I, Man!
A man thinks himself a god...113 total reviews
Comment from Writingfundimension
What a fascinating story you tell in this poem, Dean. It is very much in keeping with the Shelley tale. I agree with your author's notes that we do not have the depth of knowledge it takes to create life on the scale of our own Creator. This really excellent poem should do well in the contest. Good luck!
:) Bev
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2014
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What a fascinating story you tell in this poem, Dean. It is very much in keeping with the Shelley tale. I agree with your author's notes that we do not have the depth of knowledge it takes to create life on the scale of our own Creator. This really excellent poem should do well in the contest. Good luck!
:) Bev
Comment Written 11-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2014
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Thanks, Bev. I am really glad you enjoyed it, and thanks for the review.
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You're very welcome, Dean. :)
Comment from lancellot
Well that is a great part two Mary never imagined. You do you work proud. Great lines and the touch of madness is between each line. I love the ending. Yes, man is born with sin.
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Well that is a great part two Mary never imagined. You do you work proud. Great lines and the touch of madness is between each line. I love the ending. Yes, man is born with sin.
Comment Written 11-Aug-2014
Comment from kiwijenny
This is vintage stellar Kuch....there I said it you are a phenomenon....
Well penned...I was spell bound the whole way through
I usually give sixes for an emotional reaction...well this one got me
God bless
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2014
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This is vintage stellar Kuch....there I said it you are a phenomenon....
Well penned...I was spell bound the whole way through
I usually give sixes for an emotional reaction...well this one got me
God bless
Comment Written 11-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2014
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Thanks so much, kiwijenny, and I had lots of help with this one. I truly appreciate your stellar rating an most excellent review~
Comment from tbacha58
You know Dean, I don't ever think there will be another YOU.
You are absolutely incredible, not because of your writing, but because of your deepest soul and spirit invested in all your poems. Nothing is fake about you, every word that I would remember to praise you, should be written to you in here, but of course you know, I am not that strong in remembering and learning, but my heart wrote those sharing words. You even made me have some tears, your whole existence is meant to be, for you to be that unique writer and poet, placed exactly next to the old men and women who used to write ages ago. I am so serious my friend Dean, I am your fan, no matter what. Loved that story, I read it yesterday and today. Bless you Dean. Much respect and love from an old lady. Terry xoxo
Of course my stars replace the six, which I don't have. May my stars shine above you. xoxo
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2014
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You know Dean, I don't ever think there will be another YOU.
You are absolutely incredible, not because of your writing, but because of your deepest soul and spirit invested in all your poems. Nothing is fake about you, every word that I would remember to praise you, should be written to you in here, but of course you know, I am not that strong in remembering and learning, but my heart wrote those sharing words. You even made me have some tears, your whole existence is meant to be, for you to be that unique writer and poet, placed exactly next to the old men and women who used to write ages ago. I am so serious my friend Dean, I am your fan, no matter what. Loved that story, I read it yesterday and today. Bless you Dean. Much respect and love from an old lady. Terry xoxo
Of course my stars replace the six, which I don't have. May my stars shine above you. xoxo
Comment Written 11-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2014
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Thanks, Terry, and with an exemplary review such as the one you've given me here, who needs sixes?
I really appreciate everything you've said, and I will always your fan too, my friend.
Be well~
Dean
Comment from OLA THOMAS
You scared me with this amazingly told story, good poetic form, nice internal and end rhymes employed and still able to create a scary story that flows throughout. The danger of man trying to play God is enormous. Great work.
ola thomas
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2014
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You scared me with this amazingly told story, good poetic form, nice internal and end rhymes employed and still able to create a scary story that flows throughout. The danger of man trying to play God is enormous. Great work.
ola thomas
Comment Written 11-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2014
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Thanks so much, Ola, and that was my goal for the entire poem. The way we try and play God today with cloning and stem cell research is not too far off from Victors Frankenstein's ideology in Mary Shelly's famous story. I for one find that very scary.
Thanks so much again for the exceptional rating and review, my friend.
