Free Verse Collection
Viewing comments for Chapter 20 "Paper Tigers"A collection of free verse poems
33 total reviews
Comment from Nosha17
Differing personalities conflict in a relationship until both develop and learn. You have made excellent choice of words and imagery to convey your message. Great pic and enjoyable read. Faye
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2014
  |
Differing personalities conflict in a relationship until both develop and learn. You have made excellent choice of words and imagery to convey your message. Great pic and enjoyable read. Faye
Comment Written 06-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2014
-
Many thanks for your kind review, Faye. The poem was about events that took place about fifteen years ago. All water under the bridge now.
Comment from ProjectBluebook
I love this poem regarding all respects. You educated me on what a paper tiger is, and I do love this picture. You even know Kurt Cobain. Ther is some good sentences going on, it interests me, amusing. I like this sweet poem. I love this image! Great job! I wish I had six to give. This is deserving, to me. I will keep you in mind. Good day, mate, wackydo
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2014
|
I love this poem regarding all respects. You educated me on what a paper tiger is, and I do love this picture. You even know Kurt Cobain. Ther is some good sentences going on, it interests me, amusing. I like this sweet poem. I love this image! Great job! I wish I had six to give. This is deserving, to me. I will keep you in mind. Good day, mate, wackydo
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 06-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2014
-
Thanks for your review, Wackydo. Glad you enjoyed the poem and thanks for the virtual six. Kurt Cobain - the man I love to hate!
-
Yep, I heard some dirt on him. Thanks for your reply. Good day, mate.
Comment from rama devi
Wow, my friend...what an interesting catchphrase and image for your theme--paper tigers. A poetic concept!
We exchanged paper tigers
In the dark days
Of the Kurt Cobain addiction
Neither understanding the other
A potent opening. Sets both tone and setting (era) as well as an internal landscape impression.
Two suggestions:
I(,) still enmeshed in the cocoon of her childhood
She(,) struggling to emerge
Exotic night flowers are poisoned
And enticing flames burn
For we must all learn to fly
Compelling imagery and concept clearly conveyed--and fine alliteration of E and F as well as consonance of L and M. Sounds super read aloud.
It took time for me to learn
That she must write her own life
In free, unrhymed verse
Not the straitjacket of the formal sonnet
So much preferred by her parent.
Brilliant closing commentary, well voiced!
Bravo
Almost a six.
Warm Smiles,
rd
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2014
|
Wow, my friend...what an interesting catchphrase and image for your theme--paper tigers. A poetic concept!
We exchanged paper tigers
In the dark days
Of the Kurt Cobain addiction
Neither understanding the other
A potent opening. Sets both tone and setting (era) as well as an internal landscape impression.
Two suggestions:
I(,) still enmeshed in the cocoon of her childhood
She(,) struggling to emerge
Exotic night flowers are poisoned
And enticing flames burn
For we must all learn to fly
Compelling imagery and concept clearly conveyed--and fine alliteration of E and F as well as consonance of L and M. Sounds super read aloud.
It took time for me to learn
That she must write her own life
In free, unrhymed verse
Not the straitjacket of the formal sonnet
So much preferred by her parent.
Brilliant closing commentary, well voiced!
Bravo
Almost a six.
Warm Smiles,
rd
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 06-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2014
-
Many thanks, RD, for another penetrating and useful review. You are absolutely right about the punctuation. The pauses add a further dimension.
-
Thanks for your gracious reply, as always, my friend! Warm Smiles, rd