lune (the bee)
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Comment from adewpearl
Great pairing of art and Lune, which is in excellent 5/3/5 syllable count
good assonance in bee sees
good alliteration in lands likes lunch
great humor - sorry you actually had a bad encounter
Brooke :-)
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Great pairing of art and Lune, which is in excellent 5/3/5 syllable count
good assonance in bee sees
good alliteration in lands likes lunch
great humor - sorry you actually had a bad encounter
Brooke :-)
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Comment Written 21-Jun-2014
Comment from jmdg1954
bee sees me and lands
likes perfume
he decides I'm lunch
I'll never forget when our dog, Chloe, snapped at and caught a bee(s) in her snout. She got stung and swelled up like crazy. We never drove so fast in local streets to get to the animal hospital. Scary.
Anyways, good lune. Great last line pulling it all together. John
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bee sees me and lands
likes perfume
he decides I'm lunch
I'll never forget when our dog, Chloe, snapped at and caught a bee(s) in her snout. She got stung and swelled up like crazy. We never drove so fast in local streets to get to the animal hospital. Scary.
Anyways, good lune. Great last line pulling it all together. John
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Comment Written 21-Jun-2014