Pantoum Collection
Viewing comments for Chapter 6 "The Boobook Owl"Poems written using the pantoum form
118 total reviews
Comment from Godspenswept
What a journey into the predatory instincts of this Boobook owl.
The thoughts flowed like the water that flowed by the sights of its unsuspecting pray...
Very wonderful read...
Very suspenseful...
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2013
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What a journey into the predatory instincts of this Boobook owl.
The thoughts flowed like the water that flowed by the sights of its unsuspecting pray...
Very wonderful read...
Very suspenseful...
Comment Written 18-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2013
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Many thanks for your review, Godspenswept. Appreciated! Love the double meaning of your pseudonym! God's pen swept and God's pens wept. Was that intentional?
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THat wasnt intentional, but it will be from now on...hehe/
BIG SMILE
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I meant it as a metaphor of cleaning my thoughts out,
Encouraging myself to write until im empty...
so I can refresh myself and write some more
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Lovely!
Comment from SteveY
Wow, what a wealth of information you are about these kinds of things. Great job once again with this little poem. Thanks for sharing this one.
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2013
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Wow, what a wealth of information you are about these kinds of things. Great job once again with this little poem. Thanks for sharing this one.
Comment Written 18-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2013
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Many thanks for your review, Steve. Appreciated!
Comment from mountainwriter49
Good Morning, Poet
I enjoyed your pantoum sonnet this morning. It is not an easy form in which to write and you have done so splendidly. A critical part of writing in this form successfully is to make the repeat lines sound natural. You've accomplished this beautifully.
I wish I had a 6th star to award to this poem. Since I don't, please accept a virtual six for this exceptional poem.
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-Ray
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2013
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Good Morning, Poet
I enjoyed your pantoum sonnet this morning. It is not an easy form in which to write and you have done so splendidly. A critical part of writing in this form successfully is to make the repeat lines sound natural. You've accomplished this beautifully.
I wish I had a 6th star to award to this poem. Since I don't, please accept a virtual six for this exceptional poem.
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-Ray
Comment Written 18-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2013
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Many thanks for your encouraging review and comments, Ray. Much appreciated, as is your virtual six-star rating!
Comment from pattipac
Your pantoum with repetitive lines about the Boobook owl is filled with descriptive phrases, and imagery that paints an intriguing picture with words. Deserves six stars,but alas none is available.
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2013
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Your pantoum with repetitive lines about the Boobook owl is filled with descriptive phrases, and imagery that paints an intriguing picture with words. Deserves six stars,but alas none is available.
Comment Written 18-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2013
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Many thanks for your review and virtual six, Pattipac. Very much appreciated!
Comment from TOMORAL
Wow, how I wish I could write like this. Never even tried a pantoum for I know it would drive me crazy. But back to your poem, expertly done with fine knowledge about an owl I knew nothing about but found fascinating. This deserves a six, but alas, I do not have one! Blessings.
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2013
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Wow, how I wish I could write like this. Never even tried a pantoum for I know it would drive me crazy. But back to your poem, expertly done with fine knowledge about an owl I knew nothing about but found fascinating. This deserves a six, but alas, I do not have one! Blessings.
Comment Written 18-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2013
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Many thanks for your review and virtual six, Tomoral. Very much appreciated!
Comment from zanya
A lesson in the wonderful and sometimes cruel ways of Mother Nature - I've never heard of the Boobook owl before but what an interesting read, poetically and otherwise, together with a beautiful pic. Now I'm going to do a Google search for the Boobook owl. Fanstory is a window on the world.
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2013
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A lesson in the wonderful and sometimes cruel ways of Mother Nature - I've never heard of the Boobook owl before but what an interesting read, poetically and otherwise, together with a beautiful pic. Now I'm going to do a Google search for the Boobook owl. Fanstory is a window on the world.
Comment Written 18-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2013
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Many thanks for your review and six-star rating, Pattipac. Very much appreciated!
Comment from ElegantButler
The Boobook owl sounds like an amazing bird of prey. The description you've given in the poem makes her sound almost like the goddess Diana on the hunt. Very well written. Its funny that my mum was from Oz and she never told me about this one particular bird, so fond of she of 'roos and 'mus.
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2013
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The Boobook owl sounds like an amazing bird of prey. The description you've given in the poem makes her sound almost like the goddess Diana on the hunt. Very well written. Its funny that my mum was from Oz and she never told me about this one particular bird, so fond of she of 'roos and 'mus.
Comment Written 18-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2013
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Many thanks for your review, ElegantButler, and for your kind comments. Much appreciated! Your mum might have known it by its other name, the Mopoke. Both names are onomatopoeic as the owl has a mournful, somewhat melancholy cry on two separate notes.
Comment from dragonpoet
This is a moving and clear description of how this owl kills.
With all the mention of silver, it makes the owl sound like a ghost lurking and not a living being.
I like the use of sound in the death cry of the animal. I, also, like all the alliteration.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2013
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This is a moving and clear description of how this owl kills.
With all the mention of silver, it makes the owl sound like a ghost lurking and not a living being.
I like the use of sound in the death cry of the animal. I, also, like all the alliteration.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
Comment Written 18-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2013
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Many thanks for your thoughtful review, Dragonpoet, and for your kind comments. Much appreciated!
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You're welcome.
dragonpoet
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You're welcome.
dragonpoet
Comment from emrpoems
Well done. the Pantoum is an interesting art for m and you achieved writing it in quatrains with the abab rhyme. Compelling pairing of the picture and the poem
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2013
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Well done. the Pantoum is an interesting art for m and you achieved writing it in quatrains with the abab rhyme. Compelling pairing of the picture and the poem
Comment Written 18-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2013
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Many thanks for your review, emrpoems, and for your kind comments. Much appreciated!
Comment from rouskin
A wraith with staring hooded eye
suggested in the ghost gum tree,
her talons piercing death's small cry,
the Boobook owl kills silently.
It really deserves All Time best even without you lengthy
explanation.
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2013
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A wraith with staring hooded eye
suggested in the ghost gum tree,
her talons piercing death's small cry,
the Boobook owl kills silently.
It really deserves All Time best even without you lengthy
explanation.
Comment Written 18-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2013
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Many thanks for your review, Rouskin, and for your kind comments. Much appreciated.