Lonely Hearts Meet
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Comment from Deorre Leonard
I like the way you wrote this chapter it flows right along. Anna has been though a lot and she needs to move on. I can't wait for her abusive husband to get what he deserves. Good read.
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I like the way you wrote this chapter it flows right along. Anna has been though a lot and she needs to move on. I can't wait for her abusive husband to get what he deserves. Good read.
Comment Written 12-Sep-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from BigTomNY
Loved it!!!!!!!!!!!! loved it!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! loved it!!!!!!!!! i must go read the rest!!!!!!!!!
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Loved it!!!!!!!!!!!! loved it!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! loved it!!!!!!!!! i must go read the rest!!!!!!!!!
Comment Written 12-Sep-2011
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Thank you for your encouraging review.
Comment from Carolyn Hilliard
The chapter read smoothly. I feel you've made the right decision about concentrating more on the divorce; it's where bullies swing sloppy excuses for bad behavior.
Hope all is going well too. I bought my wedding dress yesterday. This time is so special time; we want everyone in our world to know.
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The chapter read smoothly. I feel you've made the right decision about concentrating more on the divorce; it's where bullies swing sloppy excuses for bad behavior.
Hope all is going well too. I bought my wedding dress yesterday. This time is so special time; we want everyone in our world to know.
Comment Written 12-Sep-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from rihojo
Although it's never easy to judge a work when one has no idea of what certain lines may allude to, such as, "I'm seeing those flower petals getting a deeper red every day", it's comforting to know that other characters in the story are also unaware as to the meaning behind it.
I found this flowed nicely. The dialog was straightforward and one got a sense of character from it. This is a gift in itself as some writers write dialog as if they're talking to themselves and it thus comes out as monotone. This didn't. I could feel the personalities. Well done. The reason I didn't go for 5 stars is that I had too little in the way of surrounding atmosphere. This would have been a golden opportunity for us to get a feel of just how important it is to have a judge see things our way. It's the kind of thing that can affect the future in a profound way. We understand a lot through the dialog but a little more detail goes a long way. How did the courtroom look? How did it make our main character feel. Intimidated? Comforted? Anyway, as I said, it flowed, which is very important.
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Although it's never easy to judge a work when one has no idea of what certain lines may allude to, such as, "I'm seeing those flower petals getting a deeper red every day", it's comforting to know that other characters in the story are also unaware as to the meaning behind it.
I found this flowed nicely. The dialog was straightforward and one got a sense of character from it. This is a gift in itself as some writers write dialog as if they're talking to themselves and it thus comes out as monotone. This didn't. I could feel the personalities. Well done. The reason I didn't go for 5 stars is that I had too little in the way of surrounding atmosphere. This would have been a golden opportunity for us to get a feel of just how important it is to have a judge see things our way. It's the kind of thing that can affect the future in a profound way. We understand a lot through the dialog but a little more detail goes a long way. How did the courtroom look? How did it make our main character feel. Intimidated? Comforted? Anyway, as I said, it flowed, which is very important.
Comment Written 12-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2011
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Well, I intentionally did go into the courtroom because I will have their divorce trial in the next post, but personally I would find the courtroom boring and I am sure people can use their imagination to know what a courtroom looks like or they can watch Judge Judy. I think I was pretty clear thoughout how Anna felt. It is not my style to write flowery. I don't like to read it, it bores me to tears, so I don't write that way. I write short and crisp. My fans like it that way. You have judged me on a personal preference and not on my ability as a writer. Thank you for your review. I do appreciate your comments.