Comment from Bill Schott
The precision with which you have sewn this creation together, with detailed descriptions of each of the assembled appendages, does Mary proud. The nicely placed animated graphics give the already eloquent work a life of its own.
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2014
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The precision with which you have sewn this creation together, with detailed descriptions of each of the assembled appendages, does Mary proud. The nicely placed animated graphics give the already eloquent work a life of its own.
Comment Written 11-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2014
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Thanks so much, Bill, and I had quite a bit of help with the meter on this one. As most everyone is well aware, metered poetry is not my forte. However, I do love to entertain readers, and I try very hard. It is reviews and support like yours which makes it all worthwhile.
Thanks so much again!
Comment from HAREEDS
A very well constructed poem. If man ever did create a Frankenstein creature, as the poet says, the creature would be a soulless being and a poor relation to man. The graphics in this poem were exceptional and it shows what's achievable if the creative mind is put fully to work. Excellent work.
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2014
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A very well constructed poem. If man ever did create a Frankenstein creature, as the poet says, the creature would be a soulless being and a poor relation to man. The graphics in this poem were exceptional and it shows what's achievable if the creative mind is put fully to work. Excellent work.
Comment Written 11-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2014
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Thanks for the exceptional rating and very complimentary review, HAREEDS. I am very pleased that you enjoyed reading this one!
Comment from Leineco
Very nicely crafted re-telling of the iconic story :-) (you just had to chose a poet's brain, didn't you LOL).
Great final line! Along with life comes the stamp of original sin.
Nicely done :-)
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2014
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Very nicely crafted re-telling of the iconic story :-) (you just had to chose a poet's brain, didn't you LOL).
Great final line! Along with life comes the stamp of original sin.
Nicely done :-)
Comment Written 11-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2014
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Ha ha, yeah, what other brain would do in under those conditions, Lorraine, LOL?
Thanks for the uplifting review.~Dean
Comment from Kingsland
Actually Frankenstein wasn't an evil creature. It was the fear of the people that made it so. I liked this story telling poem that creates a monster in killing mode. I enjoyed reading and writing this response for it... John
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2014
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Actually Frankenstein wasn't an evil creature. It was the fear of the people that made it so. I liked this story telling poem that creates a monster in killing mode. I enjoyed reading and writing this response for it... John
Comment Written 11-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2014
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Thanks, John, I appreciate your thoughts on the poem.
No, the Monster itself wasn't evil, yet it was created by a man, and not God who can infuse life with a soul, nor the power to discern good vs. evil. Hence, sin is all that would remain, and the meaning behind my poem.
Comment from RGstar
Good work, as usual, Dean.
A couple of small things not to spoil your depiction of Mary Shelly's Frankenstein;
''to create a living, breathing man from a corpse, my sole desire.''
Remember the rule...if you take the middle section away between two commas the rest must make an audible sentence.
Put a semicolon after corpse, you will be fine. :)
''The torso I chose had known few woes, my determination grim.''
and another after 'woes'
Painstaking work, Dean...sometimes many waver the process of a good write and the time it takes to complete. I reward this with a six, as The Frankenstein was my first scary experience on a TV :). You captured the mood, fully.
Good work.
RGstar
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2014
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Good work, as usual, Dean.
A couple of small things not to spoil your depiction of Mary Shelly's Frankenstein;
''to create a living, breathing man from a corpse, my sole desire.''
Remember the rule...if you take the middle section away between two commas the rest must make an audible sentence.
Put a semicolon after corpse, you will be fine. :)
''The torso I chose had known few woes, my determination grim.''
and another after 'woes'
Painstaking work, Dean...sometimes many waver the process of a good write and the time it takes to complete. I reward this with a six, as The Frankenstein was my first scary experience on a TV :). You captured the mood, fully.
Good work.
RGstar
Comment Written 11-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2014
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Thanks for your excellent suggestions and exceptional rating, Roy, and I will make those changes straight away. I should know better than that by now, one would think, LOL...
I truly appreciate it, my friend.~Dean