Lonely Hearts Meet
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Comment from Queenise
Barbara, I like this chapter. It is kind of a slow down moment and fits right in. Love the story about the Flowers. This has a fairy tale like quality. Great imagery and the emotions are electric. Blessings. Queenise
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2011
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Barbara, I like this chapter. It is kind of a slow down moment and fits right in. Love the story about the Flowers. This has a fairy tale like quality. Great imagery and the emotions are electric. Blessings. Queenise
Comment Written 27-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
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You're welcome,Barbara. Queenise
Comment from cjvaughn
Hey Barbara,
Great chapter! Loved your hubby's artwork as well, he has a nice eye for colors.
As always, I enjoy that you have taken the time to add the different services for anyone reading to get the help they may need.
Your characters are realistic and their problems are those current with today. Your writing moves me. Another wonderful chapter.
I could find nothing to suggest how to make this better.
Have a wonderful vacation and enjoy your family! CJ
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2011
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Hey Barbara,
Great chapter! Loved your hubby's artwork as well, he has a nice eye for colors.
As always, I enjoy that you have taken the time to add the different services for anyone reading to get the help they may need.
Your characters are realistic and their problems are those current with today. Your writing moves me. Another wonderful chapter.
I could find nothing to suggest how to make this better.
Have a wonderful vacation and enjoy your family! CJ
Comment Written 26-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Bayberry
I like it when there's a story within a story, and this chapter is blessing us with double stories about the Indian Paint Brush. I enjoyed reading about them so much in this fast-paced writing about overcoming the affects of an abusive past.
Your Author Notes provide a great service with information for people who need to reach out to someone who's in trouble. Thank you for sharing Barbara. Great job, Josie (I also enjoyed the artwork and you're so fortunate to have a hubby who can help you enhance your postings.)
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I like it when there's a story within a story, and this chapter is blessing us with double stories about the Indian Paint Brush. I enjoyed reading about them so much in this fast-paced writing about overcoming the affects of an abusive past.
Your Author Notes provide a great service with information for people who need to reach out to someone who's in trouble. Thank you for sharing Barbara. Great job, Josie (I also enjoyed the artwork and you're so fortunate to have a hubby who can help you enhance your postings.)
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Comment Written 26-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Falseirish
What a wonderful story! And your husbands artistry was amazing! You two both compliment each other extraordinarily well:) Looking forward to furture chaptersss!
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2011
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What a wonderful story! And your husbands artistry was amazing! You two both compliment each other extraordinarily well:) Looking forward to furture chaptersss!
Comment Written 26-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Writingfundimension
Hi, barbara. Please tell your husband that I very much enjoy his artwork in your illustration. I think he shows real talent and hope he will forge ahead!
Your chapter was really enhanced by the telling of the Indian legends. Some foreshadowing with the three mysterious calls - but in these kinds of situations progress is rarely linear. I like your character of Troy very much - his kindness is touching and inspiring. You have created a very empathetic character in him.
Have a great and well-deserved vacation, barbara. You've been busy churning out chapters so I hope you come back refreshed and renewed. Kind regards, Bev
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2011
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Hi, barbara. Please tell your husband that I very much enjoy his artwork in your illustration. I think he shows real talent and hope he will forge ahead!
Your chapter was really enhanced by the telling of the Indian legends. Some foreshadowing with the three mysterious calls - but in these kinds of situations progress is rarely linear. I like your character of Troy very much - his kindness is touching and inspiring. You have created a very empathetic character in him.
Have a great and well-deserved vacation, barbara. You've been busy churning out chapters so I hope you come back refreshed and renewed. Kind regards, Bev
Comment Written 26-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
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Welcome!
Comment from sk42rn
Thanks for the great read, as usual.
Your works are always inspiring and hit right at the heart of many social issues facing our world today. Enjoy your vacation! Make it restful for yourself. SKN
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2011
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Thanks for the great read, as usual.
Your works are always inspiring and hit right at the heart of many social issues facing our world today. Enjoy your vacation! Make it restful for yourself. SKN
Comment Written 26-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from mshugh
Anna handed her Michael.
There's something funny about that sentnce - I know what you're trying to say, but it doesn't flow - make sense?
Nice background on the flowers - fits in well.
He's not a struggling artist - that's better than some pictures I do
Hope all is well
Michael
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2011
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Anna handed her Michael.
There's something funny about that sentnce - I know what you're trying to say, but it doesn't flow - make sense?
Nice background on the flowers - fits in well.
He's not a struggling artist - that's better than some pictures I do
Hope all is well
Michael
Comment Written 26-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2011
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I am glad to hear from you. I will see what I can do about that sentence. I hope you are doing well.
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Taking the month of August to write and relax in the mountains LOL
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I hope it's cool in the mountains.
Comment from eliz100
This was a good read from beginning to end, as usual. The story about the Indian maiden was a nice touch of pointing out gently Anna's insecurities and giving her some hope.
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2011
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This was a good read from beginning to end, as usual. The story about the Indian maiden was a nice touch of pointing out gently Anna's insecurities and giving her some hope.
Comment Written 26-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Mara del Mar
Barbara A nice chapter, I have desire to pass the time and define the situation of divorce that Anna can be free to marry Troy. Congratulations, I loved it a lot. Great job.
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2011
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Barbara A nice chapter, I have desire to pass the time and define the situation of divorce that Anna can be free to marry Troy. Congratulations, I loved it a lot. Great job.
Comment Written 26-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Jay Squires
This was a good chapter, Barbara. I especially enjoyed the myths of the flowers' color changing.
Only a couple of concerns:
I don't how to handle all this help." [Did you leave out a word?]
Regards,
Jay
"It'll take a while have a seat." [You need either a full stop or a semi-colon after "while".
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2011
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This was a good chapter, Barbara. I especially enjoyed the myths of the flowers' color changing.
Only a couple of concerns:
I don't how to handle all this help." [Did you leave out a word?]
Regards,
Jay
"It'll take a while have a seat." [You need either a full stop or a semi-colon after "while".
Comment Written 26-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2011
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Thank you for catching those. I have make the corrctions.