Pantoum Collection
Viewing comments for Chapter 1 "All Hail, Pantoum!"Poems written using the pantoum form
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Comment from denhagan
This is a very nice pantoum poem that explains about the pantoum poem in its verses. Has good rhythm and rhyming throughout the poem.
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2013
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This is a very nice pantoum poem that explains about the pantoum poem in its verses. Has good rhythm and rhyming throughout the poem.
Comment Written 25-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2013
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Many thanks, Dennis. I appreciate you taking the time to review, your comments and your generous stars.
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You're welcome Tony,
Dennis
Comment from tbacha58
At last the tail engulfs the head
Tucked up within each other's phrase
So here's an end. It's put to bed
All hail, Pantoum , Malay malaise
I am glad you explained, as for me its the first time I hear about those names, but anything penned that comes out of your philosophy is great for me. I love reading your poetry. Bless you Terry
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2013
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At last the tail engulfs the head
Tucked up within each other's phrase
So here's an end. It's put to bed
All hail, Pantoum , Malay malaise
I am glad you explained, as for me its the first time I hear about those names, but anything penned that comes out of your philosophy is great for me. I love reading your poetry. Bless you Terry
Comment Written 25-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2013
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Many thanks, Ragamuffin. As always, I appreciate you taking the time to review, your interesting and supportive comments and your generous stars.
Comment from STEPHEN A CARTER
All hail, Pantoum, Malay malaise Love the intro+'m' allits
Pan pipes entomb a dual sense 'p' allits
Tucked up within each OTHERS' phrase
With treasure shared beyond expense 's' "
Lines fixed in one climb up a rung
A pantomime so richly sung
As sense now slides across the verse Love the 's's
Takes time and causes one to curse
At last the tail engulfs the head Great line
So here's an END. It's put to bED Internal slant rhyme
Best P I've read yet. Deserves a 6 but I'm out. Flawless execution.
Regards:
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2013
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All hail, Pantoum, Malay malaise Love the intro+'m' allits
Pan pipes entomb a dual sense 'p' allits
Tucked up within each OTHERS' phrase
With treasure shared beyond expense 's' "
Lines fixed in one climb up a rung
A pantomime so richly sung
As sense now slides across the verse Love the 's's
Takes time and causes one to curse
At last the tail engulfs the head Great line
So here's an END. It's put to bED Internal slant rhyme
Best P I've read yet. Deserves a 6 but I'm out. Flawless execution.
Regards:
Comment Written 25-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2013
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Many thanks, Stephen for another detailed and thoughtful review, also for your very kind comments. I very much appreciate your time and interest.
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Dear tfawcus: Well deserved. Just posted 2 more poems on America. Thanks.
With Respect: Steve C
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Dear t: That's what I get paid for...just kidding.
With Respect: Steve C
Comment from Spitfire
This is rich! You did your job well with lines like:
Lines fixed in one climb up a rung
At last the tail engulfs the head
It does circle around. I see that now.
Malay malaise --great play on words.
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2013
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This is rich! You did your job well with lines like:
Lines fixed in one climb up a rung
At last the tail engulfs the head
It does circle around. I see that now.
Malay malaise --great play on words.
Comment Written 25-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2013
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Many thanks, Spitfire. I appreciate you taking the time to review, your comments and your generous stars.
Comment from teafor2
tfawcus--Title not withstanding...the artwork is awesome
as part of the theme and complement the ever meshing,
melding and enfolding of these rotating lines into eclec-
tic verses. Scribe's last verse sums it up best:
"At last the tail engulfs the head
Tucked up within each other's phrase
So here's an end. It's put to bed
All hail, Pantoum , Malay malaise"
A fortuitous, but well written poetic instruction. teafor2
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2013
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tfawcus--Title not withstanding...the artwork is awesome
as part of the theme and complement the ever meshing,
melding and enfolding of these rotating lines into eclec-
tic verses. Scribe's last verse sums it up best:
"At last the tail engulfs the head
Tucked up within each other's phrase
So here's an end. It's put to bed
All hail, Pantoum , Malay malaise"
A fortuitous, but well written poetic instruction. teafor2
Comment Written 25-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2013
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Many thanks, Teafor2. I appreciate you taking the time to review, your comments and your generous stars.
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You are welcome.
Comment from lakeport
All hail. Pantoum, indeed that is a beautiful animal, that's a very nice expressed poem, nice rhyming and form
enjoyed reading it.God bless you.Lakeport.
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2013
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All hail. Pantoum, indeed that is a beautiful animal, that's a very nice expressed poem, nice rhyming and form
enjoyed reading it.God bless you.Lakeport.
Comment Written 25-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2013
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Many thanks, Lakeport. I appreciate you taking the time to review, your comments and your generous stars.
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your welcome, Lakeport.
Comment from TOMORAL
Ahh...this is a fine pantoum describing a pantoum. Superbly written and I will one day write one of these little dittys but am far too dense on poetry as of yet. Enjoyed this immensely. You have great talent, poet.
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2013
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Ahh...this is a fine pantoum describing a pantoum. Superbly written and I will one day write one of these little dittys but am far too dense on poetry as of yet. Enjoyed this immensely. You have great talent, poet.
Comment Written 25-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2013
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Many thanks, Tomoral. I appreciate you taking the time to review, your comments and your generous stars.
Comment from krys123
Thank you very much Tony for sharing this Pantoum poem with fans, myself and other readers/writers. Technically your rhymes have done very well and neither of your rhymes are you forced, labored or strained. The rhythm of your poem along with the tempo and meter is done so well that it makes it easy for me to read and understand your poem explicitly. Your context in concept done to a point which I understand your poem wholeheartedly. You have a good one and God bless and in gratitude to you for successfully completing a Pantoum style of poetry. You have a good one and God bless.
AK
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2013
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Thank you very much Tony for sharing this Pantoum poem with fans, myself and other readers/writers. Technically your rhymes have done very well and neither of your rhymes are you forced, labored or strained. The rhythm of your poem along with the tempo and meter is done so well that it makes it easy for me to read and understand your poem explicitly. Your context in concept done to a point which I understand your poem wholeheartedly. You have a good one and God bless and in gratitude to you for successfully completing a Pantoum style of poetry. You have a good one and God bless.
AK
Comment Written 25-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2013
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Many thanks, AK. I appreciate you taking the time to write such a detailed review, your comments and your generous stars.
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You are so welcome Tony and your comb was very interesting I'm not familiar with that style but I enjoyed it
Comment from Rondeno
Oh my goodness. It's a gem! I can see this poem featuring in anthologies and encyclopaediae for centuries to come. It's the last word on the subject!
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reply by the author on 26-Oct-2013
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Oh my goodness. It's a gem! I can see this poem featuring in anthologies and encyclopaediae for centuries to come. It's the last word on the subject!
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Comment Written 25-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2013
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Many thanks, Rondeno. High praise indeed!
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well w ritten, tfawcus, writing a pantoum explaining the mechanics of it. i enjoyed reading this and i don't know what else to write because it speaks for itself
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reply by the author on 26-Oct-2013
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this is very well w ritten, tfawcus, writing a pantoum explaining the mechanics of it. i enjoyed reading this and i don't know what else to write because it speaks for itself
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Comment Written 25-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2013
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Many thanks, Sweetwoodjax. I appreciate you taking the time to review, your comments and your generous stars.