Too Many Birds Are Singing!
almost too fantastical to be true ...56 total reviews
Comment from Cumbrianlass
Excellent write, Sharyn. I was utterly captivated all the way through. You handle the subject of ADHD perfectly (although I have my own theories on it) and the entire scene setting in the classroom is brilliant.
I got quite gooey when you introduced me to Jack. What a yummy guy.
Er, I'd like a follow up, please. There could be so much more to come in this story. Like, do they get together? How does the wee lad do? Does he ever meet Miss Tomato thong again?
Fantastic work.
Bravo.
Av
reply by the author on 26-May-2013
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Excellent write, Sharyn. I was utterly captivated all the way through. You handle the subject of ADHD perfectly (although I have my own theories on it) and the entire scene setting in the classroom is brilliant.
I got quite gooey when you introduced me to Jack. What a yummy guy.
Er, I'd like a follow up, please. There could be so much more to come in this story. Like, do they get together? How does the wee lad do? Does he ever meet Miss Tomato thong again?
Fantastic work.
Bravo.
Av
Comment Written 26-May-2013
reply by the author on 26-May-2013
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Bless you Av - word limit was 2000 for this one ... what's next? hmm ... Revenge of the Exploding Tomato? :)S
Comment from Kiki12
Yep, didn't spend any till I read it. I can't even say much, as this speaks for itself -- it's a perfect write, and tugs at all the right strings. My son has dyslexia and adhd, luckily we didn't experience anything closely remote to this, but many of my students have. Well done, entertaining, enlightening, fantastical, heart-warming- what a package...
xo
Kiki
reply by the author on 26-May-2013
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Yep, didn't spend any till I read it. I can't even say much, as this speaks for itself -- it's a perfect write, and tugs at all the right strings. My son has dyslexia and adhd, luckily we didn't experience anything closely remote to this, but many of my students have. Well done, entertaining, enlightening, fantastical, heart-warming- what a package...
xo
Kiki
Comment Written 26-May-2013
reply by the author on 26-May-2013
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oh YEAH!!! you saved me one!! I was hoping you'd like this one kiki! My son has ADHD too, so it's always been a battle - luckily I'm a speech therapist, so know a little about Specific Learning problems! Blessings for your wonderful sixer dear!! so much appreciated - but more than that, I'm delighted that you liked it!!! :)S
Comment from sunnilicious
That's a great photograph. Such an emotional pose.
Tommy is a handful. And Miss Victoria Montgomery sure is not teacher material with that mouth. Well... Nutritional supplements like granola bars is a wonderful way to bond. I heard ADD is a growing diagnosis. Good awareness.
This short story is creative and without a doubt very original. Excellent work.
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 26-May-2013
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That's a great photograph. Such an emotional pose.
Tommy is a handful. And Miss Victoria Montgomery sure is not teacher material with that mouth. Well... Nutritional supplements like granola bars is a wonderful way to bond. I heard ADD is a growing diagnosis. Good awareness.
This short story is creative and without a doubt very original. Excellent work.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 26-May-2013
reply by the author on 26-May-2013
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Bless you for your wonderful sixer on this one sunni!!! I'm delighted that you enjoyed this one!
:)Sharyn
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You're welcome.
Have a great night :)
Comment from Jendowoz
I loved this piece, Sharyn. You are an amazingly multi-talented person! This is a wonderful story and familiar to me. I tutored a 15 year old boy with a dysfunctional home life and couldn't add 1 + 2. I tutored him for 2 years and learnt that he responded to patterns in number and got him up to beginning algebra when a high school teacher took over.
Your story is wonderful. Sometimes it just takes one caring person to break through barriers. I love your descriptive phrases "vein pulses under her temple like a small epileptic snake". Fantastic!
regards, Jen
reply by the author on 26-May-2013
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I loved this piece, Sharyn. You are an amazingly multi-talented person! This is a wonderful story and familiar to me. I tutored a 15 year old boy with a dysfunctional home life and couldn't add 1 + 2. I tutored him for 2 years and learnt that he responded to patterns in number and got him up to beginning algebra when a high school teacher took over.
Your story is wonderful. Sometimes it just takes one caring person to break through barriers. I love your descriptive phrases "vein pulses under her temple like a small epileptic snake". Fantastic!
regards, Jen
Comment Written 26-May-2013
reply by the author on 26-May-2013
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oh bless you a million times for your lovely six on this one Jen! Perhaps you were the "Jack" in your student's life! I so appreciate praise from another fine prose writer!
:)Sharyn
Comment from Cornelius2000
Oh Sharyn, what a lovely story. Of course it sounds like the first half of a short story, or the first chapter of a novel. Makes us want to know all about the wedding, and Tommy's adult life as a psychologist, helping little kids learn to read and cope. I'll have to confess I wanted to stand up and yell "YES," when Ms. Jones thwacked Mrs. Mongomery with that book. Nicely done.
reply by the author on 26-May-2013
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Oh Sharyn, what a lovely story. Of course it sounds like the first half of a short story, or the first chapter of a novel. Makes us want to know all about the wedding, and Tommy's adult life as a psychologist, helping little kids learn to read and cope. I'll have to confess I wanted to stand up and yell "YES," when Ms. Jones thwacked Mrs. Mongomery with that book. Nicely done.
