King Sawyer
a story poem in rhyming couplets115 total reviews
Comment from Connie C
What a fun little story about how Sawyer wisely chose the extra three minions. They did the work while he searched for socks to "keep his tootsies warm." As always, your poem is a delight to read with its excellent rhyme and and a meter and a delightful story as the added bonus. My best to you in the contest, Brooke.
Connie
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2014
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What a fun little story about how Sawyer wisely chose the extra three minions. They did the work while he searched for socks to "keep his tootsies warm." As always, your poem is a delight to read with its excellent rhyme and and a meter and a delightful story as the added bonus. My best to you in the contest, Brooke.
Connie
Comment Written 07-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2014
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Connie, thank you so very much for your kind contest wishes and thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from w.j.debi
This is an engaging tale. King Sawyer certainly chose his three extra minions wisely since they saved they day. They rhythm is fun and so are the excellent rhymes. Love the alliteration in the repeating "million minions".
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2014
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This is an engaging tale. King Sawyer certainly chose his three extra minions wisely since they saved they day. They rhythm is fun and so are the excellent rhymes. Love the alliteration in the repeating "million minions".
Comment Written 07-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2014
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debi, thank you so very much :-) Brooke
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You're welcome
p.s. I don't have anything active.
Comment from jmdg1954
Figures, while the minions and three were working there tails off trying to defend the walls, good ol King Sawyer was worried about keeping his feet warm. Sheees...
Great cadence and flow. Easy to read and perfect for the youngsters.
Nicely done... John
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2014
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Figures, while the minions and three were working there tails off trying to defend the walls, good ol King Sawyer was worried about keeping his feet warm. Sheees...
Great cadence and flow. Easy to read and perfect for the youngsters.
Nicely done... John
Comment Written 07-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2014
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John, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from DALLAS01
What a great picture book this would make. Your story held my interest and I grew up long ago. Long,long ago.
lol. Great rhyme and rhythm and a visual journey.
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2014
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What a great picture book this would make. Your story held my interest and I grew up long ago. Long,long ago.
lol. Great rhyme and rhythm and a visual journey.
Comment Written 07-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2014
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Dallas, thank you so much :-) Brooke
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You're welcome.
Comment from Aussie
Wow! Another great Sawyer tale - loved the photo. A great story in a poem - I wish you well in the contest. Good AABB rhyming and one day he will read this and have a belly-laugh.
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2014
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Wow! Another great Sawyer tale - loved the photo. A great story in a poem - I wish you well in the contest. Good AABB rhyming and one day he will read this and have a belly-laugh.
Comment Written 07-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2014
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Kay, thank you for your thoughtful review, my friend. I had fun with this one. Brooke :-)
Comment from McMurry903
This is outstanding, Brooke! I love the delightful tale of King Sawyer! You told a great and inspiring story in perfect poetic form. Wonderful rhymes as always! I enjoyed very much and will have to read this one to my kids tonight. I enjoyed much and wish you the best of luck in this contest!
Brian
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2014
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This is outstanding, Brooke! I love the delightful tale of King Sawyer! You told a great and inspiring story in perfect poetic form. Wonderful rhymes as always! I enjoyed very much and will have to read this one to my kids tonight. I enjoyed much and wish you the best of luck in this contest!
Brian
Comment Written 07-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2014
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Brian, thank you so very much :-) I so appreciate your kind contest wishes and generous rating. Brooke
Comment from Patrick G Cox
Hi Brooke,
I'd say your last line identifes the advantage of being the ruller of the 'million three' - but remember that 'uneasy lies the head that wears the crown'.
Another fun poem for the Sawyer collection.
Patrick
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2014
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Hi Brooke,
I'd say your last line identifes the advantage of being the ruller of the 'million three' - but remember that 'uneasy lies the head that wears the crown'.
Another fun poem for the Sawyer collection.
Patrick
Comment Written 07-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2014
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Patrick, thank you. Yes, the ending is meant to be social/political commentary with a satiric tone :-) Brooke
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I think too many who rise to positions of power simply do not understand that great authority brings huge responsibility to those under your authority. As Jesus said, he who wishes to be the leader, must first be the servant. It is a hard lesson to learn, but the most effective leaders in history have recognised this.
Patrick
Comment from Lastamen
FanStory has a policy that a review must be detailed and not simply something like: "Hey, I liked your poem." or "That was really good." They maintain that it should relate what you found engaging or what perhaps was lacking (if anything). I will simply say concerning this intriguing entry - "It's good to be the King"
Till the last amen
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2014
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FanStory has a policy that a review must be detailed and not simply something like: "Hey, I liked your poem." or "That was really good." They maintain that it should relate what you found engaging or what perhaps was lacking (if anything). I will simply say concerning this intriguing entry - "It's good to be the King"
Till the last amen
Comment Written 07-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2014
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Thank you so much, Lastaman, for your clever review :-) Brooke
Comment from Angel Debbie
This is a cute little story poem about Sawyer and his sand castle. Children love making sand castles by the water my grand children liked doing that also. Great Story Grandma.
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This is a cute little story poem about Sawyer and his sand castle. Children love making sand castles by the water my grand children liked doing that also. Great Story Grandma.
Comment Written 07-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2014
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Thank you so much, Angel Debbie :-) Brooke
Comment from Nosha17
The favourite pastime of little boys and girls, building sandcastles, I guess kids have high aspirations too of being the king of the castle. Cute picture. Great story for kids in super rhyme, imagery and choice of words. Good luck in the contest. Faye
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2014
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The favourite pastime of little boys and girls, building sandcastles, I guess kids have high aspirations too of being the king of the castle. Cute picture. Great story for kids in super rhyme, imagery and choice of words. Good luck in the contest. Faye
Comment Written 07-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2014
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Faye, thank you so much :-) Brooke