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Nobody asked for flowery, least of all me. I detest flowery. Of course I have judged you through personal preference. Anyone who tells you they don't is a liar. That doesn't mean I didn't take into account your style of writing. I did, and personally felt you need more atmosphere, which can be as punchy as Dashiel Hammett. I, too, get bored with writers TRYING to create atmosphere and all too often thinking they need details and adjectives that would have driven Shakespeare nuts. It could be anything. It doesn't need much. A bailliff's scuffed shoe. The judge drinking water as if she'd polished off two bottles of bourbon overnight. I'm sorry you felt misjudged. Maybe your "fans" will form a posse. :-) Ciao
Comment from Janie King
The real sad part of this is so many women truly goe through this kind of mess. My mopm started praying about the mates we would marry when we were babies. She prayed extra prayers for my brothers mates, not that she loved them more but when there's a divorce the girls ususally get the children and the father's end up with the bits and pieces. God anwered her prayer and they all had wonderful wives and not the great grant babies (11) are showing up and the oldest one's are seven and they're parents have wonderful marriages, of course she immediately started praying for the mates of the grandchildren and now she prays for the mates of the great grandchildren..mom's a prayer warrior you might say. Good chapter. God bless.
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The real sad part of this is so many women truly goe through this kind of mess. My mopm started praying about the mates we would marry when we were babies. She prayed extra prayers for my brothers mates, not that she loved them more but when there's a divorce the girls ususally get the children and the father's end up with the bits and pieces. God anwered her prayer and they all had wonderful wives and not the great grant babies (11) are showing up and the oldest one's are seven and they're parents have wonderful marriages, of course she immediately started praying for the mates of the grandchildren and now she prays for the mates of the great grandchildren..mom's a prayer warrior you might say. Good chapter. God bless.
Comment Written 12-Sep-2011
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Thank you for your kind review and story,
Comment from barfy
I've been in a courtroom a few times in my life... Divorce... And standing up for a friend... There was a lot of waiting around... a very boring time, then... The adrenalin of standing to answer questions and make speech... Our piece reminded me of this...
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I've been in a courtroom a few times in my life... Divorce... And standing up for a friend... There was a lot of waiting around... a very boring time, then... The adrenalin of standing to answer questions and make speech... Our piece reminded me of this...
Comment Written 12-Sep-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from rheabug
Thank you for sharing another chapter in your ongoing book.
I enjoyed the reading of this chapter. I agree two trials would have been to much. Have a blessed day!
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2011
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Thank you for sharing another chapter in your ongoing book.
I enjoyed the reading of this chapter. I agree two trials would have been to much. Have a blessed day!
Comment Written 12-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Cheryl Daphine
Very good chapter. I would have hoped for more time too. There is a case in our town, of a 26 yr old girl,who was grabbed and murdered by her ex and his parents. Then dumped in a septic tank,behind a church. This happened this past spring. There are rumors going around that the county may not have the funds to take it to court. I am so angry about this Barbara. I look forward to the next chapter,and want to tell Anna to watch the nut-case mother.
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2011
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Very good chapter. I would have hoped for more time too. There is a case in our town, of a 26 yr old girl,who was grabbed and murdered by her ex and his parents. Then dumped in a septic tank,behind a church. This happened this past spring. There are rumors going around that the county may not have the funds to take it to court. I am so angry about this Barbara. I look forward to the next chapter,and want to tell Anna to watch the nut-case mother.
Comment Written 12-Sep-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from bookishfabler
I'm glad you wrote that note about the trial, becuse that was what I was going to suggest. I thought talking about the trial had less impact than actually being involved in it, but since you brought it up, two whole trials would probably be too much. Thanks again for sharign you book.
hugs book
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2011
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I'm glad you wrote that note about the trial, becuse that was what I was going to suggest. I thought talking about the trial had less impact than actually being involved in it, but since you brought it up, two whole trials would probably be too much. Thanks again for sharign you book.
hugs book
Comment Written 12-Sep-2011
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Thank youi for your kind review and input on the trials.
Comment from Adri7enne
Good chapter, Barbara. I'm glad you didn't go into the details of this trial, followed by the divorce trial. Might have been too much.
Must be pretty scary to have an abusive partner. It's always been my greatest fear - physical violence. Must be a terrible shadow over a life.
Well done, Barbara.
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Good chapter, Barbara. I'm glad you didn't go into the details of this trial, followed by the divorce trial. Might have been too much.
Must be pretty scary to have an abusive partner. It's always been my greatest fear - physical violence. Must be a terrible shadow over a life.
Well done, Barbara.
Comment Written 12-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.