Comment Written 26-May-2013
reply by the author on 26-May-2013
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Well of COURSE dear! Thank you so much - I had fun with this one, as you can probably tell.
:)S
Comment from Gungalo
Too many birds are singing. Quite a clever teacher this Jack was, eh? Played games and such a Tommy learned without knowing it. Amazing story you.
reply by the author on 26-May-2013
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Too many birds are singing. Quite a clever teacher this Jack was, eh? Played games and such a Tommy learned without knowing it. Amazing story you.
Comment Written 26-May-2013
reply by the author on 26-May-2013
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thx Gungalo - sometimes miracles are necessary, yes?
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Yes they are.
Comment from GregoryCody
Wow wow wow. BEAUTIFULLY written. Such phenomenal metaphors. By that I mean well done And pretty. Tomatoes, dinner plates, like marshmallows should taste, just to name a few. I loved it. I actually have ADD! This was so relatable. I actually acted this way my entire life! Prove them Wrong! My dad included. And... I can't read either! Makes this review simply a good guess honestly. Kidding of course. But seriously, i was treated that way, so sad. teachers have a very important role, very impacting on a young mind. I love this story. This was ME as a child. Mean teachers as well. I really really liked this. You just decided to write this? Inspiration? I'm serious, not just because I know you, this was GREAT, it just touched so close to home, and was beautifully written.
reply by the author on 26-May-2013
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Wow wow wow. BEAUTIFULLY written. Such phenomenal metaphors. By that I mean well done And pretty. Tomatoes, dinner plates, like marshmallows should taste, just to name a few. I loved it. I actually have ADD! This was so relatable. I actually acted this way my entire life! Prove them Wrong! My dad included. And... I can't read either! Makes this review simply a good guess honestly. Kidding of course. But seriously, i was treated that way, so sad. teachers have a very important role, very impacting on a young mind. I love this story. This was ME as a child. Mean teachers as well. I really really liked this. You just decided to write this? Inspiration? I'm serious, not just because I know you, this was GREAT, it just touched so close to home, and was beautifully written.
Comment Written 26-May-2013
reply by the author on 26-May-2013
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oh lovely!!! I'd hoped you'd enjoy this one Greg - I haven't written anything quite like this one before. My husband and son both have ADD, so it's been an educational few years, believe me - on top of crappy teachers to boot, but, thank heaven, we finally discovered a strange, quirky old ex-lawyer teacher (who just happens to be a fabulous writer!) who didn't pigeon-hole my son and was really able to help him. So there's my inspiration - and my son is now 16 and I'm STILL dealing with crappy teachers! GRRR!
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Grr indeed! They can be very dangerous. 16 is very impressionable still. Very much so. He needs to have all the confidence in the world. I'm telling you, all my life and at 16-18 especially, the way my dad beat me down (by ignoring me and shrugging me off as if my opinions were "stupid") affects me greatly to This day! Teachers absolutely have that ability too-authority figures. Well if you ever have any needs on an outside point of view on it, I'm here! There is actually a fine line between BiPolar and ADHD they are finding. I might only have one. That would be nice!
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yes, the more research & study they do, I think they'll find all these things are just a point along a continuum and all pretty well acceptable as "normal" behavior! we're so anxious to pigeon-hole people and label them!
Comment from Liberty Justice
Such a delightful and amusing stories. So funny how the woman topples to the ground. Tells of true events that often happen is schools. You paint the main character with such spunk and rebellion. He's a child scorned with impatience
and intolerance.
Liberty Justice
reply by the author on 26-May-2013
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Such a delightful and amusing stories. So funny how the woman topples to the ground. Tells of true events that often happen is schools. You paint the main character with such spunk and rebellion. He's a child scorned with impatience
and intolerance.
Liberty Justice
Comment Written 26-May-2013
reply by the author on 26-May-2013
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They do indeed - thx so much LJ! :)))Sharyn
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
Oh wow absolutely wonderful. this is quite a piece for the contest and really a fun read. I thoroughly enjoyed reading it and keep these coming.
reply by the author on 26-May-2013
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Oh wow absolutely wonderful. this is quite a piece for the contest and really a fun read. I thoroughly enjoyed reading it and keep these coming.
Comment Written 26-May-2013
reply by the author on 26-May-2013
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Thx Barb - aren't you the sponsor of this great contest? :)))
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I am indeed. I wanted to see what people thought of the topic. and yours is wonderful.
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I loved it as an 'original' competition thought Barb - so many of them are just plain BORING. This was absolutey was not. Thank you and big time BRAVO for sponsoring it! :)))
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Absolutely will. I love your writing. It is so full of energy and life
Comment from ElegantButler
There are, unfortunately, many teachers out there who can't handle anything other than a cookie-cutter classroom. The ones who rise above that to listen to every student and to work with a student's differences rather than berate or belittle them are flecks of gold in the river of the educational system.
reply by the author on 26-May-2013
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There are, unfortunately, many teachers out there who can't handle anything other than a cookie-cutter classroom. The ones who rise above that to listen to every student and to work with a student's differences rather than berate or belittle them are flecks of gold in the river of the educational system.
Comment Written 26-May-2013
reply by the author on 26-May-2013
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You are absolutely correct there EB - they're often the kids who think outside the box!
:)Sharyn