A Little Viking's Tale
A rhyming short story for children122 total reviews
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
A Little Viking's Tale
by EricDaGoose
Nice rhyming short story for children. Congratulations on your publishing. I like the presentation. Good luck with your reviews.
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2021
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A Little Viking's Tale
by EricDaGoose
Nice rhyming short story for children. Congratulations on your publishing. I like the presentation. Good luck with your reviews.
Comment Written 14-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2021
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Thank you for your review
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Although there was no rhythm in this poem, I enjoyed the story and the end rhymes. An endearing epic children's story. Brining some meter into this poem would help with the flow, love Dolly x
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Although there was no rhythm in this poem, I enjoyed the story and the end rhymes. An endearing epic children's story. Brining some meter into this poem would help with the flow, love Dolly x
Comment Written 14-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2021
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When you?re writing a detailed story like this at this level it is near impossible to have both rhythm and the right words your words become more limited? say it has no rhythm is a little extreme but yeah my syllable counts Not what?s the code you please would require thank you for the excellent review
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I wouldn?t say it was impossible x x x
Comment from LJbutterfly
This is a great children's story in poetry form that delivers a clear message: When something not so good happens, do not give up and do not be afraid to try things that will make it all better. Again, do not give up. The story was interesting and made you glad Eric was successful.
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2021
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This is a great children's story in poetry form that delivers a clear message: When something not so good happens, do not give up and do not be afraid to try things that will make it all better. Again, do not give up. The story was interesting and made you glad Eric was successful.
Comment Written 14-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2021
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Thanks for the excellent review
Comment from Jasmine Girl
I have found your books on Amazon. You have published many children's books. They are all beautifully illustrated by yourself. You might be able to sell a few books by promoting them here.
Well done.
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2021
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I have found your books on Amazon. You have published many children's books. They are all beautifully illustrated by yourself. You might be able to sell a few books by promoting them here.
Well done.
Comment Written 14-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2021
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I think I looked into that it was pretty expensive. Apparently it?s pretty hard to make a name for yourself I think I?ve already been culture cancel before I began it?s possible
Comment from papa55mike
I guess stop signs don't know that Vikings take what they want. What a wonderfully written poem, and I love the artwork. Best of luck with your writing!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2021
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I guess stop signs don't know that Vikings take what they want. What a wonderfully written poem, and I love the artwork. Best of luck with your writing!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment Written 14-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2021
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thanks'
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I enjoyed reading and I'm sure children would to.
And then the sign started to speak.
"You stop right there!" are the words that he said. (dialogue so you need a comma after 'speak')
Eric asked the sign, "why should I stop here? (dialogue so a capital 'w' on 'why')
The sign said, "go and do as you please. (dialogue so a capital 'g' on 'go' & the same throughout your poem)
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2021
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I enjoyed reading and I'm sure children would to.
And then the sign started to speak.
"You stop right there!" are the words that he said. (dialogue so you need a comma after 'speak')
Eric asked the sign, "why should I stop here? (dialogue so a capital 'w' on 'why')
The sign said, "go and do as you please. (dialogue so a capital 'g' on 'go' & the same throughout your poem)
Comment Written 14-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2021
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thanks,,,done
Comment from Sherry Asbury
You did an amazing job with your rhyme and it is a charming story. Now, I have a bloody streak and would have had him get hit by a car....just a little bit...for ignoring a stop sign, then you have a lesson to the story.
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2021
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You did an amazing job with your rhyme and it is a charming story. Now, I have a bloody streak and would have had him get hit by a car....just a little bit...for ignoring a stop sign, then you have a lesson to the story.
Comment Written 14-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2021
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Well you missed the lesson I would have a double lesson if I added that and that?s right up my alley I?ve done that before?thank you for the review
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I am not awake yet. I live in SW P:Portland...
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Comment from Seshadri_Sreenivasan
I enjoyed reading your poem and I am going to show this my grandkids. This is sure to appeal to all age groups. Nice flow and rhyme. Thanks for sharing! Good luck with your sales.
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I enjoyed reading your poem and I am going to show this my grandkids. This is sure to appeal to all age groups. Nice flow and rhyme. Thanks for sharing! Good luck with your sales.
Comment Written 14-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2021
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Thanks for the excellent review
Comment from Mary Shifman
I like your poem and I think that kids would enjoy it, as well. I noticed a couple of typos. In stanza 10, line 3: change "new" to (knew) and in Stanza 13, line 1: "go (to) town" The use of contractions would also make for a smoother rhythm. I made some other notations but I wasn't sure how you felt about suggestions so I'm not including them at this time. I commend you on your ability to make a good children's poem. I'm not proficient at coming up with creative and appropriate stories.
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2021
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I like your poem and I think that kids would enjoy it, as well. I noticed a couple of typos. In stanza 10, line 3: change "new" to (knew) and in Stanza 13, line 1: "go (to) town" The use of contractions would also make for a smoother rhythm. I made some other notations but I wasn't sure how you felt about suggestions so I'm not including them at this time. I commend you on your ability to make a good children's poem. I'm not proficient at coming up with creative and appropriate stories.
Comment Written 14-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2021
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Thanks for the excellent review and I should have changed those typos as they were changed in the book😊
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You are very welcome.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This Young Adult Poetry speaks a rhyming short story for children, a little Viking named Eric's tale, he lived a life in a ship on the sea, he fished all day and sang at night, life gave gifts free; once he came to a town after a storm, he was asked by a sign to stop; he did not and after a repair he came back to the ship freely to move anywhere on blue sea; well said, well done; thank you for this, happy to review this; God Bless you, my dear good writer, wish read more. ALCREATOR, October, Festive Month...
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2021
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This Young Adult Poetry speaks a rhyming short story for children, a little Viking named Eric's tale, he lived a life in a ship on the sea, he fished all day and sang at night, life gave gifts free; once he came to a town after a storm, he was asked by a sign to stop; he did not and after a repair he came back to the ship freely to move anywhere on blue sea; well said, well done; thank you for this, happy to review this; God Bless you, my dear good writer, wish read more. ALCREATOR, October, Festive Month...
Comment Written 14-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2021
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Thanks for the excellent review