Pantoum Collection
Viewing comments for Chapter 3 "Lost for Words"Poems written using the pantoum form
38 total reviews
Comment from Emeka13
Age will come to all, well to who are lucky to stick around long enough. Once a man and twice a child, they say. A well-written pantoun poem. Well done. Remain blessed.Emeka
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2013
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Age will come to all, well to who are lucky to stick around long enough. Once a man and twice a child, they say. A well-written pantoun poem. Well done. Remain blessed.Emeka
Comment Written 27-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2013
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Dear Emeka, what a charming review. I shall enter my second childhood happy!
Comment from nancy_e_davis
You are doing the right thing studying and writing one form at a time. That is the best way to master the. This is a really good pantoum and you are right. It WAS a perfect subject for a pantoum. Well done my friend. Nancy
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2013
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You are doing the right thing studying and writing one form at a time. That is the best way to master the. This is a really good pantoum and you are right. It WAS a perfect subject for a pantoum. Well done my friend. Nancy
Comment Written 27-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2013
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Many thanks for your review and comment, Nancy. It has been interesting playing with the Pantoum and I thought this probably a good one to finish on - for the time being, anyway!
Comment from tbacha58
My thoughts are lost. They're not my own
They fluster like a flock of birds
My mind's a shell I have outgrown
My tongue now stumbles over words
That poem with the picture broke my heart, I cannot imagine you loosing your mind or out of words. You are our Rock here at FS.
Stay with us. Bless u Terry. What an amazing sad poem.
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2013
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My thoughts are lost. They're not my own
They fluster like a flock of birds
My mind's a shell I have outgrown
My tongue now stumbles over words
That poem with the picture broke my heart, I cannot imagine you loosing your mind or out of words. You are our Rock here at FS.
Stay with us. Bless u Terry. What an amazing sad poem.
Comment Written 27-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2013
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Dear Terry, no need for undue alarm. I don't think that I have quite reached that stage yet! If I have, then people are being very polite and not telling me!
Comment from mumsyone
A great subject for your well-written pantoum. It is a good read and easy to follow the theme, although I can't say that I like the picture! Ha! Just kidding; it's fine.
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2013
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A great subject for your well-written pantoum. It is a good read and easy to follow the theme, although I can't say that I like the picture! Ha! Just kidding; it's fine.
Comment Written 27-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2013
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Many thanks for your review Mumsyone. I rather agree with you about the picture, pretty gruesome but the best I could find on FanArtReview!
Comment from c_lucas
It is a sad part of life for the aging to lose memories and the ability to take care of oneself. This is very well written with good imagery.
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2013
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It is a sad part of life for the aging to lose memories and the ability to take care of oneself. This is very well written with good imagery.
Comment Written 27-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2013
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Thanks for your review c_lucas. I agree, it is tragic watching someone decline in this way. A cruel ending.
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You're welcome, TF, Charlie
Comment from STEPHEN A CARTER
My tongue now stumbles over words 't' allits
They disassemble in my brain LOVE: 'disassemble'
They fluster like a flock of birds 'f' allits
Unravel what I've sAId agaAIn
My mind is blank, the words dispersed
I grasp for meanings now reversed 's' allits
Like AUTUMN leaves that fall from trees "
They slip and swirl and gently tease "
My thoughts are lost. They're not my own
My mind's a shell I have outgrown
Well versed, metered and presented.
Regards:
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2013
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My tongue now stumbles over words 't' allits
They disassemble in my brain LOVE: 'disassemble'
They fluster like a flock of birds 'f' allits
Unravel what I've sAId agaAIn
My mind is blank, the words dispersed
I grasp for meanings now reversed 's' allits
Like AUTUMN leaves that fall from trees "
They slip and swirl and gently tease "
My thoughts are lost. They're not my own
My mind's a shell I have outgrown
Well versed, metered and presented.
Regards:
Comment Written 27-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2013
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Once again, a most thorough and interesting review, Stephen. I do appreciate you taking the time. Glad you liked 'disassemble'. I was thinking 'dissemble' to start with then 'disassemble' just slipped into the mind as a word that said exactly what I wanted.
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Dear t: The write/right words are magical arn't they? #45/46 out now.
Cheers: Steve C
Comment from Nosha17
Well-written in this unusual poetic form. The words are powerful and show the devastation such a debilitating illness can have on someone. I hope they find a cure in the not too distant future. You have made good use of rhyming techniques.
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reply by the author on 28-Oct-2013
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Well-written in this unusual poetic form. The words are powerful and show the devastation such a debilitating illness can have on someone. I hope they find a cure in the not too distant future. You have made good use of rhyming techniques.
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Comment Written 27-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2013
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Very many thanks for your kind review and generous star rating Nosha
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, tfawcus, you did an excellent job writing this pantoum poem about the words that get lost in a stumbling mind. i enjoyed reading it...
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reply by the author on 28-Oct-2013
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this is very well written, tfawcus, you did an excellent job writing this pantoum poem about the words that get lost in a stumbling mind. i enjoyed reading it...
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Comment Written 27-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2013
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Very many thanks for your kind review Sweetwodjax. I appreciate it.