Comment from misscookie

Excellent

I love the photo of the home
As you said there's is no place like home.
It sadden me to read this beautiful poem one day you will read my poem and understand why.
Still I sheared tears of happiness for you for taking care of grandp[a house.

 Comment Written 02-May-2014

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reply by the author on 02-May-2014

Thank you misscookie for your wonderful words, I appreciate your nice comments. My grandpa built this home in 1904 and him and my grandma raised 9 children here. The children grew up and married. then moved away. A few years later grandma and grandpa both died and I ended up with the house. Thanks again my good friend and have a great weekend. Bill

Comment from adewpearl

Excellent

good alliteration in with winds that blew bitter - good assonance too
why use commas but not periods?
lovely detail that convinces the reader the speaker chose well in making this inherited house into a home once more :-) Brooke

 Comment Written 02-May-2014

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reply by the author on 02-May-2014

Thanks Brooke for your review, I appreciate it. As far as commas and no periods, I never really thought about it. It's just something that I've always done. Have a great weekend. Bill

Comment from Angel Debbie

Excellent

Amen for that: Home is where the heart is and alway should be!

I found a little problem:

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Good luck with your writing, I enjoyed it.

 Comment Written 02-May-2014

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reply by the author on 02-May-2014

Thanks Angel for your great review and catching that boo-boo for me, I appreciate it. Have a real nice day. Bill

reply by Angel Debbie on 02-May-2014

Your welcome stop on by sometime.

reply by the author on 02-May-2014

Thank you Angel for your invitation and I certainly will do that. Will you have dinner ready? (ha). God bless. Bill

reply by Angel Debbie on 02-May-2014

Only if your here by 5PM. Have a great day!

Comment from Michael Ludwinder

Excellent

I thought you did a great job with this poem. Your word choices, overall, are excellent.

It has withstood many bad storms

"bad" though may be a choice of word you could rethink. Perhaps ferioucous. Or ugly. I Don't know. But bad is kindof a generic word.

I like how you ended it. Well done.

 Comment Written 02-May-2014

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reply by the author on 02-May-2014

Thanks Michael for your review and suggestion, I appreciate it very much. Have a great day my friend. Bill

Comment from Nosha17

Excellent

This was a very nostalgic, sincere poem. You made good use of language and rhyme and it had a smooth flow. As it is a contest entry wanted to point out an error, 3rd verse, line 2, it should be 'house and land were'. Good luck in the contest. Lovely pic, Faye

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 Comment Written 02-May-2014

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reply by the author on 02-May-2014

Thanks Faye for your wonderful review and catching that mistake for me, I really appreciate that. Have a great day my friend. Bill

Comment from Joy Graham

Excellent

Is that your own picture? The house looks lovely. You must be very proud:) what a wonderful gift to have possession of the house Grandpa built. I'm envious. Best wishes to you in this contest. You certainly describe a wonderful welcoming home.

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 Comment Written 02-May-2014

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reply by the author on 02-May-2014

Yes Joy, it really is a welcoming home. Grandma and Grandpa had eleven children, so 13 people lived here in the early 1900's, my uncle's and aunt's. We all used to have a big reunion here every year. Thanks Joy and have a wonderful day my friend. Bill