Lonely Hearts Meet
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Comment from emmaysavage
This chapter just fit my mood this morning, and I was really enjoying this family interaction. I enjoy watching this baby grow. I like the resurfacing of Anna's self doubts and fear at the end.
I have several books going, and I think it's sometimes good to work on more than one project at once.
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2012
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This chapter just fit my mood this morning, and I was really enjoying this family interaction. I enjoy watching this baby grow. I like the resurfacing of Anna's self doubts and fear at the end.
I have several books going, and I think it's sometimes good to work on more than one project at once.
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reply by the author on 09-Jan-2012
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I am not able to do that. I need to stay focused and I'm very ADD. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Cumbrianlass
Uh oh, I think some feelings need to be declared here. Anna's thoughts are typical of someone with low self-esteen - not thinking anyone would find her 'worthy' of genuine love and affection. Nicely done, Barbara. Troy's a star.
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Uh oh, I think some feelings need to be declared here. Anna's thoughts are typical of someone with low self-esteen - not thinking anyone would find her 'worthy' of genuine love and affection. Nicely done, Barbara. Troy's a star.
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Thank you for the kind review and insight.
Comment from Cheryl Daphine
When will Anna ever realize that Troy is in love with her? When will she finally be free of the memories and threats? This has been a great story to lose yourself in. Good chapter Barbara.
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When will Anna ever realize that Troy is in love with her? When will she finally be free of the memories and threats? This has been a great story to lose yourself in. Good chapter Barbara.
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Penny 4 your thought
This is an easy read and follows you story line. Although I would add a bit more friction or humor to keep the reader wanting more. Maybe you need to kick that muse of yours in the proverbial pants to get the ball rolling.
All in all still a decent five.
A Penny for your thought
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2012
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This is an easy read and follows you story line. Although I would add a bit more friction or humor to keep the reader wanting more. Maybe you need to kick that muse of yours in the proverbial pants to get the ball rolling.
All in all still a decent five.
A Penny for your thought
Comment Written 09-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2012
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Thank you for the kind review. This is part of a building chapter preparing for some big action. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from HPicasso
I think you did another fine chapter.
Troy is not following the husband syndrome, he is proving to be too helpful.
This wasan easy read that grabbed my attention.
It looks like Anna might be interested in Troy.
Seems to be moving forward well.
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2012
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I think you did another fine chapter.
Troy is not following the husband syndrome, he is proving to be too helpful.
This wasan easy read that grabbed my attention.
It looks like Anna might be interested in Troy.
Seems to be moving forward well.
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Patrick G Cox
Hi Barbara,
The lives seem to be slowly healing and coming together, but it seems Troy needs to work on his side of the relationship now!
Well written, dialogues are good.
Patrick
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Hi Barbara,
The lives seem to be slowly healing and coming together, but it seems Troy needs to work on his side of the relationship now!
Well written, dialogues are good.
Patrick
Comment Written 09-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2012
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Troy is too worried about moving Anna too fast. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Barbara,
If your muse will promise to help me write stories like you I would be glad to take her off your hands! Anna won't let herself realize how much Troy thinks of her and I hope she invites him into her world soon. You have such interesting characters and each one is different in their own way. Excellent chapter, muse or not....blessings, chey
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2012
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Hi Barbara,
If your muse will promise to help me write stories like you I would be glad to take her off your hands! Anna won't let herself realize how much Troy thinks of her and I hope she invites him into her world soon. You have such interesting characters and each one is different in their own way. Excellent chapter, muse or not....blessings, chey
Comment Written 09-Jan-2012
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Thank you for the kind review. I would gladly give my muse away, I need sleep.
Comment from ShirleyT
Just reading your story for the first time and I must say I'm very impressed with the story line. Rebuilding trust is difficult after being in an abusive situation, and your words convey this message. I found hope yet filtered through fear in this chapter.
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Just reading your story for the first time and I must say I'm very impressed with the story line. Rebuilding trust is difficult after being in an abusive situation, and your words convey this message. I found hope yet filtered through fear in this chapter.
Comment Written 09-Jan-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Writingfundimension
This chapter continues, in a seamless manner, the saga of Anna's struggle to gain normalcy in her life. I think you are wise in showing her slow return to self-respect. It makes sense considering the violent nature of the abuse she's experienced. I loved the added touch of the painting. It forms a nice bridge from the safety of Troy's home to her new apartment. Great job, barbara. Kind regards, Bev
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This chapter continues, in a seamless manner, the saga of Anna's struggle to gain normalcy in her life. I think you are wise in showing her slow return to self-respect. It makes sense considering the violent nature of the abuse she's experienced. I loved the added touch of the painting. It forms a nice bridge from the safety of Troy's home to her new apartment. Great job, barbara. Kind regards, Bev
Comment Written 09-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2012
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Thank you for the kind review and insight. I just took a hit over the painting. I felt it was necessary and it will pay another role later.
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Oh for gosh sakes. What a silly thing to pick on. I think your instinct was a good one, barbara.
Comment from judiverse
A great chapter, barbara. The painting makes a great detail and heops reveal character. I thought Anna's initial comment about the portrait was so restrained (very good) but that just shows Anna's continuing feeling that she isn't deserving of anything good. Same thing when she and Troy discuss where to hang it and she can't be decisive. Just shows that she's been beaten down so much she isn't used to thinking for herself. She seems to be making strides, but the old wounds remain. Overcoming abusive situation must indeed take time. Great work. judi
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2012
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A great chapter, barbara. The painting makes a great detail and heops reveal character. I thought Anna's initial comment about the portrait was so restrained (very good) but that just shows Anna's continuing feeling that she isn't deserving of anything good. Same thing when she and Troy discuss where to hang it and she can't be decisive. Just shows that she's been beaten down so much she isn't used to thinking for herself. She seems to be making strides, but the old wounds remain. Overcoming abusive situation must indeed take time. Great work. judi
Comment Written 09-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.