Hedgerow Tales
Viewing comments for Chapter 1 "Our Posh New Den"Book 3 in the Hedgerow Series
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Comment from Elladella
Enjoyed the read. It flows well and I didn't notice anything to bring to your attention with, perhaps, the exception of a very close repetition of "and's" in the 2 last lines - maybe you would care to look into it?...
"What a good idea," said Tommy...and then,
"And how about calling it, Our Posh New Den!"
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reply by the author on 14-Aug-2012
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Enjoyed the read. It flows well and I didn't notice anything to bring to your attention with, perhaps, the exception of a very close repetition of "and's" in the 2 last lines - maybe you would care to look into it?...
"What a good idea," said Tommy...and then,
"And how about calling it, Our Posh New Den!"
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 14-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2012
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Thank you for this lovely helpful review, Elladella! I have taken out the 'and' in the last line, leaving it as
"What a good idea," said Tommy...and then,
"How about calling it - Our Posh New Den!"
Sounds much better, thank you! I appreciate your help! xsx
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yes - much better :)))
Welcome!
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Thank you!! xsx