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Lonely Hearts Meet

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Anna and her son escape from a man-made Hell.

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Comment from rtobaygo
Exceptional
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NICE INTRODUCTION OF CONFLICT INTO THE SETTING, THEN DEFUSING SAME. HAD A DOWN-HOME-ATMOSPHERE TO IT, WHICH SEEMED TO BRING THE READER INTO THE ACTION. EXCELLENT INTERACTION BETWEEN CHARACTERS ALONG WITH GOOD IMAGERY. NICELY DONE!

TAKE CARE,

RAY

 Comment Written 09-Jul-2012

reply by the author on 09-Jul-2012
    THANK YOU FOR YOUR KIND REVIEW AND CONTINUED SUPPORT.
Comment from ScarletClearwater
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Well it seems your work here is complete. What will you be writing next? This was a great work with power and important issues. Fabulous job!

 Comment Written 09-Jul-2012

reply by the author on 09-Jul-2012
    Savannah Love is my next novel. I will be stretches myself on this one. Not sure I can pull it off. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from robyn corum
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I liked the way this ended, with the family getting patched back together. It was well-written and showed a lot of love and compassion. Good work. Congrats!

 Comment Written 09-Jul-2012

reply by the author on 09-Jul-2012
    Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from RaymondJohn
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The third paragraph in the introduction is repetitive. You have some lengthy exchanges in dialog that should be broken at places with action by the characters. The story is interesting and I like the characters. But I would like to know more about them. Best wishes. ray

I reread and gave you your rightful rating. I may have been tired or something. Sorry. Ray.

 Comment Written 09-Jul-2012

reply by the author on 09-Jul-2012
    This happens to be the final chapter of a 350 word novel. People who followed the novel understand the characters perfectly. I rechecked the third paragraph in the introduction and I don't see the repetion. Please explain. Thank you for the review.
reply by RaymondJohn on 09-Jul-2012
    Why does Daddy keep staring at Troy and me?/"Why do you keep looking at Troy and me?"
    Sorry. I really do believe every chapter, no matter how long or short, should be a stand-alone. Unless the conversation is intense and has to show only the interchange, it's advisable to have the conversation with some action. This is particularly true when you have short sentences. I review blindly, so I do not who the writer is. I know you are a very good writer, so I hope my rating diidn't upset you. Best. Ray.
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2012
    No, it doesn't I was just confused by it. Understand now your reasoning. Unfortunately if I explain the characters with each poost, then the book would be thousuands of pages.
reply by RaymondJohn on 09-Jul-2012
    You don't have to reexplain, just add a little new fact or insight. It keeps the story fresh forever. Believe me.
Comment from *erin*
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Great ending. I'm happy Anna has finally found some peace, both with her abusive past and her parents. I'm certain she and Troy will have a good life together. Great writing, it was a pleasure to read.

 Comment Written 09-Jul-2012

reply by the author on 09-Jul-2012
    Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from vivicadad
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Really good write. I love the conversation and the part where Anna talks about wanting to be a daughter. Most parents don't realize when their kids grow up really. Abuse is the worst thing that can happen to anyone and your characters display that emotion well. Nice one.

 Comment Written 09-Jul-2012

reply by the author on 09-Jul-2012
    Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from JW
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In reading this ending, there is no doubt this is an excellent ending to what is an excellent story.

Thanks for sharing this with us. JW

 Comment Written 09-Jul-2012

reply by the author on 09-Jul-2012
    Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from jadapenn
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Hi Barbie, it's been awhile. Time does fly nowadays. I loved this chapter and am glad to see Anna is up and about and coming into her own. Now it remains for her and Troy to make a new life together. Well written. luv jada

 Comment Written 09-Jul-2012

reply by the author on 09-Jul-2012
    Thank you, Jada for the kind review.
Comment from Anastajiya
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Wow this is such a great book. It definitely will sell good if you ever publish this. All of these chapters are so interesting. Great job!



- Anastajiya

 Comment Written 09-Jul-2012

reply by the author on 09-Jul-2012
    Thank you for the kind review and encouraging words.
reply by Anastajiya on 09-Jul-2012
    Your welcome.
Comment from Auroraboreal800
Exceptional
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Congratulation Barbara! You find the perfecto last chapter for this story... I'm so pleased how Anna and her dad have made amends, and how things are settled in the relationship between Anna and Troy.
THANK YOU FOR SUCH A WONDERFUL STORY!! God bless!
:)


 Comment Written 09-Jul-2012

reply by the author on 09-Jul-2012
    Thank you for the kind review.