Comment from tinams

Excellent

Your story is very well written but unfortunately I havn't read any other chapters so I am at a slight disadvantage. There was a nice twist at the end,leaving the reader with something to think about.

 Comment Written 31-Mar-2012

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reply by the author on 31-Mar-2012

Thanks for taking time to read this chapter, tinams. Yes, quite a lot has taken place in previous chapters, so I can see that it would be a bit confusing. Your generous review is much appreciated! Bev

Comment from IndianaIrish

Excellent

There's something really special about this story, Bev, and I'm loving it! Your characters are absorbing and the mystery has my mind doing cartwheels. Excellent chapter!!
karyn :>)

 Comment Written 31-Mar-2012

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reply by the author on 31-Mar-2012

Thank you very kindly, karyn. Father Brian has found a home in my head for sure. I so appreciate your wonderful review and words of support, my friend. :) Hugs, Bev

Comment from c_lucas

Excellent

This is a very well written post with a twist. Someone is trying to frame the priest. It has an smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.

 Comment Written 31-Mar-2012

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reply by the author on 31-Mar-2012

Thank you so much, charlie. I really appreciate you taking time to read my chapter and send along your generous support. Kind regards, Bev

reply by c_lucas on 31-Mar-2012

You're welcome, Bev. Charlie

Comment from JW

Excellent

Your story is well written and it makes for a good addition to your story. You also ended the chapter with a nice hook. It definitely leaves the reader with something to think about.

Good job. JW

 Comment Written 31-Mar-2012

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reply by the author on 31-Mar-2012

Thank you very much, Jonathon. You're most kind to read the chapter and support so generously. Warm regards, Bev

Comment from AprilShower

Excellent

Well done, Bev. I wonder if Father Brian maybe accidentally let something slip in earshot of this killer or the killer heard her confide something to Father Brian. He must be someone in the church. I'm anxious to find out who is the killer. :o) April

 Comment Written 31-Mar-2012

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reply by the author on 31-Mar-2012

Thanks so much for this great review, April. I really appreciate your support for and interest in this chapter. Good hearing from you! Warm regards, Bev

Comment from elgone

Excellent

This is a great chapter for your story. It was a smooth read with a lot of mystery lingering within it to compel reading further. It is very effectively written and the conversations, even with the lunatic at the end were good. The dire warning of the medicine man forebodes what may be ahead.

E

 Comment Written 31-Mar-2012

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reply by the author on 31-Mar-2012

Thanks so much, elgone. I really appreciate your words of support and your generous review. There's lots more trouble ahead! Warm regards, Bev

Comment from Gungalo

Excellent

Oh that is a leading question/hint of a riddle. Could it be true. Could Father has been the cause of all her problems or is there more to the story?

 Comment Written 31-Mar-2012

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reply by the author on 31-Mar-2012

Much more LOL! Thanks so much, Gungalo. You're very sweet to review my chapter. Hugs, Bev

reply by Gungalo on 31-Mar-2012

Smile girl.

Comment from Rob Caudle

Excellent

WOW WOW WOW I loved this Bev I wish I had a hard copy a
Cozy fire and the afternoon to read this book it definitely my kind of read I loved every thing about it can you stop everything else you are doing and just write I love your reviews and would miss them but I love your book sign me up for the first copies you fan forever. Alas I cant give you 12 stars for this nor can I give you the six you deserve. but I spent my sixers too soon I am afraid
Rob

 Comment Written 31-Mar-2012

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reply by the author on 31-Mar-2012

Aw, you're better than double cream, homemade ice cream, Rob. I so appreciate your caring about my story and offering such generous and touching support. I'm sittin' on top of the world, my friend, and it's all thanks to you. Warmest regards, Bev

Comment from judiverse

Excellent

This is certainly moving along well. You get inside Father Brian's thinking and show him during the processing of the crime scene--realizing that what is being done is necessary but hating to think of Debra being handled as a victim. Father Brian seems very compassionate. LIke the investigators he speculates about the reasons for the way Debra's body was left. Going to the summer camp gives Father a chance to think things through. Having him recall the medicine man's words is very effective. The mysterious voice at the end is very chilling, as it warns Father Brian that his actions are somehow responsible for Debra's death.
Excellent suspense. judi

 Comment Written 31-Mar-2012

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reply by the author on 31-Mar-2012

Hi, judi. Thank you so very much for your thorough and excellent review. I really appreciate the way you point out the parts that work for you, as that's so helpful to me. It's so kind of you to read my chapter and review so generously. Warmest regards, Bev

reply by judiverse on 31-Mar-2012

You are welcome, Bev. Your Father Brian is turning out to be quite an interesting character. judi

reply by the author on 31-Mar-2012

Thanks, judi. I'm liking him very much :) xxx Bev

Comment from gramalot8

Excellent

Writing.... this is a good chapter. I haven't read the others, but this was well written. Good presentation of Father Brian's thoughts. Your ending leaves your reader in a suspense and wondering what the meaning of the riddle is and makes them axious for the next chapter. Good job and thanks for sharing with us.

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 Comment Written 31-Mar-2012

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reply by the author on 31-Mar-2012

Thank you so much, gramalot. I really appreciate you taking time to read and review this chapter. Your comments are very encouraging. Warm regards, Bev