 4 Chapter 5"Anna and her son escape from a man-made Hell.
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Comment from Rdfrdmom2
barbara:
One of the things which struck me as I was reading
this is that no matter how hard women try to hide,
the one person who does seem able to find them is
the person from whom they are running. It's as if
they have an uncanny ability to trace them - even
if they no longer want them but to ensure no one else
can.
thanks for sharing
love,
jan
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2011
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barbara:
One of the things which struck me as I was reading
this is that no matter how hard women try to hide,
the one person who does seem able to find them is
the person from whom they are running. It's as if
they have an uncanny ability to trace them - even
if they no longer want them but to ensure no one else
can.
thanks for sharing
love,
jan
Comment Written 21-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from denhagan
This Part Four of Chapter Five was very interesting to read about a P I friend of Paul's agreeing to help him and Troy to find Anna. I enjoyed reading this.
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2011
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This Part Four of Chapter Five was very interesting to read about a P I friend of Paul's agreeing to help him and Troy to find Anna. I enjoyed reading this.
Comment Written 21-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
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You're welcome. Dennis
Comment from ulster3
Hello barbara...
it was nice to return today and see your newest chapter. I'm really wondering by now where Anna has been all this while. The write is suspensful and entertaining at the same time. Characterization is very believable. Thanks for a good read.
Warmly, :) Rebecca
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2011
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Hello barbara...
it was nice to return today and see your newest chapter. I'm really wondering by now where Anna has been all this while. The write is suspensful and entertaining at the same time. Characterization is very believable. Thanks for a good read.
Warmly, :) Rebecca
Comment Written 21-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Readywriter52
Anna is still missing and they enlisted Everett to help them find her. Everyone is very concerned about Anna. I hope that she is all right. They do need the help of a PI.
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2011
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Anna is still missing and they enlisted Everett to help them find her. Everyone is very concerned about Anna. I hope that she is all right. They do need the help of a PI.
Comment Written 21-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2011
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Thank you for your kind review and support.
Comment from quashdog
ON you author's notes about why women don't leave an abusive raltionship, there is also the threat to friends and family. The abuser usually warns his victim that seeking help will only bring harm on those who try to help her. What I liked about this chapter part is taht it shows that this character, Troy, has a life besides trying to help Anna.
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2011
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ON you author's notes about why women don't leave an abusive raltionship, there is also the threat to friends and family. The abuser usually warns his victim that seeking help will only bring harm on those who try to help her. What I liked about this chapter part is taht it shows that this character, Troy, has a life besides trying to help Anna.
Comment Written 21-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2011
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You are so right about the abuser threatening friends and family. It just didin't list it on the site I copied this from. I appreciate your kind review and support.
Comment from AprilShower
I hope the abused person in this story wasn't murdered, Barbara. It seems that some abused women are never found dead or alive. It's too bad some people have had to live in abusive situations. I am wondering how this story will turn out. April
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2011
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I hope the abused person in this story wasn't murdered, Barbara. It seems that some abused women are never found dead or alive. It's too bad some people have had to live in abusive situations. I am wondering how this story will turn out. April
Comment Written 21-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
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You're welcome, Barbara. April
Comment from jadapenn
Hmmm, nice fast paced chapter, girlfriend. Now all the wheels are in motion for finding Anna. Hope Everett knows how to go about finding someone he has never seen before.
I enjoyed. luv jada
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2011
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Hmmm, nice fast paced chapter, girlfriend. Now all the wheels are in motion for finding Anna. Hope Everett knows how to go about finding someone he has never seen before.
I enjoyed. luv jada
Comment Written 21-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2011
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The reason for the sketch. He at least has some idea of her appearence. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from JW
This chapter is another great addition to your story, even though we are still left up in the air about where Anna might be.
Here one recommendation you may or may not want to use:
"I should probably show up at the office(,) since I took a few days off.
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2011
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This chapter is another great addition to your story, even though we are still left up in the air about where Anna might be.
Here one recommendation you may or may not want to use:
"I should probably show up at the office(,) since I took a few days off.
Comment Written 21-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2011
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Thank you for your suggestion. I can't seem to get the hang of commas.
Comment from despiser
The story reads very good Barbara. Fluid and easy to follow. The background sounds like Troy is older? Though I'm coming in late in the story.
They sound almost cavalier about Anna's disappearance, no sense of urgency to find her. Again, I'm not familiar with the story.
Overall structure is well defined, dialog is natural and not forced
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2011
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The story reads very good Barbara. Fluid and easy to follow. The background sounds like Troy is older? Though I'm coming in late in the story.
They sound almost cavalier about Anna's disappearance, no sense of urgency to find her. Again, I'm not familiar with the story.
Overall structure is well defined, dialog is natural and not forced
Comment Written 21-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from lola29
Troy and his father seem to be making a lot of progress in finding Anna. A lot of people simply would not exert such energy. It's very inspiring.
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2011
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Troy and his father seem to be making a lot of progress in finding Anna. A lot of people simply would not exert such energy. It's very inspiring.
Comment Written 21-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2011
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If you remember that Troy's mother was killed by his step father and Paul and Betty took him in and raised him, it would make sense they came to Anna's aid. Thank you for the kind review.